Smut Marathon 2018: Voting Round #4

The 39 remaining writers of the Smut Marathon 2018 had three weeks to come up with something hot for you, the readers, the voters. They have written, deleted, written again, changed words, let their stories rest and some even started all over again. A lot of hard work has gone into the stories you will read below.

Thank you to the authors who have sent in their assignments!

The assignment

The assignment for round 4 was:

Write a hot, erotic masturbation scene where your character uses a sex toy.
One character. One sex toy. No brand names.

I want sizzling hot stories; stories that will make the readers want to wank!!!

Your masturbation scene is a maximum of 300 words.

What should you do now?

masturbation drawingRead all entries – you have a week to do so – and vote for the three stories you find the best. You have to vote for three – no less, no more. Don’t forget to click the ‘Finish Survey’ button when you have made your choice!

Please note:

  • Writers are not allowed to tell anyone which entry they have written!
  • You can only vote once.
  • The voting round closes on 5 May 2018 at 23.00 CET (Amsterdam time).
  • Results of the voting round will be published on this site on 6 May 2018 and then I will announce the author of each masturbation scene.
  • Only 30 authors will go through to round 5, which means at the end of this round 4 writers will be knocked out of the Smut Marathon 2018. We started with 39 writers for round 4, but unfortunately 5 of them had not sent in their assignments, for various reasons.
  • Please note that entries are not placed in the order in which they have been received. I use a randomizer to order the entries.

One last thing

I know it’s a lot to read and even more to ask, but it would be lovely if you could leave as much feedback as possible on the entries, or to make it more manageable, please leave feedback on the three entries you chose as well as three entries you have not chosen. Make sure your feedback is composed in such a way that the writers can learn something from it. This will be highly appreciated.
(Feedback can be left in the comments section at the bottom of this post. Comments will only be approved after the voting round has closed.)

Enjoy reading and start voting!

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~ Marie Rebelle


1) Three Fingers Deep

I slip into the dressing rooms of the local department store. They are busy today and that makes what I need to do even hotter. The voices carry over the tops of the stalls talking about clothes and chatting on phones. No one notices that I am in the stall closest to the entrance. My door just happens to be unlocked as well for added excitement and I am completely naked for anyone to see who might accidentally enter.

I sit on the cushioned seat and my fingers start pinching and pulling at my nipples. Moaning low, I move my right hand lower and rub my clit, my pussy already wet and needy, I rub hard and fast. I spread my legs wider. I hear doors opening and closing and people walking past mine. The rush is unbelievable and a gush of cum coats my fingers from my excitement and I begin to plunge two fingers into my pussy then three when two just isn’t enough. Just as I start building toward that ultimate peak, my door rattles but it doesn’t open adding to that thrill. I moan needing more. I grab my large dragon shaped dildo and push it deep inside. Increasing the speed of that big cock, I fuck myself harder and faster until that pinnacle I need is within reach, I close my eyes and feel the naughtiness of all of this, and that’s all it takes for me. My eyes drift closed, moans escape my lips, my back arches, the dildo deep in my pussy, I cum squirting and coating everything. I keep pushing that textured, tapered wonder in and out causing beautiful aftershocks to jolt through my system. Wondering who might have heard, I lick my fingers, enjoying the last moments of my naughty outing.


2) Clear Blue Sky

He had fucked her, quickly, bent over the pile of his belongings. Those boxes and that hasty fuck was the last of their life together, the last of her submission to him. She locked the door and turned to look at the sunlit apartment: it was hers again, no longer ruled by him, no longer the cage it had become. He hadn’t let her come, and now, in the wake of his slapdash orgasm, she was hungry for her own. She rummaged in a drawer for a dildo, curved blue glass, sparkling in the afternoon brightness. She pulled an armchair across the bedroom, stepped out of her dress and sat down to look at the view. The city moved beneath her like a machine, but her eyes were on the sky as she sat back, naked, exposed to anyone who might look. She spread her legs, her cunt sodden at the thrill of her own pleasure, of the exposure, of the way the sun felt on her skin. She placed her bare feet on the warm glass of the window and plunged the dildo into herself, pummeling her cunt hard and fast, hungry for the waves of pleasure. Her lips and clit were swollen and slick as she watched the blue glass disappear into her body over and over. Panting, she slapped at her wet mound as she impaled herself. Relentless, hell bent on taking back her orgasm, she began to sweat and moan, her own voice goading her on. With one final thrust of the smooth glass she came, squirting triumphantly, roaring, her face tear-streaked, the glass in front of her dripping with her orgasm. Shaking, she dropped the dildo and sank back into the chair. She smiled at the wide-open blue sky above the city. She was free.


3) Role Model

When Clara breathes, her exhales are heavy with whispers of babygirl, a pleading command directed at another woman who’s a thousand miles away. She works the wand against herself with the same brutal efficiency she uses to wield wrenches and hoist weights, muscles tensing from her arms to her core as she moves her body into the oppressive force. She’s wet, sheets wrecked beneath her, but her orgasm isn’t coming to fruition – and it won’t, not for a month, not until Clara’s grinding on the mouth smiling back at her from her phone screen.

“You look so good, Mommi,” her sub croons, kitty bell jingling softly at her throat as she shifts off-screen. She resurfaces sipping a glass of wine.

Clara grits out a laugh, moving the wand’s shuddering head lower, her cunt flexing with the misguided desire to cram it inside – she’s aching, two weeks already on the edge and nothing to show for it but a few ruined orgasms for her kitten’s pleased little giggles. “I’ll look better punishing you for testing me,” she promises, baring her teeth briefly while she moves the wand back over her swollen clit. Her labia envelops the trembling silicone and all she can feel is thunderous need.

“I know,” purrs her sub, lips lingering at the rim of her glass. Clara wants to slap it away from her so that her impertinent mouth can be put to better use, but all she can do is grip her phone and trust the case is capable of enduring her frustration.

Clara drops her head back against the pillows, focusing instead on the constant drone of sensation. Orgasm roils temptingly just beneath the steady throb – she could sneak one if she wanted, if she disguised her throes.

But she needs to set a good example.


4) Playing with Magic

Sylvia lies on the bed, rubbing her nipples in soft slow circles. Her other hand trails over her belly, fingertips barely touching her skin, tracing a path to her thighs where she opens her legs, feeling her own heat drifting up.

She slides the switch, and the dull rumble of her wand vibrates through her hand. She circles it around her tits, slowly edging it toward her nipples. Passing the head of the wand over one pebbled nipple, the trick, she’d found, was using the lightest pressure from the wand just enough to make her nerves send spasms from chest to cunt. She keeps the wand moving slowly, feeling her thighs grow damp.

Letting the wand trace the path her fingers had, she rests it against her mons, writhing as the vibration travels through to her waiting clit. She bites her lip, and skims the smooth silicone wand up and down her inner thighs, before pressing the speed control, increasing the vibration.

Finally she slides the bulbous head of the wand between her thighs. With its size, she cannot easily avoid her clit, but she starts low letting her juices coat its head as she moves it up. The vibrations transferring through her body drew a groan from her throat. As it contacts her clit, her body spasms. She keeps the wand in place, gasping and crying out. Her pussy tightens and her nerves fire. She curls around herself, keeping the wand in place, crying out wordlessly, as the orgasm swells up through her belly, and the wand slips from her fingers.


5) Little silver bullet

The window is open, just a little. In the garden, her parents and their friends, Dan and Sylvie, barbecue.

She has slipped away, tipsy on the glass of wine they gave her, the right to leave the table a lingering childhood privilege even as they acknowledge the onset of adulthood by letting her drink.

Earlier, she’d been in town with her friends. They’d bought the usual – cheap shoes, make up, whatever was on sale in Topshop. Then, as they’d walked through the precinct, past the bright, pink-tinted display that everyone always gazed at longingly, Gemma had taunted, ‘Bet you’re too chicken to buy one.’

‘I am not.’

Inside the store though, everything cost a fortune. The only thing she could afford was a little silver bullet (she knew what to look for – she’d been researching online for months). She brazened it out at the cash desk, flashed the proof of her daring at Gem, tucked her prize away in her handbag.

Now, she is lying on her bed, legs spread, knickers round her ankles. Too impatient to remove the rest of her clothes, too desperate to worry about whether or not the buzzing can be heard. It feels like she’s been waiting her whole life to know what it feels like to do this with something other than her fingers.

She twists the metal casing, presses the cool, slim cartridge to her clit. The relief is almost unbearable.

Downstairs, she can hear Dan talking to her dad, hear the soft lilt of his Geordie accent, the warmth of his laughter.

Upstairs, she thinks of kissing him, pictures his hands on her body. And, as the combination of those thoughts and the steady rumble of her new toy carry her over the edge, her legs stiffen, and she comes.


6) Please Let Me

I spread my legs and imagine it is his hand teasing me, his hand on me rubbing my cunt. My fingers search for my clit then immediately pull back. He would not give in to my desires so easily so I can’t either. I rub gently but my clit is anxious for attention, straining to peek out just enough. I moan, tormented by the nearness yet knowing it is too soon. He may not be here but it is his voice guiding me, letting me know when I am going too fast or when it is okay for more. He alone controls me, deciding when or if I will be given reprieve. For now there is only the tease.

My hand moves low again, a finger circles my anus; pressure without entry. A faint whimper escapes. Every inch of me electrified nerve ends waiting for that magic moment that pushes me over the edge sending them into an overexcited frenzy.

Please. I’m ready. Please let me cum, Daddy. Please let me cum for you. Please!

I beg him for release. I beg him even though he isn’t here, even though he can not answer.

Please, Daddy.

I pull the wand from our nightstand and push it hard against my clit. The low rumble barely begins when I feel the wave of release washing over me. My breath catches and I let out a soundless scream, as my orgasm bursts forward.


7) The Scent of Them

“So fucking sexy.”

The words carry her to the bed, caressing her body as she slips between the sheets. Their scents linger on the pillows, his cedar cologne and her mango perfume. She breathes them in and lets the smells rouse her.

“Spread your legs, let me see your cunt.”

The words move her to obey. She spreads her legs, parting her labia and circling her clit.

“You’re wet, aren’t you? Show me.”

She plunges two fingers in, coating both digits. Lifting them, the air cools them as she displays her juices. She sucks them into her mouth, licking each clean.

“Fuck yourself.”

Rolling over, she opens the drawer and pulls out the fat dildo under the tissues and notecards. She brings it to her nose and inhales, moaning at the hint of cunt.

She glides it between her labia, wetting it and teasing her clit. The dildo sinks inside, the glass warming as she holds it in her body. Pulling it out, she digs her heels in and lifts her hips as she thrusts it back in. Each thrust is rougher, perfect to make her soar.

“God, that cunt. I bet it feels good, I bet it would grip my cock hard.”

Her body flutters around the dildo, gripping it like she longs to grip him. She pinches her nipple and rockets over the edge with a jagged cry. As she spasms, her come pools under her ass, soaking their sheets.

“Good girl.”

She lay for a moment, thinking of them. When her heart slows, she returns Sara’s dildo to the drawer and rises from the bed. Silence descends as she turns off the recording of Dave’s voice.

They’ll be back from vacation tomorrow, leaving time for her come to dry. Her scent should mingle perfectly with theirs.


8) A hot day

Anne opened the door with relief, placing her bag and jacket on a chair before going upstairs. Thighs rubbing together she smelt the aroma of her own scent mixed with the residue of a hot day. The weather, plus messages exchanged with her new lover.

She unbuttoned her blouse and slid down her skirt zip, dropping both to the bedroom floor. Next she unhooked her bra and flung it on top. Naked she considered her options, shower or bed?

Deciding on the latter she took a vibrator from the bedside drawer. Boy was she turned on; it has been impossible to concentrate today.

She lay on the bed so she could see her reflection in the mirror. Opening her legs wide she slid the cock-sized toy into her slick hole. She particularly liked its shape, the angle perfect for the g-spot orgasm she craved.

As it sprung to life, she closed her eyes, allowing the vibrations to pulse through her body and the anticipated eruption of her pent up frustrations. Increasing the toy’s speed, her body immediately began to convulse and spasm.

Stilling the toy, she allowed herself to enjoy the fullness it gave her, now she fucked herself. She placed a hand between her legs, rapidly stoking the hard protruding clitoris.

Face flushed and chest heaving, Anne pulled out the vibe but continued to rub her clit with wet fingers before grinding her cunt against the hardness of the toy. She pulled her legs together and clenched it to her. Finally, the waves of orgasm hit, she relaxed her muscles allowing the convulsions to engulf her body. She rolled onto her tummy to enjoy the final moments of pleasure.

At last she rose from the bed and headed to the shower; in half hour her hot date would arrive.


9) Ready for You

“Fuck it harder, pathetic little bitch!”

Your malevolent growls are in my head, but they still make me whimper.
Still make me tense my thighs to take myself higher before I slam my arse back down to the floor. My cunt swallows the last inch of the dildo I’ve been striving to conquer. I cover my mouth to stifle a victorious smile.

As my legs pump my whole body up and down, I drag my hand down my neck.
Nails gouge into sweat-soaked skin, clawed fingers close around my throat. I can’t choke myself, so I hold my breath until fire fills my lungs and dark spots pop behind my eyelids.

I can hear my cunt. It makes a wet, sucking sound each time it slides down the dildo. My stomach muscles ache with exertion. My tits bounce heavily, and I remember how you’d glared at them. How you’d grabbed them, crushing them until they turned an ugly shade of purple.

It was my pained sob that undid you then, and now, remembering how you responded will undo me.

The sudden coldness of wet wall tiles against my back shocks me. Yanking the suction cup from the floor, I snap a nail. Just like you did with your cock, I give myself one, bruising thud in the jaw, coating my face in my own jizz before ramming the fat tip of the dildo down my throat. I hold it there, motionless, until saliva trickles from my nose.

My fingers work my clit until, finally, my cunt clenches. Hovering the dildo – cloned from your cock – above my tits, I squeeze the cumtube plunger with all the rage I wish I could squeeze your balls with.

I know you’ll come for me soon, but I’m not worried. I’m ready for you now.


10) The Private Show

The scene was set. The full-length mirror stood waiting at the end of the bed, a steel beaded dildo shimmered with lubricant and Clarissa was in a pose that revealed every crevice of intimate flesh in the mirror’s reflection. There she was no longer Clarissa, she was the cam model of her sexual dreams. The one her unaroused self would never consider allowing her to be: The mirror was the camera and she was the star of her own porn show.

With one hand clutching the dildo, her other teasingly explored her body. Fingertips grazing her widespread thighs and dancing over every curve as they made their way to her blushing nipples. Biting her plump lower lip, Clarissa pinched, rolled, grabbed and massaged her breasts until her cunt began to glisten in the reflective glass. With moans of pleasure saved only for her private shows, her fingers stroked her cunt, spreading the slippery fluid over every yearning fold.

Clarissa took the cool, metal dildo and slowly stroked it over her labia, following the wet path to her ass. As it naturally dipped into her body, she forced the smallest steel bead in, her asshole stretching then clasping at the hard metal. Her other hand vigorously rubbed her clit, sliding over the desperate flesh as her cunt began to soak her, liquid dripping down the crevice of her body to the dildo between her spread cheeks. Pressing on the steel, her ass stretched to take in a larger bead, making her call out incoherently in appreciative pain. The resulting orgasm thundered through every nerve of her body. Intense pulsations that forced the dildo out of her body. Clarissa watched her reflection intently, taking in every throbbing movement of her cunt and every drip of creamy fluid.

That was quite a show.


11) Muscle Memory

A slick of lube and she eased in the dildo, mind drifting back to the first time he fucked her. His hand rested on her neck as he growled, “you’re mine, little slut” into her ear. Her cunt clenched at the memory and the dildo slid in more easily. It wasn’t his rigid cock, all warm flesh and earthy scent filling her with punishing thrusts, but it would have to do.

She seesawed the dildo back and forth, catching her G-spot. She wished it were his fingers, thumb resting against her clit whilst he played her in a ‘come hither’ motion. She always did obey.

Surprised to find her clit engorged, she circled it in slow deliberate movements. He used to do that, alternating with sharp squeezes to make her cry out in pleasure-pain. She took a tentative pinch. It wasn’t the same, but a small thrill ran through her cunt as she and her body remembered.

She thought of the other things he used to do. Spank her until tears streamed down her cheeks. Fuck her face until he came in a roar. Pinch her nipples so hard she almost forgot to breathe.

Letting go of the dildo, she pinched both her nipples, gasping at the pain. He would grip without mercy, rolling the sharp nubs between finger and thumb; the different sensations transforming into something that made her clench with urgent need.

Her fingers were a pale imitation of his, yet her cunt spasmed, muscle memory kicking in. She thrust the dildo faster, circling her clit with increased speed and pressure. Without warning, her whole body tensed, and waves of orgasm crashed over her until she thought she’d drown.

Tears streamed down her face. It wasn’t the same when she did it, but it would have to do.


12) The Maid

Lucy places the silver fork on the white linen napkin, brushing her fingers lightly over the sharp tines. She imagines his strong brown fingers gripping the fork and feels a liquid clench deep in her belly. His beautiful dark eyes fill her thoughts, the way his gaze skims over her lips when he gives her directions. She moans slightly and leans on the table, catching her reflection in the silver spoon. This smooth belled curve of spoon will soon be in his mouth as he sips the clear consommé the cook has been sweating over all day. Lucy grips the spoon and looks quickly around the room. She is alone, the last of the house staff readying the table before the big party. She reaches under her skirt and slides the heavy silver spoon up her leg.

A molten heat spreads through her core and her legs shake as she imagines his hands instead of the spoon, running softly over her skin, pausing at the top of her thighs and then easing over her panties. Lucy presses the warm hard spoon firmly against her swollen lips and gasps, wishing for his fingers to slide around her slippery nub. Tapping the spoon hard against her soaking pussy, she thinks of his fingers plunging inside her and then with one hard thwack against her clit, she cums in a soaking rush, the spoon wedged deep between her lips as her body pulses.

As her orgasm subsides she lifts the spoon to the light. Her juices coat the spoon and drip down the handle. Lucy licks the spoon, tasting her musky heat, and then wipes the spoon down with her apron. smiling as she places it neatly by his plate. That consommé is going to be delicious.


13) Simulated Lover

I stroked myself as I looked down at my silicone lover for the evening. Between it’s two large, pink mounds of badonkadonk I had my choice of holes to penetrate. A choice I already made when I lubed it’s flesh-like vulva. It sat on my bed, facing up at me with the illusion of a lover presenting herself, while I sat in front of it, ready to mount it. I swiped through my phone with one hand as the other groped a silicone cheek. Finding the right video on my phone, I hit play and set it down to watch.

The woman on the video is moaning loudly as she’s bent over in front of the cameraman, who slaps into her ass as his hips thrust into her from behind. Her cries of ravenous pleasure impel me to move my hips forward and penetrate the slick lips of the toy’s opening. Keeping my eyes on the sensual woman on the screen, I thrust into my simulated lover as I imagine her. My hands long to hold her hips, but I grab the sides as I slide deeper. I see the woman get flipped on her back and wish I had been the one manhandling her.

I keep moving my hips into my surrogate girlfriend and feel my pleasure build as she’s penetrated. My grip on the buttocks tightened as I pegged the toy more. The woman changes her expression and cries out as she climaxes in sweet agony. I am almost immediately pushed over the edge and release hot spurts of my cum inside cold, fabricated flesh. As my body releases, and I pull out my spent cock, I silently berate myself. If ever my ex-girlfriend knew I still masturbated to the video I took of her.


14) All That Remains

You’ll think me cruel, but even now I find it hot to recall just how uncomfortable you found the whole process at the time. “Goop – there’s goop on my cock,” you said, and I smiled in mock sympathy while I lathered on the rest of the moulding gel and tugged gently at your balls, silently praying you’d stay hard for just a few more minutes. Long enough for it to set.

No-one told me grief would feel this horny. Strong emotions breed strong emotions, I guess. Either way, I’m here now with your cold, hard, only-slightly-misshapen erection in my cunt, and it feels a hundred times better than any of the fancy silicone dildos gathering dust in my bedside drawer.

How much better? You remember the way I used to clench your dick each time you paused mid-stroke and just pressed it inside me? How your noises – stop, whoa, go easy, that’s too much – only made me do it even harder? Well I’m squeezing this fat fucking toy now for the same reason I squeezed you then: because I can’t stop.

I’m squatting on the spare room floor, in front of that big mirror your mum gave us, looking straight through myself. I’ve been here so long that my clit and knees are rubbed raw, and still my cunt aches for something solid. Meekly, mechanically, I comply.

Will I wear you out like this? Your weight feels glorious, but I worry, my love! Can that obnoxious girth survive the desperate way I’m grinding onto it? Each time I allow myself to come, the torrent of jizz you force out of me feels like white water on rock, smoothing it down till there’s nothing left.

And I hate that. I don’t want you to be gone.

But I really can’t stop.


15) Blue Boyfriend

Jenna stripped down quickly and hopped into bed. She reached across the rumpled sheets and retrieved a blue drawstring bag from her nightstand drawer.

She opened the bag and slid out a bright blue vibrator. It was one of her favorites – thick, with a round head and a strong motor. She ran her fingers along its surface, feeling a rush of wetness between her legs. Settling back against the pillows, Jenna reached down and touched her throbbing clit, gasping with desire. She dipped two of her fingers inside herself, then brought her wet fingers to her mouth, tasting her inner sweetness as she sucked her fingers clean.

Jenna pressed the vibrator’s tip to her clit and turned it on. The low vibrations on her aching flesh made her arch her back and moan. She slipped it inside and increased the power, feeling the vibrations pulse throughout her body. Her muscles clenched around the vibrator’s shaft as she began to thrust, slowly at first and then faster. Jenna moaned louder, squirming on the bed, fucking herself. Waves of pleasure washed through her body. She cried out and bit her lip, fingers grasping the sheets, as her cunt contracted harder around the toy. Hovering on the brink of orgasm, she pulled the drenched vibrator out and pressed it onto her clit.

Her orgasm rocked her, causing Jenna to scream uncontrollably. Tears fell from her tightly closed eyes as she came over and over, climaxing intensely. With a final scream and shudder she turned it off, exhausted. She waited a few minutes until her muscles stopped clenching and slid the vibrator out. Her clit still throbbed, and as the toy touched it she gave another gasp. Spent, she tossed it on the bed next to her and closed her eyes in satisfaction.


16) Selena’s Interlude

It was a meeting-after-meeting kind of day, and Selena was enjoying a short respite in her cubicle office. She was scheduled to present at 2:30, which meant she had exactly 15 minutes to sip a cup of tea, inhale a protein bar, and do something about this incessant twitching between her thighs.

After an unexpected wake-up fuck from Jake, Selena had been horny all day. She couldn’t shake the visual of his taut abs and tan skin, and every time she thought of him, her panties got just a little wetter.

Her phone notification went off, and she looked at the message: a very welcome dick pic from Jake. He was at his desk, cock hard and impressive against the wool of his slacks.

She backed out of her texts and into her apps, selecting her vibrator. Placing her phone up her skirt and between her legs, she sat up straight in her chair, pressing herself into the thrumming pulse. Slowly and methodically, she moved her pelvis back and forth, then in small controlled circles, closing her eyes and concentrating on the muscles in and around her cunt. She could will herself to come if she relaxed her mind and contracted and released in just the right ways. With her back to the entrance of her cubicle, it was hard to tell she was up to anything, as she squeezed her breasts and pinched her nipples through her shirt and bra.

The orgasm built, small and sure, just beneath her clitoris, and Selena bit her lip to keep from crying out. She pinched her nipples hard, arching her back and grinding her clit against the edge of the vibrating electronic. Her orgasm came, swift and superficial, but it would be enough to get her through the afternoon.


17) Ride the Train

On a rainy day she boards the train with everyone else, choosing an empty bench with a seat by the window. Close to the center doors where the other passengers could see her if they looked.

She slides her hand into her raincoat pocket and palms the cool, small bit of plastic. She taps a button lightly with her fingertip, a move imperceptible under the thick raincoat material. She closes her eyes as she first feels the familiar vibration deep inside her. She inhales deeply, as if steeling herself for a task of great concentration.

She opens her eyes and looks immediately out the window, fighting to keep her face placid as she stares at the spring landscape rushing by, greener than it was a week ago but not yet summer lush.

She’d started in one of the more private back seats of the train but as time went on she worked up her courage, and improved her technique, so she moved closer to the other passengers. Rush-hour commuters too busy with their phones to notice anything. She prefers tourists. Tourists look around the train in awe, and in search of maps and the name of the next stop.

Her cheeks flush as the heat unfurls from her center. She taps the button to make the vibrations faster, harder. Her breath catches slightly. She glances around the train at the other passengers. She always gets to the point where she’s too caught up to care if anyone notices. No one has ever said anything to her.

She closes her eyes again and breathes deeply to control her breath. Her body is hot. She clenches her teeth. As the climax roils through her body she exhales slowly yet forcefully.

She taps the button. The train stops. Ride over.


18) The Gag

Green eyes level in the mirror, he assesses the sharp planes of his face. His hands below the mirror’s frame tremble, clenched tight around the toy. His plump lips part in anticipation. Kissable lips, unparalleled. Sometimes he’s so turned on by himself he doesn’t know what to do.

He’s losing courage, though. He’s never done anything kinky before. He draws in a breath, reaches up and shoves the ball gag between his lips and teeth. He fumbles the leather straps, takes too long on the buckle—when he’s done he’s hard. His cock presses through his boxers against the counter top.

He thinks, I shouldn’t look so pretty, not with my mouth forced open, that big lurid ball framed by helpless lips. But I do. His jaw is already starting to ache from the unfamiliarity. He tries to talk, to say ‘hello’ to himself, and it’s garbled. Words turn to groans, hips twitch forward, gently grinding his cock on the counter. He can’t stop making sounds, can’t stop how delicious they sound. Saliva collects in his mouth, and he can’t swallow with the angle his head’s at, staring at his face and the gag in the mirror.

It’s going to happen, he thinks. It’s going to happen and it’ll be humiliating, and it’s even more than that, it’s feeling powerless and lost when the first delicate bead of drools slides over his round bottom lip. He can’t look away. His breath bubbles more saliva out. Now many strings slop down to his chest, pooling in the hollow of his throat. His hand pulls down his boxers before he can stop himself, and it’s only a few strokes before he comes all over his counter, gasping helplessly through the gag.


19) The Dream

Awake, but still in my dream, I tumble from my bed and go to the kitchen, where there are spices to be ground.

From the spice cupboard I take some precious cardamom seeds. Then I let them fall like hailstones into the mortar. I press down on them with the wooden pestle and as they crack apart, releasing their exotic lemon-like fragrance, I realise my dream will not let go of me.

A dream, brimful of country matters with my lusty master, who presently is travelling in the Low Countries. But I am in need of pleasure at this very moment and so with a brush of my hand I remove the remains of cardamom from the thick rounded end of the pestle and take it into my mouth like a wanton succubus.

Sitting on the kitchen chair I lift my linen shift and feel the heavy dew about my lips before gently finger dipping my cunt. Then my fingers make way for the ever constant pestle. I do not take it all, as patience is often a virtue. Instead, after a few moments I retrieve it and taste my sweet and pungent juices which besmear its head.

But the time to strike is now, so I plunge the shaft deep inside me. I shudder. My other hand, close by, dances attendance upon my pleasure. My breathing becomes shallow and I whimper with delight as the pestle seems to swell like my master’s cock. Until at last, ecstasy, a visit from a long forgotten friend, arrives and sends me wild and whirling into breathless abandonment.

Through weary eyes I see my pleasured nakedness illuminated by a moted sunbeam come newly through the window.

The pestle drops onto the icy flagstones and stirs me from my reverie.


20) Her Little Frog

Being a cam girl, you do things to make yourself unique. From room decor, to theme nights you, to hair, make up and even tattoos.Being a cam girl and doing well at it almost requires you think of yourself as brand, and product. I, over the years, have developed a look. Neon yet goth. Cute, yet scary, all my clothes reflected this. Today I was wearing my patent leather pentagram chest harness and pink see through panties .

I knew my watcher would have stripped fairly quick, he usually wastes no time. Not on Froggy Friday.

Fr0g: Pull your pants half down then turn so I can see.

On my hands and knees with my panties half down I turned toward the camera showing him my pussy. Sometimes, in my head, I pretended this was an intense game of Simon Says. I don’t know why, I liked feeling danger I guess. Pressing a vibrating wand with a cartoonish frog handle just was dirty, it wasn’t…Liam Neeson saving the day danger, but in my mind, that’s what we were.
If I did not please Fr0g or cum then boom
The thought made me gasp, I turned up the speed feeling my clit shake a little.

Fr0g: Go on cum, for me.

My thighs gripped the toy tighter. I bit my bottom lip. My whole world twitched with my pussy for a minute or two.

“Fuck.”


21) All By Herself

Emma’s hands glide over her soft skin. She moans, softly, as she cups her breasts and begins to caress them. Her nipples stiffen, and Emma closes her eyes; murmuring in dreamy contentment as she teases them; pinching and tugging them gently before allowing her hands to travel.

Tentatively, Emma slides a finger between her labia, tracing the warm, moisture on their surface. Unconsciously she raises it to her mouth, tasting herself; savouring her own rich, intoxicating flavour.

Emma’s fingers return, teasing her clit, sliding between her silken lower lips. The excitement mounts inexorably, contractions grip, Emma’s heart pounds. Not yet! Slow down! Make it last… Reluctantly her hand retreats from her clit and again, she licks her fingers clean.

Fire burns. Emma’s body is alive with expectation of release as she caresses herself all over. Like iron to a magnet her fingers are unconsciously drawn towards her clit and she needs every ounce of willpower she possesses to prevent them from finding their goal.

Picking up the long, thick, heavily veined latex cock she had chosen just for this moment, Emma slowly slides it into her cunt, relishing every delicious inch as it slowly fills and stretches her. She begins to fuck herself, slowly at first, but with increasing force. Her passion now owns her; her body, of its own volition, moves steadily towards the impending climax.

Emma can feel her climax approaching. The fire inside her builds to an inferno as she fucks herself harder. Her breathing quickens. Her womb contracts. Her body begins to shake. She tries to resist.

The dam suddenly bursts. Emma cries out as wave after wave of orgasmic pleasure washes over her. Her body shudders as, with tears of joy in her eyes, Emma allows herself to let go, letting her climax slowly dissipate.


22) Open-Door Policy

If I’m supposed to feel guilty, I don’t. I might be a little embarrassed if I get caught, but that’s not the same thing. Maybe he’s hoping to catch me…

We’ve been roommates for nine months. We’ve fallen into an understanding: if the door’s open, come on in. We borrow books, we borrow clothes, even if he’s getting a tummy and can’t fit in many of my shirts. His door was open, so I’m borrowing his vibrating dildo. What’s a straight guy need with one of those anyhow?

I’m not in love with him, God no. It’s not even a crush. I’m… what am I? Fascinated, maybe. By the haphazard arrangement of his outsized facial features, his frenzied Medusa snakes of hair. The little airless room reeks of him; of stale smoke and sweaty feet and hard-worn jeans too long unwashed, a familiar stink that coaxes me stiff faster than if he’d been stroking me himself. I find lotion—within easy reach, by what? Certainly not coincidence—and ready both my pucker and his proxy.

I put my feet in the air and slide his handheld, hard rubber dong up inside me. I grope for the small switch, nearly faint from the jolt of joy that racks my body when I flick it. Each pulse radiates pleasure from my prostate to the farthest reaches of my erotic imagination, which is wiped clean of every tepid turn-on I once entertained and instead now bursts and swirls with visions of him, remembered or wholly fantasized, I can’t be bothered to care. The dildo drills me, buzzing a beat ‘bout to blow my mind. I’m dying to come, but desperate for more shivering stimulation—an impossible choice, made for me when he steps into the room and my load surges to greet him.


23) Laundry Day

I’m filling the washing machine when my fingertips slip over silk. Her knickers drip from my hand, purple gossamer flows over my fingers. I feel my cock twitch, stir. I bury my nose in the crotch, breathe.

My head swims, fills with the sweet, sharp tang of cunt and sweat. My stiffening manhood presses painfully against my jeans. I unzip myself, hard cock leaping free, testing the air. I stroke myself, rub my thumb over the engorged head. I squeeze the glans, teasing sticky tears of precum from my urethra.

I step out of my jeans, rubbing the precum between my fingers, coating them. The silk is cool as I wrap the knickers around my fat, hard shaft, start wanking. Reaching past my bunched scrotum, precum-lubed fingers tease the puckered eye of my arsehole. I shiver as a finger slips inside. I need this.

Moving to the bedroom, I rummage in the bedside table. Her vibrator is thick, purple as the pants moving over my cock. Squeezing lube into my palm, I smear it between my asscheeks, coat the tool. Gasp as I ease it into me. Just the tip at first. Then deeper. Twisting the knob at the base, tingles vibrate through me. My cock sings like a tuning fork. Kneeling on the bed, rocking back on my heels, I find that sweet spot. Slap and pinch my nipples as I wank my throbbing cock hard, fast, craving release. Silk whispers against my skin.

Shuddering, bucking to a climax, I fall back on the bed, spunk fountaining from me, pooling in the hairs of my chest, my belly. Her scent still in my nostrils, taste on my tongue, I mop myself with her knickers, throw them into the laundry, licking the last of my spunk from my fingers.


24) A Little Bit More

She hadn’t moved since he left, lying in the chaos of sheets they had left behind. Ellen’s body felt bruised and residual thrills of pleasure skated across her skin when she shifted position. She knew that she should get up but she wasn’t ready. She needed a little bit more.

Reaching into her bedside drawer, Ellen’s fingers soon touched the cold object she needed. This glass dildo was a favourite; different from her lover in every way but hard enough and long enough to wring out a final rush of pleasure.

She didn’t bother warming the toy, wanting it cold. Rubbing her fingers through her folds, Ellen spread the wetness left there deeper inside; her cum and his, merged together to create the best lube she knew. Her body was still so ready that the glass dildo slid inside with the slightest pressure, and she shuddered as her sensitive flesh squeezed around the unbending toy. Where her lover had been firm but flexible, warm and alive, the dildo felt alien and industrial. A tool to get her off.

Manipulating the dildo to bump the rounded head over her g-spot again and again, Ellen’s mind jumped between razor sharp memories of the fucking she had just experienced and the burning hot, visceral sensations flooding her body with each movement. She remembered how he had made her come by fucking her from behind, pushing his thumb into her arse to hold her steady. She arched her body harder against the dildo, it’s unyielding weight pushing back and resisting her grip. Pleasure built wave on wave, recollection stacked on new experience.

When the release she needed eventually came, Ellen cried out at the strength of this last orgasm that left her panting and winded. Finally, she was spent. Finally, she was satisfied.


25) Busy All Night

Jessie couldn’t find her earbuds. She thought Sean might’ve mistaken them for hers and put them in her dresser. She hadn’t, but a clean, smooth, nine-inch dildo and a small bottle of lube were in there. Sean had taken good care of it, and Jessie was sure it had taken good care of her.

She was soon naked on Sean’s bed and lubing the dildo, knowing that Sean could return any minute from swim practice. Jessie’s eyes widened and her breath stopped as it filled her pussy. She built up to a hard pounding and bit the palm of her free hand to keep her moans from alerting her neighbors. She grabbed the base with both hands and bit her bottom lip as she imagined Sean fucking her ass with the toy cock and eating her pussy.

She had to pull out the dildo for fear of passing out from the hard heat that shot up her spine as she squirted all over the toy and Sean’s bed. She giggled while she rubbed her clit and almost drifted into a happy sleep when her cell phone rang. Sean was calling.

Jessie answered, phone in one hand, sticky dildo in the other. “Hey.”
“Hey, I just wanted to let you know that I’m going over to Detroit to see Thundercat with Gina and just staying with her family.”
“Okay. Do you have my earbuds?”
“No. I put them in your gym bag.”
Jessie looked. They had fallen into one of her shoes.
“Got ‘em. When will you be back?”
“No later than one tomorrow. I have lab time reserved at two.”
“Okay. Have a good time.”
“Do you want to come with us?”
Jessie looked at the dildo. “No. I’m going to be busy all night.”


26) Royal Showmanship

Princess Lily, locked away in the fiercest dragon’s tallest tower, not content to wistfully stare out the window waiting, practiced her wood carving skills. The finished piece in front of her was perfection. It was girthy— like Lily preferred—and whittled with a slightly larger bulb at one end and an easy hand hold. Hours were spent smoothing out any rough edges.

With a self-satisfied smile, Lily hopped off the bed and rearranged the room to her liking. She pushed the bed so it faced the window and anyone looking could see her endeavours (not that they could, but the illusion mattered), quickly shedding her clothes.

Lily propped herself up on the bed, already aroused at what she was about to do. She spread her legs wide, facing the window, as her fingers started tweaking nipples, hands squeezing the fullness of her breasts. While one hand stayed preoccupied, the other roved down to her clit, finding it quickly. Her fingers worked in circles, larger ones spiraling smaller, until her muscles started tensing. Lily was overcome with the need to be filled. Grabbing her wooden creation, it slid in easily, wetness and arousal smoothing the insertion. Fingers still working her clit, Lily thrust the phallus into her, bottoming it out. Moans filled the small room, and Lily felt vivified. With a final thrust, Lily tensed and squeezed around the makeshift cock, pleasure laid bare for her imaginary audience.

Shaking a little, she removed the implement from inside her, closed her eyes and collapsed against the bed. After a brief respite, her fingers trailed down to her still-present arousal and, with a content sigh, she slowly started again. She had plenty of alone time for experimentation.

Downstairs, in his gold-laden lair, the dragon rolled his eyes, because she was at it again.


27) Waiting for Delivery

Nothing worse than waiting. You enter your credit card information and hit ‘Place Order’. Some purchases are not so unusual and it’s a nice surprise when they arrive. But not this one. The one item you have most wanted to experience, the wait is excruciating. You track the progress online, then a notice of delivery arrives.

A blade slices the tape on the package and you unwrap your prize. A plastic tube with a sleeve on one end, rubber hose with a squeeze bulb the other. You’ve planned for this event, a black and white Polaroid of your ex-wife trying to look sexy in her first lingerie outfit. Her little titties in that pink lace bra you chose always arouses you. Towel and lube at hand.

You’re uncertain what to expect as you disrobe, heart thumping. Penis is semi-erect as you surround the hole in the sleeve with gel and push your glans against the mouth. It doesn’t fit so you start squeezing the bulb and watch in fascination as your penis sucks into and up the tube expanding as it elongates. The sensation intensifies as you pump and waves of pleasure overtake, you pulsing up from your scrotum through the shaft to the head. You remember sucking her nipples, sensing them harden between your teeth, nipping each as she tugged on your balls. Working the pump, breathing labored, hips bucking. Inflated dick inside, one testicle being sucked in, painful, use the release button, cock deflating. Pumped again, extreme pleasure, thinking of how she moaned as you fucked her, screamed when you shoved your cock into her asshole, loved when you spanked her ass. Beside yourself now, released from the cylinder you caress your shaft till you ejaculate.

Satiated, the penis pump a triumph.


28) Punished…Mew Pfft Pfft

I’m not allowed in the big bed tonight. Sir had to chase me all over the house because I stole the W-2s. Taxes are boooooring, and I wanted to play. He says I need to learn patience.

I could hear Sir’s gentle snores and considered yowling until he checked on me. BUT then I would be double punished. I decided to soothe myself to sleep. I hooked my toes through the bars of my cage, arched my back, and stretched. My hand snuck into my panties to pet the tiny patch of kitty-fur. A naughty finger slipped along my slit and traced my soft folds. Grooowl. My paws were too dainty, and though my claws left perfect scratches down Sir’s back, they weren’t right for kitty pleasure.

I rolled on my side and felt my eyes well up with tears. I wanted Sir. I started to meow but then noticed our flogger on the ground. I batted at the falls and dragged it into my cage. The soft suede tickled my little nipples until they begged to be flicked. Bad kitty. I whipped my tits harder and harder until they were laced with red. My mewling was loud so I perked my ears to listen while dangling the toy in my face. The leather smelled like Sir. I licked the handle. It tasted like Sir. My pussy’s throbbing intensified, and I felt bold. I plunged the handle deep into my wet cunt and rocked against the stiff leather wrapped handle. I ground my heels into the bottom of my cage and created a rhythm of frantic energy. More. The only consciousness I knew was pleasure. More! Wave after wave of shuddery bliss rocked my core as images of Sir blitzed my animal brain. Morrreeeeeeow!

The overhead light clicked on.

Oopsie.


29) 1+2=5

The way John held the curved edges of the podium: his hands gripping Paula’s ass as he pounded her from behind. Lucy’s tight ribbon mouth: challenging her heterosexuality, saucy tongue pumping into her pussy. Since rooming with her co-workers, Paula fantasized constantly, racing to beat them home.

Dolly and Paula stood breast-to-breast like dance partners, nipples a breath apart. Paula’s cunt melted as she traced her tongue around her soft mouth. She squeezed Dolly’s ass and pulled her closer, static from her fabric body sparking Paula’s skin.

But there was always something missing when you tried to make it with your roommate’s dressmaker mannequin. Unsure who she wanted more, Paula’d fuck John and Lucy both, whether they knew it or not.

Paula dragged the form into Lucy’s room and pushed her onto the bed. Dug around in the dresser for Lucy’s latest toy: tiny shorts with a not-so-tiny appendage bouncing off the front. Big, hard, black. Like John.

The strap-on slipped easily over PseudoLucy’s hips, its massive dildo stretching toward the ceiling. Straddling her makeshift lover, Paula pinned her arms to the mattress and reared back, allowing RubberJohn to tease her lips and clit. Easing down, the cock massaged her as she adjusted for its girth. She leaned back, grinding in tight, wet circles. Orgasm thundering just out of reach, she rose up so the dildo’s head could taunt her hole. Grazing her clit with two fingers, her moans drowned out the click of the front door.

A flash at the doorway froze her mid-fuck. Lucy and John—the real deals—stood in the doorway, Lucy’s hand around John’s actual cock.

It was equally massive as the rubber stand-in. But not as big as their growing smiles. “Mind if we join you?” Lucy’s ribbon mouth said the magic words.


30) In Loco Penis

We’re pulling out of Carlisle, an hour from Glasgow. No-one else in first class except the businessman at the far end. He hasn’t looked at me since I boarded. He looked then. He disapproved of my skirt.
Trains make me horny: it’s the rhythm and the boredom. My mind wanders; south, usually. So I always keep a little straddle-style vibrator in my bag. It’s discreet, apart from the buzz. Mr Disapproval isn’t looking when I bob up to slip it under me or when I wriggle to get it positioned.
He’s looking now. I’ve switched it on, strong pulses alternating between my clit and cunt.
Can he hear? Would he recognise that sound, know what I’m doing? He’d be outraged. He’d want to punish me.
My arms are folded demurely, resting on the table: I’m relying on vibration and imagination. He has me bent over the table to show me how filthy sluts get taught to behave. When the pulse is on my clit, he’s spanking me. When it’s on my cunt, his dick is fucking the badness out of me.
I reach down, press a button: the pattern changes to one steady vibration. Now I’m riding him, my rhythm matching the train’s. He sees me rocking, sees my flushed face. He knows.
I’m close now. The pressure’s building, my cunt’s tightening, I’m right on the edge. I lean forward, grinding his dick, concentrating on my clit, on that last push, on tipping over, on release, on-
“Fuck!”
He heard that.
I don’t care. I switch off and lean back, my eyes closed, letting the warmth flow through me. Surrendering to the calm.
When I open my eyes, he’s there. He’s got something to say.
“I’m going to the toilet. Follow me.”
Too late. This is my stop.


31) Over the hump

Pumping his fist and gripping his dick a little tighter Paul knew he was close. He had been lying in bed and looking at porn on his phone for fifteen minutes now. Which was ten minutes longer than he usually needed – what was up with that? He was so close, he just needed something to push him across the finish line.

Reaching over to the nightstand he grabbed his wife’s vibrator from the drawer.

Paul clicked the power switch on, and then thrice more to crank up the vibrations. Wrapping his cock tightly in his fist he resumed with his long steady stroking, then jammed the vibe down between his testicles. Pressing it hard against the root of his cock the effect was immediate – his balls buzzed now, the warm throbbing spreading all across his genitals.

Paul jerked his cock faster, digging the vibrator deeper into his nuts so that his two balls spilled over each side. That brought with it a whole new sensation and once again he was overwhelmed by the feeling of an impending orgasm. Jacking his cock with one hand, his thumb and forefinger choking the purple head, he ran the vibe up and down his balls with the other. Both hands working in tandem. So close.

There was a flash of heat and then his balls erupted, sending a geyser of cum six inches into the air. It jumped and then fell back into his hand. He continued to pump his fist but dropped the vibe, letting it fall onto the bed, using his free hand to grab his balls and wring out the last of his climax. It was a long one and he twisted harder as it continued. Four more hot sticky spurts fired out, splashing down on his wrist and belly.

Awesome!


32) Hand-tastic Masseuse Review

Darknet – 12/07/2029

The ban on sex toys forces companies to market them as an alternative. This is listed as a massage device, but it’s a sex toy. I am posting so others may benefit.

Rating 4.8/5

My girl drove off with the grocery delivery driver. I was emotional for weeks but then my libido kicked in. She left her phone so I recorded the answer message onto cognizant-crystal and repeated for 15 minutes. The little giggle at the end did it for me. Somewhere within that loop I’d spray the sheets, tugging my cock.

But I missed Amy’s fingers – more than her mouth or cunt. Anyone’s manipulation would have done, but since the night-time curfew, and blacklisting of dating sites, it’s near impossible to meet a mate.

The hand-shaped toy’s instructions said:

“Warm, then place on your shoulder for an invigorating massage.”

The toy adapts its touch to the breadth of where it is placed. With fabulous, silky suction points on the fingertips.

I turned on the crystal. Amy’s voice began vibrating through the speakers – she was in the room. Placing the toy on my thigh it began to massage, gently cupping and squeezing my balls. Then stroking the length of my semi-erect cock the fingertips sucked the circumference, as if her lips were repeatedly kissing the now blood-filled head. Extremely realistic – the sexy giggle, a hand clasping my shaft, pre-cum spilling to provide lubrication. For those minutes I was not alone – the aroma of sex was in the air. I began to thrust into it. Long and slow. As the hand tightened its hold, the orgasm rose from my balls, pushing down the phallus. All at once, completely losing myself in an intense climax, juice shot into the air, splattering the toy and my torso.


33) Orgasm Coma

When Greg couldn’t sleep, his hand naturally travelled south below the covers and wrapped around his dick. It wasn’t hard yet, but with a few strokes it shivered to life.

As his cock grew hard, he ran his index finger around the tip. Precum was already dripping out, so he collected it with his finger and spread it around. He moaned in pleasure at the sensations he was feeling travelling through his body from his cock. His hand felt amazing, but he wanted something more.

In the dark, he reached over to his nightstand and felt around for the lube bottle and his masturbation sleeve. Having done this many times, he dribbled a few droplets on his sleeve and cock, feeling the chills run through him as the cold gel touched his hot flesh. He grinned at the sensation of the temperature change and slid the sleeve over his hard shaft.

He let out a sigh of pleasure as the tight opening enveloped the tip of his penis, his moans getting more audible as the toy encompassed all of him. Once he got it as far down as it would go, he started with long, slow strokes up and down.

With his free hand, he reached down and began to gently tug and massage on his balls. As he got more aggressive with his balls, the pace on his cock stimulation increased. It wasn’t long before his balls began to tighten in preparation of releasing his load.

As Greg got closer to climax, he pulled off the sleeve to let his cum spurt out onto his chest. At first the shots came out in close succession, but gradually slowed to being further apart. Eventually the spurting stopped, and Greg was finally able to fall into a deep orgasm coma.


34) Escape Rooms and Doppelgängers

I entered the escape room stripped down to my underwear. The large, mirrored window against the wall was likely a two-way, which was fine by me. I enjoyed an audience.

The room had a bed and a small table, on which lay a dirty magazine and a hot pink silicone vibrator. I wasted no time getting comfortable as I flipped through glossy images of erupting cocks and impaled pussies. My clit swelled and arousal pooled between my legs as I perused until, emboldened by lust, I grabbed the vibrator and turned to my reflection.

She had mussed red hair and small breasts with large nipples that strained against her bra. Pinching an extended tip, a moan echoed in the room as her legs opened to reveal sopping wet fabric where she held the vibrator between her legs.

She started slowly, and her breath came in soft gasps as she moved the toy in tight circles over her clit. When the vibrator hit just right, she began to gyrate her hips, lost to the sensation until she moved the wet material aside and applied the vibrator directly to her swollen flesh. Back bowed, legs askew, the wanton in the mirror stared back through squinted eyes as she pumped her hairless pussy against her toy and prepared to come hard. Pressing the dial to its highest setting, she grimaced and bit her lower lip.

Imagining a room full of horny spectators masturbating to me behind the mirror, the telltale heat of an impending orgasm crescendoed as the vibrator pulsed on. “Holy fuck,” I yelled, coming in small convulsions until the sensation faded. I’d barely heard the click as the door unlocked, having successfully achieved the room’s objective.

The satiated red-head in the mirror smiled and winked at me.


30 thoughts on “Smut Marathon 2018: Voting Round #4

  1. BadKitten74 says:

    As with many of my fellow marathoners, I struggled this round. While the assignment didn’t seem particularly hard, it was finding the right combination of naughty and out-of-the-box that would make you stand out. I took my last round comments and tried my best to do just that. Did I achieve that? I surely hope so. So far, this has been such a rewarding and wonderful experience, one I can take with me and grow on. Having said that, I’ll comment on a few as follows.

    5) We all have that one person whose voice we hear.
    6) I like the Daddy reference
    7) Love This! Perfectly naughty.
    9) Very daring and out of the box
    12) Love it! Very naughty.
    16) Vibrator app on the phone is pretty clever. Invent this and we’d all have a better day at work.
    20) Hot. Just question whether a cam session is considered solo.
    30) Love This! Hot!!
    31) Really good but I personally could’ve done without the awesome at the end. Haha.

    • Nero says:

      Yeah, I cringed when I saw it on the published blog page. It was meant to be what the guy said after his orgasm but yes, it just didn’t look right!

  2. I chose 25 (I love the image of her holding the roommate’s toy while talking with her on the phone), 26 (the dragon’s lair is a fun setting), and 34 (which begs to be a larger story).

  3. #26 – Hilarious ending. Loved it.
    #7 and #22 – best wankability.
    Thank you to those with great stories with male leads. There was a great deal of delicious ladywanking but it was nice to see the few from a male POV.
    #25 – well written as this was, the dialogue at the end took me out of the moment.
    #23 – also delicious, but I felt like this man needed three hands.
    #19 – I’ve never been gladder to own a pestle, so thanks for that.
    Really jealous of those of you who have experience with the glass dildos. Life goals.

  4. So I’m lousy at giving tons of feedback, but I will say I enjoyed reading all the stories. Just a few I made specific notes on as I read.

    9. Was a tough one to read. It just feels so angry to me and made me slightly uncomfortable because I didn’t feel like it was a wanted wank session.

    12. Such a cheeky maid. I loved her gumption so much.

    17. I enjoyed this story. A naughty exhibtionist that gets more daring.

    18. Such a well written story! Not necessarily something that turns me on, but I found his almost desperation to be humiliated with the spit/gag fascinating.

    22. I enjoyed his denial (?) about his hella obvious feelings for his roommate.

    26. The last line on this one legit made me chuckle. Poor dragon has been unwilling party to her Masturbation many times it seems. Nicely executed.

    30. This story did it for me. Just the initial interaction with the gentleman and her attitude about not caring whether he knew she was wanking or not. Again, another nice last line.

    32. For some reason, the first part threw me. I found the rest sexy, but the way it started didn’t do it for me.

    Some stories were just wanks that didn’t stand out. There wasn’t much it other than someone with a ton. I wanted to read a bit more, something to make me ask questions or having more feelings. Not that they weren’t sexy, but others caught my attention far better

  5. nbrplaza says:

    This round, I was expecting masturbation stories that made me want to wank! But, since that is extremely subjective, I also looked at originality, structure and general well cared-for texts. A good masturbation story doesn’t just describe the event as a report, but it adds something to that. That can be a thought, a motivation, an experience, a feeling, or just what is going on between the ears, rather than between the legs of the main persona.
    In general, I would like to suggest to really work on the opening sentence. Try to avoid starting with a person (I, she, he, or a name). It will make your story more original.
    As the Marathon continues, the stories get better and better. That means that the contestants really have to stand out in originality.

    Below I laced a small review for each of the entries (in between brackets my points). Sometimes, it may seem a little blunt. I apologize for that up front. It is not to tear you down, but it is to show you where your story may be improved. After each round, I give more insight in my line of thinking as a jury member on my blog (http://www.nbrplaza.com/en).

    1. Three Fingers Deep (1): I can imagine that masturbating in a public place is a huge turn on. However, when you write about it, try to make it less of a report (first I did this, then I did that).

    2. Clear Blue Sky (6): Smart. The preceding explains why she was already turned on. Good job on describing the main character’s thoughts and motivation.

    3. Role Model (1): I guess it’s personal, but the rhythm of your sentences and the wording you used didn’t get me in the mood.

    4. Playing with Magic (1): You cheated a little. The title says ‘magic’ and you talk about a wand, so in a way you did mention a brand. But I’ll overlook that. My tip for you is also, try to make it less of a report.

    5. Little silver bullet (7): Great story and a good example of writing abut what’s going on between the ears, rather than between the legs. You painted a picture that gets the reader in the right mood.

    6. Please Let Me (1): I have a hard time identifying with the main character. You didn’t manage to convince me. Sorry.

    7. The Scent of Them (10): Mi gusta! The story is original and perverted, which makes it very arousing. You could’ve even made it more perverted, if you ask me, if the main persona had some kind of taboo relation with the owners of the bed (baby sitter, housekeeper, cousin).

    8. A hot day (1): For you too, this reads to much as a report.

    9. Ready for You (1): For some reason I read this story as a fantasy of a man, not as a realistic experience of a woman. I may have it wrong, but that subtle difference just didn’t do it for me.

    10. The Private Show (1): This story too felt like a male fantasy, a peeping Tom. Yes, I can see a woman do this, but the story could be so much better if you give the reader some insight of what is going on in her head.

    11. Muscle Memory (4): Good example of describing the thoughts. It allows the reader to not only see the picture, but also to understand the persona.

    12. The Maid (8): Great story! Very original. Don’t hold back in your perversion! Why clean the spoon? Tip: work on your opening line. Draw your readers straight in.

    13. Simulated Lover (1): Kudos for writing from a males perspective. But unfortunately too much af a report.

    14. All That Remains (9): Yes! You gave us a perfect peek in the woman’s mind, just enough to understand the motivation. I love your wording: very now, very accessible.

    15. Blue Boyfriend (1): Also, too much of a report.

    16. Selena’s Interlude (5): Nice work. You’ve managed to place the scene in some context and I like how the orgasm was disappointing. This proves that not all erotic stories have to have a great and exploding ending.

    17. Ride the Train (1): I do like the fantasy, but the story lacks the tension that the main character must have when she does this. Also, not very original.

    18. The Gag (1): For you too, kudos for the male perspective. I didn’t understand how the submissive part of his character could merge with his narcissism, though.

    19. The Dream (1): I had a hard time following your story. Some sentences I didn’t get even after three readings. “A dream, brimful of country matters with my lusty master, who presently is travelling in the Low Countries.” Wait, is that dream traveling with the master? Don’t try so hard to create long poetic sentences. It didn’t work (for me).

    20. Her Little Frog (3): I really like the originality and contemporary writing. I hoped it would get just a little kinkier.

    21. All By Herself (1): Also, too much of a report.

    22. Open-Door Policy (2): The first half I really loved. You managed to describe the doubts and thoughts that lead to the event. But the ending is a bit disappointing. It’s like you wanted to put too much in that last sentence.

    23. Laundry Day (1): This story has so much potential, but it was written too much as a report. What was going through his mind? Was he ashamed for smelling her dirty underwear? What did it smell like? What did it remind him of?

    24. A Little Bit More (1): Your story is just a mechanical description of the act and you show us (the readers) too little of the thinking process of the persona.

    25. Busy All Night (1): I know you only have 300 words for this assignment, but at some points you go a little to fast for the tension to build up. I like the end of your story though.

    26. Royal Showmanship (1): That opening sentence was a bit too much. It’s like a story of its own. I like your fairy approach, but I think you should have taken it a bit further.You could’ve added so much more context (nights that came to fuck her, but were killed by the dragon, for a start).

    27. Waiting for Delivery (1): This reads more like a review then like an arousing hot masturbation story.

    28. Punished…Mew Pfft Pfft (1): The pet / cat perspective was nice, but the story as a whole was a bit predictable.

    29. 1+2=5 (1): I couldn’t get past your first paragraph. Sorry. It was messy: two colons, 4 characters that were introduced. What is going on? And it continued. Who is who? From who’s perspective is the story told? I got it, when I finally read it. But if the assignment was to write about solo sex in a way that could turn on the reader … sorry.

    30. In Loco Penis (1): Well written, but not very original and also a bit predictable.

    31. Over the hump (1): Also, too much of a report.

    32. Hand-tastic Masseuse Review (1): Nice try to think of a futuristic device. The problem is, you only have 300 words. That is too little to explain it all. It leaves less words for your actual story.

    33. Orgasm Coma (1): Not very original and written as a report.

    34. Escape Rooms and Doppelgängers (1): Why did you choose for an escape room, and not do anything with the escape room?

  6. In this round, I’ve done my best to give feedback on all the entries and I hope it’s helpful. Masturbation is not something I’m used to writing either though, so I’d like to emphasise that these are just my opinions and you don’t have to take them on board if they’re not useful to you.
    Charlie

    1) Good work at dedicating a lot of the story to the actual masturbation. I was less convinced by the fact she conveniently had a dildo to hand and think it would have benefited from you trusting the reader more and not adding e.g. ‘adding to that thrill’ after ‘my door rattles but it doesn’t open.’ We don’t need to be explicitly told it adds to her thrill, I don’t think.

    2) Really liked almost all of this, especially the way we expect her to be sad that the relationship is over but she’s not. Love the first sentence. Only thing that confused me slightly was why her face was ‘tear-streaked’ – relief, I gues

    3) I was a little bit confused about who was speaking at times, but I really liked ‘works the wand against herself with the same brutal efficiency she uses to wield wrenches and hoist weights’ because it subverts traditional ideas of femininity. Good ending, too.

    4) Nice scene, but not really enough of an actual story for me here, sadly.

    6) As with 4), this was a nice enough scene, but I thought it lacked plot.

    7) Very good. I liked that I think ‘She brings it to her nose and inhales, moaning at the hint of cunt,’ is slightly risky because it might turn some readers off. My only minor niggles? ‘His cedar cologne and her mango perfume’ oversimplifies scent and is therefore unconvincing and the last paragraph/ending might be more powerful if you cut it after ‘They’ll be back from vacation tomorrow.’

    8) I liked the ending of this, which I didn’t see coming (sorry!), but was slightly distracted from the piece at times by inconsistent use of tenses.

    9) Really like the dialogue, and some of the word choices like ‘conquer’ and ‘swallows’, but I found the paragraph that starts ‘The sudden coldness of wet wall tiles…’ confusing.

    10) Nice enough scene and I liked that I wasn’t sure if there was a camera as well as the mirror, but not enough plot for me, I’m afraid.

    11) Some nice word choices in this – like ‘earthy’ and ‘seesawed,’ but be careful not to repeat things in such a short piece, like ‘tears streamed down,’ for example.

    12) I REALLY liked that you took a risk by going with something that’s not intended for use as a sex toy. Also very much liked the scenario and thw last line, and was curious about the dynamic between the two characters.

    13) A clever scenario, but I didn’t really find this erotic, I’m afraid, more just sad.

    14) This is one of my favourites – really good dialogue, and some lovely lines like ‘your cold, hard, only-slightly-misshapen erection.’ I was going to say that you might want to consider cutting the final line but I’m undecided!

    15) Nice title, but some of the imagery felt a bit clichéd and I thought it lacked plot, unfortunately.

    16) Although I’d have liked a bit more of a story/a twist, I thought the prose was nice and you had me at ‘He was at his desk, cock hard and impressive against the wool of his slacks’ – I find this super hot.

    17) I found some of the chronology a bit confusing – I assume ‘he’d started in one of the more private back seats of the train’ refers to previous occasions on which she’s done this –and I thought it was a shame no one did notice her – I wanted them to!

    18) The concept of this, and the execution, is very hot. I also liked that you took a risk (is a gag definitely a toy?), didn’t hold back on the saliva descriptions, and the come scene paragraph is great. I’m always wary of scenes where you get a physical description of a character because they’re looking in a mirror – it feels a bit artificial – but it wasn’t too jarring here.

    19) I think this is historical, which is a nice change, and nice repurposing of a non sex toy as a sex toy. I wasn’t totally clear on why it was particularly relevant that the spice in question was cardamom though and I’d have liked a bit more of a plot twist.

    20) I liked the concept of the intense game of Simon Says – this used to be a common fantasy of mine – it would have been nice if you’d played more on this idea though – I didn’t get much sense of any relationship or real tension between the two characters.

    21) The masturbation scene itself is well written, but there’s no real story, sadly.this one felt a bit softcore to me, too – sorry!

    22) Lovely little story, with some great descriptions, such as the Medusa hair and a wonderful second paragraph – I love the sexiness of the technically unsexy. Only complaint is that sometimes the prose is overworked and jolts me out of the story, such as ‘ I find lotion—within easy reach, by what? Certainly not coincidence—and ready both my pucker and his proxy,’ and ‘Each pulse radiates pleasure from my prostate to the farthest reaches of my erotic imagination, which is wiped clean of every tepid turn-on I once entertained and instead now bursts and swirls with visions of him, remembered or wholly fantasized, I can’t be bothered to care.’

    23) Nice vivid prose. I didn’t feel like the scenario was that original and it lacked plot, but the masturbation itself was written in a hot way.

    24) Some really hot lines, like ‘She remembered how he had made her come by fucking her from behind, pushing his thumb into her arse to hold her steady,’ but it was lacking plot, for me.

    25) The names meant I got a bit confused about the genders of the characters, although that may be just me. I also wasn’t clear on the relationship between the two characters – lovers? Roomates? – and these questions drew me out of the scene, I’m afraid.

    26) Really liked the mixing of the erotica and fairytale genres here – it works really well. I did wonder what she was using to carve the toy – not that it particularly matters when the story is so good, and I wasn’t sure about ‘vivified.’ Those were my only niggles though, and it has a fantastic last line!

    27) I thought the use of the second person ‘you’ here was an unusual – although not necessarily bad – choice – I think it works. I just didn’t find the scene as a whole that arousing though, sadly.

    28) Fun scenario, and although I could guess what would happen at the end, I liked that this scene was a story with a proper beginning, middle and end.

    29) I’m afraid there was just a bit too much going on in this one for me and it was possible to guess the ending, but the writing was good, I thought.

    30) Sexy scene, but I was a little bit put off by the narrator’s seeming ability to read Mr Disapproval’s mind – how does she know he disapproves? Would be good to make this clearer. I also thought her toy must be pretty bloody quiet for her to dare ti try and get away with this!

    31) Nice enough scene, but as with some of the others, I thought this lacked plot. Also, some of the anatomical descriptions, like ‘digging the vibrator deeper into his nuts so that his two balls spilled over each side,’ were so detailed they detracted from the eroticism of the scene, I thought.

    32) There’s so much potentially fascinating stuff in this, but I do think you’ve tried to cram a bit too much (sorry) into 300 words. Why have sex toys been banned? What kind of dystopian future is this? We need more words to really make this work.

    33) Although the topic of using orgasm to get to sleep resonated with me, I thought this lacked plot, I’m afraid.

    34) I had to read this twice to get it, and even then, I’m not sure I really did. Sorry. I thought it was a shame, because the title was really intriguing.

  7. Wow, folks. Some really fun stuff here. I chose Scent of Them, All that Remains, and In Loco Penis. The first two shared a certain melancholy which I found I really liked. Both were also unexpected and unusual. I loved the exploration and celebration of smell in Scent and the soft, sweet use of memory and longing in Remains. Penis was tremendous fun, full of the rythmn of the train, and a nice “fuck you” to male entitlement at the end.
    Mentions in dispatches. The dragon dildo and the dressing room. Yum. Filthy. Also Riding the Train. I like the whole public sex gig, but Penis just got out in front… got to get a dragon dildo though.

    Ultimately, the three I chose felt like they had the most developed voice, a sense of character, conflict, and motivation. There was real agency in all of them, and that’s what I like..

  8. The competition is hotting up in so many ways. For the first time we really have to write smut and that is what everyone has created. Some individual feedback as follows:

    1) Hot and well written
    2) Very erotic, I love the descriptions and narrative. I just wish you can separated the text into more paragraphs, it makes it so much easier to read.
    3) The story was hot, but I am confused by the way that the power dynamics are presented. Also wonder if the presence of another all be it at distance met the remit?
    4)I love the way the story builds. Be careful about mixing tenses.
    5) One of my favourites. A wonderful story of discovery and young and innocent adulthood. Love this.
    6) A great masturbation tale of control by an absent other. The actual toy bit is small, but a powerful climax.
    7) The build up and suspense is good, but I found the ending confusing. If it means what I think, then that is kind of scary.
    8) No comment 🙂
    9) I admire the physical strength needed to perform this horny masturbation scene.
    10) A hot story, but uses 2 toys unfortunately. I love the mirror as camera set up.
    11) A wonderful story of loss and an attempt to recreate the feelings of loving sex through masturbation. One of my favourites.
    12) A great story of love, lust and wanton desire
    13) I like the recreation of experiences lost through the use of the video recording but tenses within the story are mixed.
    14) I was a bit confused about the context of this piece. What or who are you fucking?
    15) A very hot masturbation story.
    16) A phone app you can get off on. I’d love one please.
    17) I wish my morning commute allowed for this kind of scene. Nice fiction, I just found it difficult to picture.
    18) I like this use of a different type of toy and of self love and masturbation.
    19) I enjoyed the improvisation requited here as well as the wanton lust.
    20) A hot, if strange tale. Shifting between the past and present tense was a little confusing
    21) A nice masturbation story.
    22) This was my favourite. I love that the story builds through detail about the object of the crush, the environment and then the masturbation scene. Before the final little twist.
    23) A hot tale of illicit masturbation, her knickers, her toy…. Not sure how I’d feel about this?
    24) Great use of sexual arousal recreated through masturbation. I can identify with the need for a little more after his is gone.
    25) Nicely written, but it seemed to be more about what was to come than the actual masturbation scene then and there.
    26) Creative fantasy story. I love the ending.
    27) Nice story of suspense and anticipation. Interesting toy.
    28) I like this, what a naughty kitty. More punishment awaits!
    29) Very hot, but not sure it felt realistic.
    30) I love the voyerism and exhibitionism in this story. Very hot and one of my favourites.
    31) Nice use of wife’s toy, but a bit more emotional detail rather than just the masturbation would be nice.
    32) A scary tale of our potential future as kinky people. Mixed tenses here.
    33) A nice masturbation scene
    34) Great description of the use of porn to get aroused as well as the use of the mirror.

    Well done everyone.

  9. 2. Nicely paced and emoted. The setting came alive and I loved the ending.
    9. Highly visceral and deliciously filthy detail!
    25. Nicely transgressive. Her roomies toy and her bed. And not just once by chance but a whole naughty night ahead!

  10. Role Model: I like the challenge to presumed roles, and found “Mommi” to be playfully indicative of the dynamic while also (respectfully) hot.

    Open Door Policy: Great description of scent, and realistic use of its impact! Our hormones respond to the sweat/stink smells of people to whom we’re attracted, and that was captured here in a casual, believable way.

    In Loco Penis: Whether the lack of spacing between paragraphs was intentional or not: it worked! The constant flow of words, without visual breaks, promoted a sense of urgency, which is innate to orgasm even if it’s taking place on a slow-moving train.

  11. First a word about this task; I actually think it is way harder than it looks because people can easily slip into the mistake of literally just writing a description of someone wanking and some authors did in fact do this. Sadly that is not going to win you any points in my opinion. To do well your masturbation scene needs to be a mini story and I think as you read through it is easy to pick out where people did that and how those pieces are definitely the most engaging and for me the ones that turned me on in some way too.

    So the judging brief was to pick stories that had an original masturbation scene but also that turned us on. With that in mind here are my thoughts starting with the ones I voted for and then going onto some others that definitely deserve a mention

    12) The Maid

    This is utterly filthy and I love it. It definitely fits the original bill and also just happens to remind me of something I once did with a carrot. It is glorious writing that flows, in a few short words we know who she is and who he is and exactly what they are getting up and I think it clear why he would pick such a girl as Lucy.

    5) Little silver bullet

    This story really touched me. I could totally picture Gem a young woman loitering between adulthood and childhood. It bought back strong memories of going to dinner parties my parents had and then drifting off as it got boring and let’s not speak of lusting after older men. This is a great piece of writing that takes a fairly simple act of masturbation and transforms it into something illicit and naughty. Oh this sentence is so evocative of that time in my life.
    “She has slipped away, tipsy on the glass of wine they gave her, the right to leave the table a lingering childhood privilege even as they acknowledge the onset of adulthood by letting her drink.”

    30) In Loco Penis

    You totally had me with this. She is utterly brazen about what she is doing and uses him in such a delicious way to get exactly what she wants. I love her, I want to be her, she is hot as fuck and you made me want to masturbate on a train for a total stranger.

    18) The Gag

    This is such a powerful and vivid piece. Whilst you could just say it is a description of someone masturbating with a ball gag you would be totally misrepresenting the sheer eroticism of this writing and originality of the piece. It read like a painting or photograph in that I could see this moment and it was beautiful.

    26) Royal Showmanship

    Whoever wrote this is a clever old sausage because they managed to tell a whole story with their masturbation scene. We have one lusty and resourceful princess who like the idea of being watched and one dragon one feels may well end up regretting capturing her. Most definitely original and the idea of making your own phallus to fuck yourself with is hot.

    11) Muscle Memory
    Her longing is absolutely palatable and her sadness evident. I found myself utterly invested in her orgasm and felt relief when she came at the end. This piece reminded me of all the time we were apart and the often tearful orgasms I would have wishing they were given to me by him, despite that sadness there was and still is something that turns me on about that longing which this piece inspired in me.
    17) Ride the Train

    Trains were popular this go round and like the previous train story this totally ticks the box for me in that it appeals to my exhibitionist side. I like that we are given enough context to know that this is not a first time; she is in fact practiced at this dirty game.

    2) Clear Blue Sky

    This piece has possibly one of the best lines in it from this all the writing in this round

    “The city moved beneath her like a machine”

    Again this one appeals to the part of me that likes to be watched. I liked how she was claiming both her body and the physical space she lived in, even going so far as to mark her with her gorgeous juices.

    10) The Private Show

    This totally works for me in that I love to watch myself and so I strong indentified with Clarissa. It is this line though which really transforms this piece from just a girl wanking in the mirror to one exploring her cam-girl fantasies that she is actually quite conflicted by.
    “There she was no longer Clarissa, she was the cam model of her sexual dreams. The one her unaroused self would never consider allowing her to be”

    And now for the rest….

    1) Three Fingers Deep

    The idea for this piece could totally work for me, masturbating in public or semi public place but this piece is just too much, I do this, I do that. You really need to work on breaking that up, think about describing how something feels rather than what the character is doing with it.

    3) Role Model
    I found this a little bit hard to follow and was a bit confused about their dynamic and there is not a clear enough explanation of why she is setting a good example.

    4) Playing with Magic
    This is nice writing but sadly it is one of the stories that is just a description of someone masturbating. There no context too it and nothing to really identify with.

    6) Please Let Me
    I found myself picking this apart trying to work out what was going on with them and the moment I am doing that then I am not turned on. I think the context of his absence and whether she is allowed to come without his permission needs to be clearer.

    7) The Scent of Them

    This is good writing but then we get to the bit that she has a recording of him and it totally jars me out of the scene and leaves me confused about how/why she has a recording of him? Are they having an affair, is she sleeping with them as a couple, is she stalking them?

    8) A hot day

    This one also is really just a description of her masturbating. At the end we are left with a slight teaser but for me it is too little too late. Maybe some musing earlier on about her date so that he masturbating takes on more context might have made this work.

    9) Ready for You

    This comes across as a really angry wank and there is nothing wrong with that and it can in fact be very hot but the details of this left me confused and not really understanding why she was so angry. I couldn’t decide if she actually liked the person she is thinking about. Also at one point she seems to be the one having her tits squeezed and then at the end she seems to be the dominant one.

    13) Simulated Lover

    Another one with quite a lot of, I did this and I did that, type descriptions of physical acts that make for slightly stilted reading and for me the word badonkadonk is never hot and sexy.

    14) All That Remains

    This one only just missed out by a whisker on getting one of my votes. The premise is definitely a turn on for me and you totally had me for the most part but the line “Your weight feels glorious” pushed me out of the moment and had me confused for a moment about how she could feel the weight when she is sitting astride him.

    15) Blue Boyfriend

    Why is she crying? I feel like I have totally missed the context for her tears.

    16) Selena’s Interlude
    Great start but the actual masturbation doesn’t work for me. The “vibrating electronic” is a really clumsy visual and surely the end should be… but would it be enough to get her through the afternoon?

    19) The Dream
    I have never woken from a dream and my first thought has been I must grind those spices and sadly that stuck in my brain the whole way through this and meant I couldn’t engage with the rest of the story.
    20) Her Little Frog
    I get she is a cam girl but apart from that I found this very hard to follow.

    21) All By Herself

    It is fine writing and if there was some context to it, if it was part of a longer story about Emma that meant we knew something about her then it would be good but like this it is just a description of a woman masturbating and there is very little to engage with.

    22) Open-Door Policy
    Another one that made my short list but didn’t quite get a vote in the end. I loved the description of his roommate and his room, it is good writing but it just didn’t turn me on.

    23) Laundry Day
    Sadly I found myself thinking, don’t put anything in your bum that does not have a flared base which shouldn’t have even registered really but I found it hard to engage with this story and so I think that ended up being my takeaway.

    24) A Little Bit More
    I found it difficult to reconcile the amazing sex she had just had with the feeling of being left unsatisfied.

    25) Busy All Night

    I was confused about their relationship. By the end I guessed they were probably roommates and also she goes from looking for ear buds to fucking herself with the dildo so quickly that it just didn’t feel realistic to me.

    27) Waiting for Delivery
    I totally got the excitement and anticipation of order and waiting for a new toy to be delivered but then suddenly there is a picture of the ex-wife just out of the blue and I don’t understand why and by the end I am kind of left feeling a bit uncomfortable about that bit. It is definitely a interesting piece but not sexy or a turn on to me

    28) Punished…Mew Pfft Pfft

    Another one that was on my short list but didn’t make it. I love this line My hand snuck into my panties to pet the tiny patch of kitty-fur but then I was confused as to why she couldn’t touch herself. Did she have actual paws and claws?

    29) 1+2=5
    This is definitely original. I loved that she is making out with the dressing dummy and that she uses the strap on in that way but the beginning was a bit confusing and I found myself having to go back and work out who all the names were.

    31) Over the hump
    I found myself not really invested in what Paul was doing. You could have given more context to it by exploring what his wife would have thought about it. Would she be turned on by the thought of him using her vibe or maybe appealed and that would have given what he was doing an illicit forbidden angle.

    32) Hand-tastic Masseuse Review

    Definitely original but so hard to follow. The beginning seemed to be a review but then it strayed off into a description and I just couldn’t decipher it

    33) Orgasm Coma

    Again mainly a physical description, no insight into his desires or who he is.

    34) Escape Rooms and Doppelgängers

    I found the change from 1st person to 3rd person and back again a bit confusing. Half way through I am suddenly not sure who I am reading about.

    As always if anyone wants to chat about their piece more with me then get in touch

    Mollyx

  12. Really well done to everyone! There were so many fantastic stories here I really have no idea how the voting will go, I’m extremely nervous about my place in the competition though! I’ve left a little feedback for each, but please remember it is only my opinion and I really know very little about writing.

    1. It was really imaginative to find a way you could take the masturbation scene into a public place. And oh so sexy!
    2. I love how you created a story around the masturbation and really like the part where you compared the moving city to a machine.
    3. I loved this at first as I thought she physically couldn’t orgasm and I really liked that it was representitive of those who can’t, but I got confused at the end when it seemed she was choosing not to. It was still a great entry either way though!
    4. Mmm, so teasing! This is exactly what I love about erotic stories, all that teasing!
    5. This definitely took me back to the excitement of getting my first sex toy! I thought it was great, the only feedback I could possibly give is that I found the ending quite abrupt.
    6. This was one of the entries that made me wish I had more votes! Fantasizing is probably my favourite part of masturbating and I love how you focused on it, capturing it so well.
    7. This one left me soo torn as I really, really wanted to vote for it too! The idea was unique and the writing so arousing. It is a fantastic piece of writing.
    8. I liked the fact I could relate to this. It is definitely something I would do before a date. I got a bit confused with the changing tenses in this sentence though.. ‘Boy was she turned on; it has been impossible to concentrate today.’
    9. Another one I wished I had extra votes for! So raw and sexy. I especially loved the part where she slapped it around her face. The whole piece of writing was just insanely hot!
    11. Such a great entry! It was relatable as well as being really sexy.
    12. I loved your unique idea in using a spoon as the sex toy. The story wasn’t ‘my thing’, but I can appreciate how well it has been written.
    13. This totally gave me penis envy because it sounds so good! I love your idea as it isn’t unbelievable at all, there are people everywhere doing exactly this. Lucky people lol!
    14. Such a sexy but sad entry! It really left me wanting to read more too. I believe after a colon there should be a capital letter, but apart from that I couldn’t leave any feedback, it’s a great piece of writing!
    15. I might be wrong, but it seemed she took the vibrator out twice?
    16. This was a genius way of taking the orgasm into a public place without leaving questions on why they had a sex toy with them.
    17. This was a very clever choice of a public scene as I imagine the train noise would muffle the sound of vibrations. Very hot too!
    18. I absolutely love the toy you chose! I would have liked this better without the arrogance though, personally.
    19 – So beautifully and poetically written. I especially like how you chose to write this in the first person.
    20 – I found some of the errors distracting, such as the ellipsis and the ‘you’ after theme nights. I’d just make sure you carefully edit. I did the same though with a poorly placed colon, so I need to take my own advice!
    21 – Well, you definitely mastered the erotic part of the assignment! I do wish Emma was introduced to us slightly though, who is she? Where is she? What’s got her so excited?
    22 – VOTED! This is fantastic! I was totally absorbed by the story and really felt like I was in their head. I admire your writing and your creativity.
    23 – Really hot! This story definitely got me feeling a little flushed. Only feedback I can give is the word ‘precum’ came up three times in four consecutive sentences.
    24 – I was completely drawn into this story. Especially with how you compared his cock to the dildo as it prompted me to imagine the sensations of each.
    25 – I really liked your descriptive masturbation paragraph and sort of wish I could have had more of that than the dialogue at the end.
    26 – This is such an imaginitive idea! I would have loved it to have been based on a well known fairytale princess, like Rapunzel.
    27 – I love that you chose such an interesting sex toy. I had to reread it though as I was imagining a penis sleeve the first time round, until I got to your final sentence. I really like how your sentences came across frenzied, just as the character would have been feeling.
    28 – VOTED! Loved this! I adore how you didn’t just tell us they were kitty, you really showed it in every steamy sentence. I’m amazed at how you managed to capture so much story as well as making it so erotic in only 300 words.
    29 – There were so many characters in such a short piece of writing, I got very confused and had to read it three times to truly get what was going on.
    30 – It’s really clever how well you captured what was going on in reality and what was going on in their head, without leaving me at all confused. This was a really sexy story that definitely had the right effect on me!
    31 – This was incredibly hot! I’m not usually into cum but even I got a little flushed with the descriptions of it in the last paragraph.
    32 – This was a really interesting entry. It is not my genre of choice, but I love how well you portrayed a toy that doesn’t even exist, as well as creating a solid story around it.
    33 – Your description of the masturbation was incredibly hot, but I do think this story needed something to make it stand out.
    34 – This was a really imaginative idea for a masturbation scene and the transition from first to third person, and back, was very well done.

    • Nero says:

      Thanks, I’m glad you responded to it the way I intended. Some others didn’t, which is okay. Erotica is sunbjective.

  13. So much good writing here! 300 words really allowed some of these stories the space to breathe, and that’s resulted in a handful of top-quality responses to a very interesting brief.

    I loved #5, #12 and #26. Both 5 and 12 made the masturbation element central to proceedings, while remembering to tell a hot, compelling story around it. They had eroticism running through every carefully-chosen word, and I got to the end of both thinking ‘damn, wish I’d written that’! 26 is just brilliant: sexy, funny, and a lovely twist on a very familiar fairytale scenario.

    I also really enjoyed #4 (good example of how to execute a simple story very well, and a well-chosen title), #7 (just a hot fantasy, where the dynamic felt believable and made me want to read more), #17 (public transport is always a winner in my book), and #18 (a scenario I wouldn’t normally find sexy, but the intimacy and intensity are both hot).

    However, I was puzzled to read so many stories that either directly defied or at least seriously stretched the ‘one character, one toy’ brief. #3, #20, #25, #29, and #30 (Jadis, is this you?? Really hot story, but…) all featured at least two characters, at least according to the way I understand the line between ‘character’ and ‘incidental human’..which is a shame, as some of them were great otherwise!

    Few other random thoughts…

    #9 – the line about being able to hear her cunt really did it for me
    #11 – another excellent title, which captured the ambiguity of the story
    #13 – couldn’t take this seriously after ‘badonkadonk’
    #23 – ‘my cock sings like a tuning fork’ is a great line!
    #32 – didn’t quite work for me, but a brave, clever and imaginative attempt to combine erotica with dystopian fiction

    As for my own story, I feel like I’ve also possibly blurred the one/two characters line a bit…and once again I’m not sure I’ve managed to write something *hot*, but apart from those minor flaws, I’m pretty happy! And I enjoyed writing it, which is the most important bit 🙂

  14. Posy Churchgate says:

    Very Very hard to chose only three favourites this time, great standard but some were definitely sexier than others – this time the challenge was to make the reader want a wank! How delicious, so as well as rating the word play, pace, plotting and clarity, I was looking for that ‘frisson’.
    Here are a few thoughts – but I am only a reader, not any kind of critic.
    2) Loved the focus on freedom, release, taking back the power. Her wank trumped his selfish sex. Great pace from build-up to release.
    4) Good description of the teasing phase. Lost its conviction for the build-up and climax.
    5) Simple, but not. The yearning, planning, danger, triumph were all drawn so vividly. This could be a page out of my youthful diary.
    7) Hot. The scenario is vivid and the reader knows from the outset there will be a twist. Well paced.
    8) Slow start – really grabbed my interest in second half. Loved the variety of pressures and stimulus, it was very personal therefore arousing to read.
    10) Erotic from start to finished, enjoyed all the details (both visual, sensual and emotional) I’d definitely want to re-read this!
    12) Unusual. The sexy element here was the furtiveness, and the maid’s obsession (real or imagined) with her employer.
    13) Witty & sexy.
    14) Poignant – here was eroticism tinged with sadness. Very emotional in it’d flawed details.
    16) A very controlled orgasm within a schedule – do I detect a man writing a woman’s PoV?
    17) Clever, controlled writing. In the protagonist’s need to exercise self-control and orgasm un-noticed in public I felt the reader lost out on description of her experience. Fabulous details in the scenario.
    18) Not my kink but a very erotic depiction of a scene. Particular praise to the narcissism, the furtiveness and the visuals which tipped it over the edge into a great climax.
    19) This piece soared above the ordinary because of its details of the room, the denied attraction and the inevitable ‘caught in the act’ moment – great climax.
    23) Very erotic, the protagonist is very confident in his sexuality. The build and finish are great : a 1-handed read!
    24) This had a great start, the scene was set impeccably but then it got a bit detached as the self-pleasure began.
    26) Tongue in cheek, but great descriptions.
    27) Lovely – another 1 handed read. The humour, honesty, anticipation are used to great effect. I particularly liked the memories of sensations and the mishap at the end!
    28) Not my kink but so erotically depicted. Loved the bratty behaviour and the sensations from the self play made it highly erotic. Good build to climax & very neat ending.
    29) Great scenario – all kinds of unexpected! Paula’s solo play built very erotically & the reader is left wanting more, but happily imagining what comes next.
    30) A tour de force – particularly liked how confident & aggressive the protagonist is. Her imaginary interaction combined with her real sensations are depicted with heat and realism. Genius twist in the tale.
    32) Enjoyed the dystopian touches in this. The love-lorn hero was relatable.
    33) Another 1-handed read, loved the sassy, bold main character. Pleasing descriptions of body sensations and responses and she has ‘attitude’ til the end.

    Bravo everybody! Posy x

  15. May says:

    I find it difficult to leave feedback as I kinda feel “who am I to give constructive feedback?” – I am just learning like many, but I am in this competition so here are a few that I wanted to comment on.

    #18 – The Gag – In my opinion this is very well written and I loved the idea that the sex toy was a gag. I tried to make my entry a little different and I felt this achieved that. One I had read it once I wanted to go back again and again – such a good job.

    #7 – the Scent of them – I really enjoyed this particularly the little twist at the end. Again I like that it had an original aspect to the story.

    #17 – Ride the train – I was drawn to this tale as I have masturbated on a train before. A good theme and a nice tale told but for me too much use of the pronoun(she) – change the sentence around or give the character a name.

  16. Wow, sizzling hot to read all these stories! Last round my comment invited you to be more explicit and not hold back. I do not have the illusion it was my comment that brought it on, but this round you were pretty explicit in your sex-scenes and I loved it! Having said that: I am always looking for real stories, a narrative that will capture the reader by surprise. However, I found a lot of very sexy well written desciptions of a scene. A description is not a narrative. Linear (starts with A and goes straight to Z) desciptions are, however sexy, a little bit boring to read. Once you start, you already know the outcome: she or he is going to climax and that is that. So, the next challenge for you is to make real stories, with little flashbacks, with character building, dilemma’s and so on. Once again, can’t wait to read your next assignments. So exciting!

    My points this round were:

    10: The scent of them
    Briljant very short story. I was, ofcourse, fooled at first, thinking there was another character in play. I loved the twist, I loved the use of the external voice, I loved the sex. The writing is clean, no unnecessary words, definetely the winner for me. It made me want to go on holiday and smell my bed after I bring the house-sitter home 🙂

    9: Open door policy:
    A very strong vivid scene, I liked the fact you managed to lure us in, a sort of dialogue with your reader, I could almost hear you telling me this. The real explicit erotic part is not even that long, but it presented itself as the highlight. All this in 300 words, well done!

    8: All that remains:
    When I read: ‘no-one told me that grief would feel this horny’, I was emotionally completely drawn into this story. The poetic and melancholic style really appealed to me. I was a somehow put off by the last sentence, ‘but I really can’t stop’. That ‘but’…without it, I might have chosen this one 2nd place. I like butts with two t.s, but to end a story with ‘but’, is for me a no-no.

    7: Little silver bullit:
    I love the fact it is not linear and with a perfect flashback in it: it makes it a complete short story. The thought of the BBQ downstairs, her youthfull desires: very sexy. Writing is to the point. I liked the little details: her knickers around the ankles and the warmth of George’s laughter. However, you see the outcome of the story miles ahead. Maybe a more surprising plot (she gets caught or something) will make it even more exciting.

    6: 1+2 = 5
    Oink, hot story! Nice metaphores: ‘niples a breath apart’, ‘her moans drowned out the click of the door’ for example.
    The plot was a bit too sweet for me.

    5: In loco penis
    I like the inner dialogues and her desire to give this stranger a part in her arousal. It is not very explicit though in what she’s doing, maybe a little more would have been nice. Liked the twist on the end.

    4: Clear blue sky
    A sexy story, explicit enough, it has some depth and character building, which is not easily done in 300 words. Yet it was rather linear and descriptive.

    3: Laundry day
    Although it is rather linear, I thought it was refreshing to read a man’s masturbation, finally! I also thought it very sexy, not holding back in any way. It is well written with well chosen words that makes the story very effective 🙂 However, no twist and very desciptive.

    2: Role model
    Well written and original story, last sentence could be a lot stronger. I never like it when one ends with ‘but’. ‘But she needs to set’…it didn’t fit the character to me. Maybe somthing like: “I decided to set the standards here” or “It was up to me to teach her how it should be done”…would have lifted the whole story. Her kitten is on the edge of the assignment, it should be about one character. Still, having said all that, I loved the story!

    Special Mention for ‘The maid’:
    The story is very original and it is a very sexy thought. However, the writing could have been so much better. If you improve the ”flow” in your sentences and your choice of words, stories like this have a much better chance.

    Keep up the good work you all, it is such a joy to read your stories and really inspiring to me!

  17. Late getting my feedback in…but it’s been a crazy week:
    This was a tough prompt – deceptively simple. When I got it in my inbox, I initially thought, “Well, this will be fucking easy!” And then I thought about it a bit. The problem was, it was TOO easy. Masturbation scenes are common in erotica, so all of us can write them, and write them well. The addition of a toy, is another complication. I knew right away that using a dildo or a vibrator…any conventional toy…was OUT. Too pedestrian. I had to stand out. Funnily enough, one other writer came up with the same “unconventional” toy that I did. So I guess I wasn’t as original as I thought I was. With all this said, as a voter, I pretty much ruled out any piece that used a dildo, wand, or vibrator. It isn’t that these pieces were not good. In fact, I think pretty much everyone wrote a good piece this go-round. And because of that, I only looked closely at the entries that did something different. There was a strap-on, a flogger, a penis pump, a silicone ass/vagina, and a ball-gag. These were better…more original.

    I wanted to choose the story with the wooden pestle, but it confused me. Was she sleep walking? Was she a scullery maid? Is this the middle ages? I had too many questions about the story.

    That left my decision between, 23 (I looked past the dildo and focused on the panties as the “original” toy), 17, and 12, not including my own.

    This time around, the only deciding factor for me was originality. Because, like I said, I think they were all well-written. The two most original were 12 and 32. And my favorite was 12. It was perfect in every possible way.

  18. Kitt says:

    1) Three Fingers Deep
    I love public play! This was a great idea and I’ve needed a quickie in a dressing room or two. I liked the rising action of this work. Well done!

    2) Clear Blue Sky
    Excellent reclamation story. It made me tear up and feel so happy that she found peace with her freedom.

    3) Role Model
    Awww. I could totally see this story in real life. They were cute yummy characters.

    4) Playing with Magic
    I loved the thrill of her buying her first toy. This was a great premise. You needed more words to really amp up the heat but the idea is great.

    6) Please Let Me
    I love a good Daddy story. So yum.

    7) The Scent of Them
    Nice twisty ending!

    8) A hot day
    I love rolling on my belly to finish! Great detail!

    9) Ready for You
    She broke a nail!!! Ouch! I loved the brutalness of this scene.

    10) The Private Show
    Ahhhh mirrored playtime! Great idea!

    11) Muscle Memory
    This one made me sad as it seemed like she lost someone. I loved your imagery.

    12) The Maid
    This idea was awesome! I took a spoon and put it in my nightstand.

    13) Simulated Lover
    This one made me sad, but I could envision the scene unfolding.

    14) All That Remains
    Another sweet homage to love lost. I love the use of the DIY cock toy!

    15) Blue Boyfriend
    This one was fantastic and so true to real life!

    16) Selena’s Interlude
    There is a vibrator app?! I loved that she had a valid reason to need to take the edge off.

    17) Ride the Train
    This was very cute and a different kind of public play. I loved knowing how she chose her spot to sit and having the knowledge that she did this often.

    18) The Gag
    I love a good ball gag. This story was very hot!

    19) The Dream
    Beautiful imagery!

    20) Her Little Frog
    This was a cute peek into cam life! I liked the description of your characters!

    21) All By Herself
    The build up of this one was very streamy!

    22) Open-Door Policy
    Hot roomates! The motivation was great and I loved the description of smells.

    23) Laundry Day
    I would kick my husbands butt if he used my vibrator! HA! This one was excellent and the imagery was spot on.

    24) A Little Bit More
    I know this feeling well! Love that you chose a glass dildo!

    25) Busy All Night
    I was a little confused about the connection and motivation on this one. I did like the earbuds story line. I think you needed more words to really make this story zing.

    26) Royal Showmanship
    This was so adorable! I loved the ending!!

    27) Waiting for DeliverySatiated
    The anticipation in this one was great and the flow of words really matched an orgasm building.

    29) 1+2=5
    This one was very original and it took me several reads to really understand the action, but it was well worth reading multiple times!

    30) In Loco Penis
    Oooh very hot! I love your descriptions!

    31) Over the hump
    Porn and playtime are always a good mix! Hot story!

    32) Hand-tastic Masseuse Review
    Yup! Super hot! I loved the sci-fi feel and the sense of future yet it feeling familiar.

    33) Orgasm Coma
    The idea behind this one was fantastic! I love a good escape room and the idea of being watched is so hot!

  19. Marie Rebelle says:

    1) Three Fingers Deep
    This is an exciting scene to read and definitely something I think many people have done to some degree. Maybe not all with an unlocked door and not all completely naked, but definitely the masturbation part. You might have wanted to remove the entire first paragraph and worked only the important details from that paragraph into the second.

    2) Clear Blue Sky
    A parting fuck and then a lovely masturbation scene and an orgasm to celebrate her freedom. That works for me! I love the details like her feet on the window and the window dripping with her orgasm.

    3) Role Model
    Indeed, a good example should always be set, but damn, how hard it must be for her not to orgasm in such a hot scene. Well done, well written.

    4) Playing with Magic
    A nice masturbation scene, nice details, but not original. Maybe a different setting (not bed) but a kitchen counter or outside on a veranda would have just gifted it the twist it needed.

    5) Little silver bullet
    A lovely story that has ticked many boxes for me – her research, her taking up the dare to buy a toy, her using it and her fantasizing about an older man. A sexy masturbation scene and well written!

    6) Please Let Me
    What I love about this scene is how, even though she is alone, she is still his, still seeking his approval and feeling his control. The italic sentences work, but there should not have been more as it would’ve weakened the piece. Well done!

    7) The Scent of Them
    I really love this! It’s well written, but it’s also a bit dark, the way she masturbates in their bed. Even though I have no idea what her relationship is to them, I don’t need to know, because as a reader I can fill in those details myself. I would love to see this as a longer story.

    8) A hot day
    There is nothing wrong with this scene. It’s a masturbation scene that works. However, it might just be a bit too standard. Maybe the shower would have been a better setting, with her on her knees fucking a dildo?

    9) Ready for You
    This could also be seen as a ‘standard’ masturbation scene, if you had not worked in some details such as the first line, the last line, the broken nail, the throat-fucking. That makes this scene stand out from other standard masturbation scenes.

    10) The Private Show
    What I like about this scene is that you have chosen for an anal toy and not the standard vaginal stimulation. I also like that she is watching her own show.

    11) Muscle Memory
    Just like with #9 this could have been a ‘standard’ masturbation scene, if the little details – her memories of him – wasn’t worked into the story. I sense some sadness in the last line.

    12) The Maid
    Everytime I read this I love it more!

    13) Simulated Lover
    I think it’s a brave choice you have made to use a sex doll as a sex toy. That said, this scene didn’t work for me from the moment I read the word ‘ badonkadonk’. Also, the last sentence ends too abruptly, as I think something should follow? Or maybe you should have ended it with an ellipsis?

    14) All That Remains
    You pulled me into this piece from the very first word, but when I got to ‘ Your weight feels glorious’, I was lost. You see ‘ No-one told me grief would feel this horny’ made me think he passed away but maybe I am mistaken? Sorry if I didn’t get the piece, as I really love your writing.

    15) Blue Boyfriend
    Your writing is good, but unfortunately this scene is just a bit too standard to stand out from the others.

    16) Selena’s Interlude
    An original place to masturbate and definitely a very original sex toy. I like it!

    17) Ride the Train
    Masturbating in the train between so many people is definitely an exciting setting, but I would have loved a little twist where she catches someone looking at her when she opens her eyes again.
    Watch out to not start more than two sentences after each other with the same word. That can make your writing troublesome to read.

    18) The Gag
    A very original orgasm scene and an original idea to make him challenge himself like this. Even though the actual masturbation only happens in the last two sentences, this is hot!

    19) The Dream
    A pestle as a sex toy. Original! I think you could have left the first paragraph away in this piece.
    I like this: ” My other hand, close by, dances attendance upon my pleasure.”

    20) Her Little Frog
    Where I like the idea of using a cam girl in your story, this story didn’t work for me, partly due to the inconsistent use of tense and italics. Sorry.

    21) All By Herself
    A very well written piece and a good tension building curve. Love this: “Her passion now owns her” and ” Her breathing quickens. Her womb contracts. Her body begins to shake.”
    One thing I would have preferred is if she didn’t cry out when she climaxed.

    22) Open-Door Policy
    There are some lovely descriptions in this piece and it undoubtedly is an erotic scene, but it somehow didn’t work to turn me on.

    23) Laundry Day
    Yes, this one definitely did it for me. The way it feels like a something ‘forbidden’ as he uses her silk knickers to masturbate, and her toy to get himself off. The combination of things made this one of the more original scenes in this round.

    24) A Little Bit More
    Where this is actually ‘just’ a masturbation scene, I like the fact that it comes after sex, because she needs more. That made this one stand out from many others.

    25) Busy All Night
    I liked the first half of the story but then the dialogue part about the earbuds distracted me from the sexiness of it. Maybe you should have left the part about the earbuds out of your story and just have mentioned that Sean would be away for the night. It would have given you more words for the masturbation part.

    26) Royal Showmanship
    Haha that last sentence put a huge smile on my face. You start your story mentioning the dragon and end it mentioning the dragon again, which completes this story. What happens in between those two sentences is a regular masturbation scene, set in a fairytale and using a self-carved toy, which is an original touch.

    27) Waiting for Delivery
    Too many sentences in this short piece had no verbs, which made it difficult for me to find this really erotic. I am talking about sentences as ‘ Working the pump, breathing labored, hips bucking. Inflated dick inside, one testicle being sucked in, painful, use the release button, cock deflating.’, ‘ Polaroid of your ex-wife trying to look sexy in her first lingerie outfit.’ and the first sentence of this piece.

    28) Punished…Mew Pfft Pfft
    I could totally see this bad kitty in my imagination and the story made me smile, but I don’t think this would work for me to use it as masturbation fodder.

    29) 1+2=5
    Using a mannequin with a strap-on as a sex toy is something I can totally picture, but this story didn’t work for me. The first two sentences are thoughts, I eventually got that after reading it a second time. I think this piece would have worked better if the thought pieces – the things she fantasizes about – were put in italics.

    30) In Loco Penis
    I like a bit of naughty fun in public or semi-public places and I like the voyeur part of this too. I could totally picture the straddle-style vibrator and can imagine it making a boring train journey a lot better. I also like the little twist in the end.

    31) Over the hump
    Definitely a hot story and I like that he used his wife’s vibrator. I think the story would have been even stronger if he had the vibrator against his anus, but that we the reader ‘sense’ that to him it’s virgin territory, almost ‘forbidden’.

    32) Hand-tastic Masseuse Review
    I love the futuristic setting of this and the originality of the sex toy. You have done well to make your story stand out from others, but I think you needed a bit more words to make the story really hot.

    33) Orgasm Coma
    I like the fact that there’s a male masturbation toy being used here, and even though this definitely is a hot story that will get people off, it’s still too ‘standard’. Maybe everything in this story would have worked if the place he used the toy was other than his bed.

    34) Escape Rooms and Doppelgängers
    I had to google what an escape room is exactly (my bad, not yours) and think this is an original idea, but even then I didn’t really get the story. I read it again after I googled, but still the story didn’t work for me. Sorry.

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