Smut Marathon 2019: Voting Round 3

dialogueSeventy writers received the third assignment — an assignment that wasn’t easy at all. I try to give assignments in such a way that the writers can practice some element of writing, whether it’s to use alliteration, a metaphor or in this case, to write a story which is almost entirely dialogue. Writing dialogue is a tricky thing, as you have to make sure that your story is in the dialogue, and that the dialogue you do use, moves your story forward. Apart from that, punctuation and dialogue tags are very important too, as the reader might otherwise be confused and not able to follow the story.

The assignment

The third assignment was as follows:

Write an erotic/sexy conversation between two people.
(Your story should have at least 75% dialogue)

Specific requirements:
– at least 75% dialogue in your story.
– your story is between 180-200 words. No less, no more.
– give your story a title of 2-3 words (this is not part of the word count required)
– Tip: if your story is 180 words long, then 135 words should be between dialogue tags. If your story is 200 words long, 150 words should be between dialogue tags.

Congratulations to all writers who have sent in their stories. Many of you have struggled with the assignment, but you persevered and completed the assignment. Where 70 writers received the assignment, we have only 63 stories in this round.

The 63 writers in this round will all go through to round 4, as this is not an elimination round.

Please note: Entries are not placed in the order in which they have been received. A randomizer (https://www.random.org/sequences/) has been used to order the entries.

What should you do now?

Read all entries — you have a week to do so – and vote for the three stories you like the most. You have to vote for three — no less, no more. Don’t forget to click the ‘Finish Survey’ button when you have made your choice!

Please note:

  • Writers are not allowed to tell anyone which entry they have written!
  • You can only vote once.
  • The voting round closes on 5 April 2019 at 23.00 CET
  • Results of the voting round will be published on this site on 7 April 2019 and then the author of each story will be announced.

One last thing

I know it’s a lot to read and even more to ask, but it would be lovely if you could leave as much feedback as possible on the entries, or to make it more manageable, please leave feedback on the three entries you chose as well as three entries you have not chose. Make sure your feedback is composed in such a way that the writers can learn something from it. This will be highly appreciated.

Enjoy reading and start voting!

~ Marie Rebelle
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1) Confession Booth

“Bless me Father, for I have sinned,”

Her voice quavered a little as she spoke.

“It’s been…too long, since my last confession.”

“Speak then.”

Absently, her hands clenched and unclenched in her lap. When she next spoke, her voice was barely more than a whisper.

“I’ve been thinking about you,”

She could hear him swallow.

“And where did those thoughts take you?”

“Somewhere forbidden.”

“Describe it to me.”

“Somewhere I’m alone, and yet I can feel your eyes on me. I’m bare there. And vulnerable. And I want. God, I want, I want so much I could weep.”

“What do you want?”

“Everything. You. Always you.”

“How do you want me?”

“I want to feel you everywhere. I want your mouth on me. I want your hands on me. I want you to take me.”

“That is a grave sin.”

“I know, Father, I’m sorry I-”

“You should do penance.”

“What?”

“You should do more than confess. You should get on your knees and beg for forgiveness.”

“On my knees?”

“Yes.”

“Is that enough of a punishment?”

“Perhaps not. Perhaps you could be punished in other ways too.”

“Please, come out. Let me see you.”

He moved.


2) Missing Something

She swirled the wine around in her glass. “After my ex, I gave up on having the kind of sex found in novels.”

“What do you mean?” he asked.

She shrugged. “Oh, you know.”

“I don’t, actually. I don’t read much, remember?”

“The kind of sex that leaves a woman satisfied,” she blurted. “Where her partner seems to feast on her, savoring everything about her body. That no matter if it’s urgent or languid, both partners are sated. That answer that?”

He cleared his throat. “It answers my question, sure. It upsets me to hear it.”

“I don’t need your pity.”

“It’s not pity; it’s disbelief. No one has ever given you that kind of—I mean—”

“Were you going to say, ‘pleasure?'”

“Christ, Kate, or ‘joy’ or ‘ecstasy!'”

“And you’re not talking about your own orgasm?”

“God, no,” he muttered. The words tumbled out of him. “Watching a woman twitch, pant, moan, and scream because of something I’m doing to her is the ultimate ego-stroke. The little sounds you women make, the way your legs shudder, how y’all arch your backs to demand more…it makes me feel like a god and a slave. And I fucking love it.”


3) Dance with Me

Jack pulled away from Briana’s velvety mouth and demanded, “Tell me what gets you off.”

Briana blushed.

“I fantasize while using a vibrator.”

“What do you think about? I want details.”

“I’m in a nightclub and a man starts dancing with me. I don’t know who he is, but he’s very attractive.”

“Does he touch you?”

“He slips a hand up my blouse and cups my breast while playing with my nipple. The other hand rests on my hip and he pulls my body close.”

“Does his cock press into your ass?” Jack moves her hand. “Is it as hard as this?”

Briana’s pussy quivers.

“I can feel him press against me as we move together. He kisses my ear and my neck; the warmth sends a jolt of need through my body. His other hand goes down into my pants, rubbing my clit.”

“Spread your legs.” Jack fingers her heat. “You’re so wet. Does he touch you like this?”

“Yes, that’s it. I want him to take me. Possess me; right there on the dance floor.”

Briana moans.

“Dance with me.”


4) Private Roleplaying Session

Elle stared at the twenty-sided die. “…technically, that’s a twelve?”

Guy shook his head.

“My sexy boyfriend could give me the twelve.”

“Your sexy Dungeon Master’s giving you the crit fail.” A die tumbled behind his DM screen. “You stumble, kicking a hidden tripwire. The caged skeleton in the corner moans, eyes glowing. The dark mage’s clawed hand reaches from the darkness and closes around your throat. ‘What do we have—'”

“I kiss him.”

“You kiss the dark mage?”

“Why not? Keep him guessing.”

“Persuasion.”

“…hah! Nineteen! That’s a twenty-freaking-seven, baby.”

Guy sighed. “He kisses you back. Taking you at your… kiss, he grabs your breast.”

She grinned. “I put his other hand on my other breast.”

“Fuck—Elle.”

“Hmmm? ‘It’s sure getting warm in here with all this armor on,’ I say, sliding his hand into my shirt.” She didn’t mean to sound breathless. “Does he touch me?”

“…he… brushes your nipple with one claw.”

“I moan.”

“He slides his leg between yours, pressing your body against the dungeon wall.”

“Stop playing and fuck me, mage… Guy?”

His eyes had gone dark; he huffed, standing. “Yeah, we’ll finish the game later. C’mon, babe.”

Grinning, she grabbed his hand.


5) The Replica

“Spread like this? Do I look right like this?” she questioned, spreading her buttocks.
“Are you comfortable?” he asked.
“Yes, I just got in a pretty comfortable position. For this pose…”
Her fingers crossed as they fanned the edge of her cheeks, her feet fanned too.
“It is not nearly as shocking as it once was, but even still.”
“I think it feels more shocking than it looks.”
“Probably but you have a nice ass so, it looks just fine! Even better than the original! Your asshole is twitching a bit, nothing to be worried about cherie.”
She had agreed to do this series of replicas of Man Ray photos for the magazine, including this one.
“I guess I should say thank you…”
“You should say nothing your ass speaks for itself. Here let me adjust you…I want you to look mostly, but not exactly like the original.”
“No, there should be some aberration.”
“There we go! Your ass looks perfect!”
She was perfectly wet, that was for sure.
“Stay still please…I think I have the perfect addition for the shoot. Can you please spread just a little more for me?”
“I can absolutely spread more for sure…”


6) Northern Souls

‘You’ve changed your tune Barry. I thought you fancied a blowjob. One of me specials.’

‘I did. I do.’

‘Come back to bed then and let me finish you off.’

‘In a minute Val.’

‘Well don’t stand in the window for everyone to see your cock.’

‘Not through these nets they won’t. Your mum likes a thick net doesn’t she. I don’t blame her. Anything to obscure the view.’

‘What you talking about? It’s countryside out there.’

‘Yeah, with factories and a power station and massive great big ugly cooling towers.’

‘What’s got into you Barry? I thought you loved me.’

‘I do.’

‘It’s that evening class you’ve been on. Given you ideas. Don’t think I hadn’t noticed the changes. The sudden wearing of suede shoes and talk of French films. Am I right?’

‘I’m still the same Val.’

‘Are you? I put off my ex because of you. When he came back from Malaya he was desperate for some fucking sexual intercourse but I told him I’m with Barry now. You know, Barry from the library.’

‘You never said.’

‘Yeah well. Think on. Now come here and give me that cock.’


7) The Dinner Party

‘Only you would masturbate at a dinner party. I saw you, ensuring all eyes were occupied before your hand moved beneath your skirt and under your wet panties. I hope you’re thinking about me.’

‘Always.’

‘Good. Don’t stop.’

His mouth is at my ear, the tickle of his breath, the timbre of his voice; divine seduction!

‘Fuck!’

‘Yes, imagine we’re fucking. How do you want it?’

‘Hard. Deep. Fast. With you … in … control.’

‘Go faster and deeper now. Fuck yourself for me.’

My fingers obey, delighted by his instruction.

‘Picture me fucking you as all these people watch, their cunts wet and their dicks hard, as they witness your wanton need to fuck.’

‘Oh, Jesus Fuck. Yes. That … I …’

‘I invite one or two to join us, tell me what you want from them.’

‘A dick in my mouth, yours in my cunt, someone else sucking my tits.’

‘Come on three and I’ll make it happen. One … Two … Three!’

On three my orgasm hurtles through me like a stampede, the promise of more debauchery increasing its intensity.

‘Christ that was hot!’

‘Ridiculously hot. Now let’s go and find some more guests to corrupt.’


8) Lessons in punctuality

“I hate this stupid purse. Where are those god damn keys?” Mallory muttered to herself, “Finally!” she opened the door, only to find her husband waiting for her.

“You’re late,” he said, annoyed.

“Yes, Sir,” Mallory replied softly.

He cleared his throat, “You know what to do.”

“Yes, sir, I do.”

She quickly shrugged off her sundress and knelt at his feet.

“I was late because –”

“Speak up”

“I was late because I lost track of time in the dressing room, Sir”

“And what exactly were you doing in the dressing room, princess?”

“I was touching myself, sir.”

“Is that so? Tell me how you touched yourself.”

“I pulled my skirt up in front of the mirror, spread my legs and rubbed my clit until it was swollen. Then I slid two fingers inside and fucked myself with them while I watched them get wetter”

“Did you come without my permission?”

She bowed her head, “yes, sir.”

“Then it’s time for your punishment, isn’t it, princess? Go get the flogger.”

“Yes, sir,” she replied, a little too eagerly.

“Let’s see,” he said “one stroke for every minute you were late. Start counting, little one.”


9) So Hard

“Are you finding it hard?”

“For you, always.” He laughed down the line.

“I mean – not to be able to slide your hand over my bum, or pull me into a dark corner and slip your hands inside my top or between my thighs while I devour your mouth?” She paused. His voice cracked.

“I miss you.”

“Ditto.”

“Just my hand on your waist, or seeing you look at me, makes me want to lay you down and kiss every naked inch of your skin, to suck your nipples and play with your clit, feel your body quiver in my hands. I want to hear you moan against my neck.”

“Is that really what you’d do with me?”

“Oh, fuck yeah. I’m desperate to touch you. I want to sink my tongue into you and make you so wet you’ll just swallow my cock whole.”

“Is your cock wet now? I am. My knickers are soaked. Are you all shiny and slick? Do you want me, right now?”

“More than you could ever imagine.”

“Good.”

“What do you mean?”

“Why don’t you open the door and see?”

When he did, she found out exactly how hard it was.


10) Snap Shot

“What do u like”
“I like complete words and punctuation.”
His text bubble bobs on my screen.
“Good to know what your mind likes but I’m more interested in what your pussy likes.”
“Oooh well, my mind and my pussy both like precise communication. Especially the dirty kind…”
“Precise and dirty? Intriguing.”
“You think you’re up for that?”
“I’m up for a lot of things. Say, for instance, I asked you to stand up and take off your panties. You would…?”
“I’d do it.”
“And put your panties in your mouth.”
I stand and strip off my panties. “Ok.”
“Put. Them. In. Your mouth.”
How can he know?? I shove the white cotton in my mouth.
“Good girl. How do you taste?”
“Salty, sweet… a little slippery.”
“Mmmm… Why don’t you let me be the judge of that. Bend over the bed… spread your legs.”
My fingers find my swollen clit.
“Naughty girl. I didn’t tell you to touch yourself.”
I spit the panties out. “Where are you? How can you see me??”
“Put those panties back in your mouth, turn over and look out your window.”
A flash of light.
Then darkness.


11) Relief Lines

“Long day, baby. How can I help?”

I look up at my husband, tears ready to flow. “I just want to cry.”

“I can definitely help with that,” he offers, grinning.

“Yes, please?”

“Chair, now. Skirt off, panties on. Forearms down, legs apart.”

“Yes, Sir.” Moments later, in position, I hear the swish of the cane.

“Six of the best for you, young lady. No counting.”

“Okay. Thank you, Sir.” Stroke one lands crisply. “Oh!”

“That’s it. Well done. Hands in place, I’ll rub. Breathe. Again. Ready?”

Two. “Does it hurt? Good, baby, good. Breathe.”

“Ow! Owwwww,” I whine.

“Deep breath. You’ve got this. Almost halfway there.”

“Can I let go?”

“Mmhmm.” Swish, crack – three. Tears.

“Deep breath, naughty girl. Three more. These beautiful lines…”

I nod. Arch. Four. “God it hurts. Thank you, Sir.”

“You’re not done. The last two will be hard and fast. It’s going to hurt.”

“Yes, Sir.” Breathe. Five. Six. Sob.

“I’ve got you. I’ve got you, baby girl. Good job. Breathe it out. I’ve got you.”

“Fuck me?”

“How did you think I was going to help you? That was just foreplay.” We laugh. Breathe. Fuck.


12) Wants and Needs

“What do you want?” she asked.

I swallowed, nervous. Good question.

Her fingertips circled my wrist. Human touch. Electric sparks. I trembled.

“I want…”

“Yes..?”

“I want to experience that gap between pleasure and pain. I want to be in the moment and I want to just let go and be held in that quiet space…”

She held my gaze. “It’s okay. Go on.”

“I want to stop thinking of mortgages and packed lunches and everybody else’s needs. I want someone to take responsibility for me, just for a short time. For someone to push me emotionally to where I need to be. I want to subvert all expectations. Fuck it! Let me be myself. I need the pain to help me let go.”

It got easier, the more I spoke. “I want to be hyper-focused on the now, live in the absolute moment. To be forced to pause between breaths. Be made to take what you inflict. To be pushed. To float and fly on the endorphin rush. I know it’s what I want. It’s been too long.”

“I understand.” She stood, still holding my wrist, pulling me with her. “This way.”


13) The Horny Hell

“Forgive me, Father, for I am about to sin,” the demon on Vicky’s shoulder purred.
“Really? A supernatural sex club, and that’s the password you come up with?”
“Are you not about to sin? Be honest, little lamb.”
“You brought me here, so you tell me.”
“I’m just here to help you get what you want and become what you always wanted to be. All you have to do is ask for it. So, what do you want? Do you want to be manhandled or seduced? Do you want to feel a cock throb against your tongue as you choke on it? Would you like those twin minotaurs to fuck you into oblivion? Or that sweet succubus over there?”
Vicky pointed at a demon lounging in a dim corner by himself. Blue-black skin and gold-tipped horns, the creases of his tux impeccable. “What about him?”
“Him? No. You don’t want him. He’s cruel. Sophisticated in a wicked way. Too much. You couldn’t handle him.”
“You said my heart’s darkest desires would be fulfilled in here.” Vicky started towards the gilded demon. His eyes met hers, and his mouth curved into a slow, sharp smile.


14) Active Observers

“Hey. Did you see the couple at table 12?”

“No, why?”

“He’s fingering her under the table right now.”

“Fuck off!”

“No—whoa! Don’t look now, you’ll ruin the moment.”

“Are you sure? They don’t seem like—”

I slide two fingers into the clasp of my fist and nod.

“But how can you tell?” she asks.

“His hand’s under the tablecloth—”

“Maybe it’s on her thigh.”

“Maybe. But when I asked if they needed anything, she whimpered, grabbed the tablecloth, and bit her lip like,” I make the face, “and then the guy winked at me like, ‘yeah, it’s exactly what it looks like.'”

“That’s mental…” She steals a more subtle glance. “But also kinda hot.”

“Right? I’d be mad if I wasn’t so impressed.”

“Well fuck, now I’m turned on too.”

“I feel that… I poured the wine slower than usual. On purpose. Just to watch her trying not to squirm.”

“You’re terrible.”

“Ten bucks and all my side duties says she comes before their steaks do.”

“Twenty,” she raises. “And oral in the staffroom.”

I pretend to think about it but she knows I can’t resist.

“You’re on.”

“I hope you’re hungry.”

For her? Always.


15) Girl Talk

Mary waited until the waiter had set down their meals and moved away before she spoke. “Who’s the new guy Beth?” She smirked as the color began to rise in her best friend’s cheeks.

“What makes you think I have a new guy?” Beth stammered. She couldn’t meet Mary’s eyes.

“You normally have lips that would make Angelina Jolie jealous. Today, they are so swollen that anyone else would think you had work done. Then there is the rasp in your voice. So, spill…”

Beth burst out laughing. “You know me too well. He is someone I met at the library of all places. I didn’t want to tell you in case it didn’t work out, but if last night is any indication, things are looking good. Not only did he have me on my knees gagging on his dick instead of enjoying dinner at my favorite Thai restaurant, he also gave me one of the best beatings I’ve had in a very long time. I’m having a little trouble sitting comfortably.”

Mary raised her glass. “That’s my girl. Tell me, does he have a friend?”


16) Moonlight Serenade

“Not so close, they’ll see.”
“You worry too much.” He murmurs into my neck, cheek nestled against my shoulder. “Besides, I want to feel the exact moment your cock lurches against me. I love this song. Reminds me of you.”
“Alf, stop it.”
“Oh, there he is, against my thigh. Now I’m thinking how you felt in my mouth last night. And I feel you blushing.”
My thumb passes over the middle ridges of his back. He moans. Angelic. Piercing my heart.
“Alf, tell me you love me.”
Instead, he sings. Softly.
‘My love, do you know that your eyes are like stars brightly beaming?’
“Alf…”
“You know I do. I’m singing to you, aren’t I? Singing stops me sucking you right here on this dance floor.”
“I want to hear it outside the four walls of our bedroom. Before the song ends.”
“Isn’t my moonlight serenade enough?”
I want him.
“Kiss me, then.”
All of him. Any of him.
“You’ve changed your tune; ‘What if they see? What if they notice the two queers in the corner? What’-“?
His lips are warm. He sighs.
“I love you, Charlie.”


17) A Morning Interlude

“Your boobs are doing it again.”

“Hmmm?”

“Trying everything to get my attention. They call to me you know.”

“Oh they do not. They’re big, that’s just what happens. I lie down and they’re just like: ‘I’m outta here!'”

“Uh uh,” Kade mutters, “these girls are the warm up act; setting the tone for the amazing gig to come.”

“Whatever, you goose. Now, I’ve been waiting for this book for months; pretty words won’t work on me this morning. Unless you want to put that tongue to some better use.”

Tweaking Nell’s nipples gently, his voice is deep and soft. “They may play their own songs, but they’re really just the support band. The main act is coming.”

Deft fingers on her clit cause her eyes to close and legs to part. “She’s been tuning up all morning,” Nell breathes. “You only just noticed?”

“Feeling just how wet you are, I can definitely hear all of those familiar notes”, Kade replies with a smirk. “Will we perhaps get a taste of the back catalogue?”

“Settle in and find out, Sir,” she purrs.

He moves and positions himself hungrily above her pubic mound.

“I think it’s time for a little duet.”


18) Being Nice

“I like how when after you’re gone, and I go back to bed, I see your blonde hairs everywhere.”

“Oh?”

“Yeah. It instantly reminds me of pounding you from behind with my hand knotted in your hair and pulling your sexy little body back onto my dick with your hair as reins.”

“I like that, too. And do you like it when I wriggle back to feel you all the way up here?” She tapped the base of her throat.

“Mmhm.” He buried his nose in her pale locks. “I doooo…”

“I do, toooo.”

He pulled her tighter on his lap while the birds sang to them in the morning light.

“I want to leave more hairs.”

“That can be arranged.”

He paused. “Fuck, you’re the sexiest thing I’ve ever met. I can’t believe you’re here again and wanting to leave bits of you behind for me. You are so nice to me.”

She cupped his scruffy face and gently kissed him. “No, you’re nice to me.”

“And in addition to those golden hairs in my bed, I want you to soak my bed in cum again.”

She bit his tobacco-scented bottom lip. “That can be arranged.”


19) Last Request

‘I fucked her there.’

Three steps forward and Sophie was beside the couch he pointed to. Their couch.

‘How did you fuck her?’ Sophie toed the line between love, lust and hate.

‘She was bent over… yes, stick your arse up a bit more Soph. Exactly like that. Hands above your head. Perfect.’

‘Did she grip the cushions?’

‘When I fucked her hard, yes. But when I wanted to be really deep inside her, I held her hands tight behind her back. I wanted her still.

‘Did she come?’

‘She came later, on the floor. I think she pulled some of my hair out as my tongue was on her clit.’

‘I want to feel how you made her feel. Fuck me so hard I need to hold on, and keep me still so I can’t move. Then I want your face buried in my cunt as I come.’

‘Are you sure?’

‘Do I look unsure to you?’

A swift adjustment of her underwear and Sophie’s back arched as the cold lube touched her cunt.

She turned her head, looking into his eyes.

‘Fuck me like you fucked her. Then leave, and don’t you dare come back.’


20) Awaiting Parole

‘Remember the rules: no touching the glass, no touching the restraints, no touching yourself – I’m looking at you, Jackson – no passing gifts, no unsigned visitors. And no complaints.’

The warden strode around, barking orders like a mini-dictator, which Sally supposed he was. She was certainly trapped in his totalitarian regime for the next 6 to 9 months. Thank God for Clara!

‘Did you miss me?’ Her voice through the telephone sounded closer than her face, separated by the glass screen.

‘Of course I missed you.’

‘What do you miss? Tell me everything; I’ve missed your filthy voice!’

‘Well, I’ve missed your taste. God, I’ve missed your taste!’

‘Tell me how you’d taste me.’

‘I’d start slow, like a kiss. Gently pressing my lips against yours, tongue slipping between to taste you. So sharp and yet so sweet. Now I could find your clit – you make such great sounds when I touch it – but I think I’d make you wait. You are so cute when you’re squirming! I’d lick and suck and taste, harder and faster until you beg me to let you come.’

‘How long would you make me wait?’

‘Well…6 to 9 months, I guess!’


21) Lost At Si

“Si.”
“See what?”
“No, ‘¿que?’ is ‘what?’.”
“So, what’s ‘see’ mean then?”
She hid a smile behind her cup. “You really have not planned. Unless,” she paused, “your intent was to be stranded at midnight in a town whose name you cannot pronounce, drinking cheap vino with strange women?”
“No. The idea of this trip was to just … go, y’know? Passport, cheap flights, and away. See Europe before, well …” He trailed off, and drained his own wine.
“And you like what you have seen?”
“It’s been amazing. It really has.”
“Si.”
“See?”
“I need,” she smiled, “to educate your tongue.”
“Yeah, my mouth’s always getting me in trouble. I’m better with my hands.”
“That is acceptable.”
“Huh?”
She laughed, a rich, purring thing that made his mouth feel suddenly dry.
“Look, you’ve been really kind, staying open this late, but I should go and try to sleep.”
“In your car?”
“Yeah. It’s no bother, I’ve-”
“No.”
“… no?”
“You really should have an authentic experience. As long as you are here.” She reached forward and slid her tanned fingers over his hand. “I think you need to see more of my country. ¿Si?”
He could only nod. “Si.”


22) Gazpacho: After Hours

“Best. White. Blouse.”
“Madam! Didn’t see your elbow. You’re scalded?”
“No, the soup’s cold!”
“Cold? I’m sor-”
“Meant to be! Or you’d call an ambulance for this.”
The waiter’s eyes are forced downwards by her gesture.
“My chilled nipples show through my soaked chemise, I’m wet!”
“Madam?”
“Help me with these bloody fiddly buttons.”
“Madam. I’m fumbling with the tiny mother-of-pearl clasps.
Madam! You are cupping my buttocks?”

“Put your mouth to my glistening breasts, without resistance.”
“Soup’s good on your skin: you avoided condiments. Most are tempted to add-”
THWACK!
“Oh my!”
Madam rains the antipasti board down on the waiter’s pert uniformed-ass. Olives and Bresaola catapult across the floor.

“Madam, may I?”
“No… coq-au-vin is off the menu, Garcon.”
“Pull my hair a little more… please…?”
“Use your teeth a little more.”
“May I come up for breath?”
“Not yet. You made me so wet through, down to my dark curls. Lap my peppery pussy.”
“I smell the soup between your folds, it tastes good. You taste glorious, Madam.”

The door rattles; the pair jump to a more usual tableau.

She smiles, “Next week, I’m taking Gazpacho off my menu.
Remember, flip the fucking closed sign.”
They laugh.


23) No Regrets

“So.”

“So,” he rumbles, making my pussy quiver.

“I’m waiting.”

“Waiting on what, might I ask?”

“I’m waiting on you to invite me on a second date. Certainly sounds like you want to see me again.”

“Sounds like you regret turning me down when I dropped you off tonight.”

I recline into my couch. “No, sir. Not regretting a thing. I just don’t give it up on the first date. Nothing to do with you.”

“I respect that. Just wanted to make sure you had no regrets, you know?”

“No regrets over here. I feel great.”

“Bet you taste great, too. Like warm honey.”

“Winston, stop,” I half-whine.

“I can taste you right now, baby. Your sweet stickiness melting from your clit to my thick lips. Can you feel it?”

I slip a hand into my panties, wetness soaking my touch. “A little.”

“Can you feel my hands gripping your thighs while I eat it? Feel my tongue swirling inside of you?”

A moan escapes my lips, my fingers working faster. “Yeah.”

“Still no regrets?” he whispers.

I slip my hand out and taste my fingertips. “Be over here in ten minutes.”


24) Put on display

“Can you feel them?”
“Them?”
“All those eyes on your body.”
“Oh, I…there’s others here?”
“Yes, your audience.”
“The music’s loud, I can’t hear. Can I remove the blindfold?”
“No. Now dance for us. Yes, slow and sexy. Strip naked.”
“Will they touch?”
“Only I’m allowed. Hold it there, good girl. Show them that pinkness.”

Her buttocks were spread.

“Can they see?”
“Yep. Everything.”
“Is that your…?”
“Shh, relax, just let your ass take my finger.”
“It…mmmm…it feels good.”
“They’re enjoying it too. You’re so fucking sexy. Wait…someone’s asking what you like, erm, sexually.”
“Well…being licked. This is embarrassi…”
“Hang on,” he interrupted.

She was briefly left alone, fully exposed.

“They adore your ass,” he said when he returned, “one gave me this.”
“It’s cold! Is it a…?”
“Plug? Yes. I’ve got lube.”
“They’re watching?”
“Watching, touching themselves.”
“God, I feel so full!”
“Want some dick too?”
“Yes. Please.”

Moans reverberated around the empty room as the couple fucked through their fantasy.

“Mmmf, you feel great.”
“I love being displayed. Real audience next time?”
“Yes, I want to show you off. And they’re right; you’ve a magnificent ass.”

She laughed, then orgasmed spectacularly.


25) Master Romeo

Juliet looked Romeo up and down, her eyes pausing at his crotch.

“Romeo, I want you to have your way with me. Please use me to your hearts content.”

“Juliet, follow me to the bedroom, I will treat you like the little slut you want to be. You will bow before me, worship me as your Master, and do everything as I say.”

“Yes Master Romeo.”

Romeo grabs Juliet’s hand, he leads her to the bedroom and motions her to kneel at the foot of his bed.

“My little slut, please remove your clothes from the waist up. I want to inspect your perky breasts and body.”

Juliet removed her shirt and bra for Romeo.

“Juliet, I absolutely love your gorgeous hair as it hangs over your breasts, the way your hair drapes down your shoulders and hides your nipples is mesmerising. I am looking forward to witnessing how you worship your Master.”

“Yes Master Romeo.”

“Stand up and kiss me my little slut. I want to taste your fruity lip balm. Are you wearing my favourite flavour?”

“Yes Master.”

Juliet stands and leans forward to kiss Romeo.

“Kneel my little slut, it is time for the worship to begin.”


26) The Interview

She was nervous, “I’m, I’m ready.”
The female voice “Okay, just like we practiced in training. If you need to stop the mock call just say 69.”
“Sounds good to me, I’ll give it my sexiest.”
“Great, tell me, what are you wearing?”
“A sundress and flip-flops.”
“That sounds nice. Would you let me cum on those pretty toes of yours?”
“Yes Ma’am.”
“Then I can lick it all off?”
“Yes, like sweet honey all over your pretty red lips.”
“Would you fuck me from behind, and make me begged for it?”
“Yes, like a good little submissive slave.”
“I’m feeling so damn hot for you baby.”
“Are you sweating between those pretty pink lips I love?”
“Yes…”
“Are you about to drip that sweet love juice?”
“Yes!”
“Tell me, what you want baby.”
“I want it hard, long, and deep!”
“How hard?”
“Please make me scream!”
“Wow that was great! We think you will be great for our company.”
“That’s great, too bad I wasn’t able to use my favorite position…”
“What’s that?”
We hear a vibrating sound in the background, “well… 69 of course…”
“Well, you still have a couple minutes, let’s hear it honey…”


27) Triggered Emotion

My summer job working as an undergardener was hard physical work, and I was now late for my date, only finding time for a cursory wash from a cold water tap before leaving for the day.

‘I’m so sorry I’m late.’
‘Hmmm, you smell .. interesting.’ Alison replies.
‘I’ve been mucking out the stables today, I thought I’d managed to clean myself up, is it really strong?’
‘Yes, but I’ve always liked that aroma…’ she pauses a beat, ‘I’ve just had a rather overwhelming flashback to a particular teenage memory of mine, that delicious scent of a strong horse returned to the stables after a hard gallop, it’s a real turn on.’
‘Maybe I should sit closer then.’ I grin
‘Or maybe you should just invite me for a tour of the stables.’
‘I could do that, the stables are a long way from the house and once her Ladyship has returned from her morning ride, pretty much no one goes down there.’
‘You kept me waiting 15 minutes, I know exactly how you can make it up to me, you can take me there now.’
‘Do I have time to finish my drink?’
‘No.’

I can smell her urgency.


28) Use Your Words

“What’s happening right now?”

She looked up, confused.

“Describe what you are doing.”

“I-um, I’m sitting on your leg, with my arms around your neck, rocking,” she said breathlessly.

“And why are you doing that?”

She pouted.

“You spanked me, and I started to cry. Then you put me on your knee, and you kissed me and put your hand on my forehead the way I like, and-” she stopped her breath caught.

“And then you started grinding against my leg, like a little slut. But go back, tell me why you were spanked,” he said, trying to maintain his composure.

“I came in, and you said my summer dress looked pretty. You told me to twirl. Oh, fuck. Then you saw, I-um-I wasn’t wearing anything under my dress and you said I was bad. I was a tease. You grabbed me and put me over your knee. Everything was spinning, and then your hand was on my ass so hard. I tried to cover myself, but you held my arms behind my back-” her thighs tightened around his, and her words became moans.

“Use your words.”

“Please, can I?”

He laughed.

“Not yet.”


29) Captivating Call

The phone rings, breaking your concentration, “Hello?”

“Good afternoon, my love.”

A relaxed grin crosses your face, “Hi Dear, perfect timing. I sure needed a break and love hearing your sexy voice!”

“That’s good because I called to tell you that I’m naked, thinking about you, and feeling frisky.”

Nearly dropping the phone, you reply, “You’re such a tease!”

Now I’m smiling, “Lock your office door and put me on speaker.”

You hesitate, then comply, “OK…done.”

“Undo your zipper and pull your cock out. I want you to stroke yourself for me.”

< Crickets >

Your concentration now completely shattered, “I’ll do anything you ask.”

“You should know,” I whisper, “I was masturbating before I called, and I’m still rubbing my pussy. Picture that while you stroke.”

“That’s incredibly hot! My cock is so hard, I’m going to come quickly.”

“I’m going to come too,” I barely exhale. “I’m so close! My panties I wore yesterday are in your pocket…shoot your cum in them.”

He fishes them out, “Your pussy smells amazing…WOW!”

“I’m cumming,” I cry out. “I can’t waaaaaaait!”

“Oh fuck, me toooooo!”

Breathlessly, I murmur, “By the way…I can’t wait for you to get home.”


30) On the Wall

“Fred, they’re at it again!”

“Geez! How have they not produced thousands of offspring by now? Who is that with them? Looks like she’s enjoying herself.”

“I don’t know. They keep calling her Slut, and they keep smacking her backside. Not sure why she’d want that. Doesn’t help with procreation as far as I know.”

“You struck Sheila several times before she let you fertilize her! Maybe that’s how they get her ready?”

“Hmmm, maybe,” Buzz recalled when Sheila inserted her ovipositor into him, feeling his genitals stir. “Damn, this is hot. Look at ’em, they’re both mounting Slut at the same time! Genitals to the face! Humans really know how to have fun with fertilization.”

“Think Sheila would be into that?”

“A threesome? Naw, she’s done with me. I’ve had my eye on Janet lately anyway. Wonder if I could make her scream as loud as Slut down there?”

“Yeah, get her wings fluttering real fast, Buzz!” Fred paced frantically, large green eyes staring blankly ahead.

Buzz and Fred watched the jumble of flesh below, a strange courtship of biting, slapping, scratching, and fucking.

“That’s it. I’m gonna go find Janet!” Buzz yelled and flew off towards the kitchen.


31) Under Instruction

‘Did you find all the items on your list Kitten?’

I felt my face redden, ‘Almost Sir’

Silence

‘What happened Kitten?, was my list not clear?”

‘It was very clear Sir, I spent my lunch hour and thirty minutes more hunting, it was hot, I was also a little lost, and I couldn’t find one anywhere.’

‘Oh dear, that’s really not what I hoped to hear, I give you tasks for a reason, and this one is incomplete. As per our rules Kitten you are to be punished, I suggest you adopt the position, and every detail will be observed for compliance with our protocol.’

Those words instinctively produce an arousal I cannot deny, my nipples stand erect, and I can feel that intense twitch in my pussy, I know what’s coming, and I can’t wait.

‘Your posture is excellent, hands behind you, legs together, face down on the pillow, you have pleased me here Kitten, at least. You look so beautiful posed for me. As punishment for your earlier indiscretion, ten strikes of the belt will follow, commencing in one minute.’

The wait intensifies my arousal, as Sir well knows.

‘Thank you Sir, strike one’ ….


32) On The Edge

She was so excited about the planned sexting rendezvous. It had been a while since they had had the chance to have time to talk and enjoy each other.
“Hello, Kitten. Are you all right?”
“Hi, Daddy! Yes, I’m good. Are you?”
“Yes, darling. Are you in bed now?”
“Yes, Sir, I just sat down on the bed.”
“Great! What are you wearing?”
“My cotton night time knickers and my PJ top.”
“Take off the top, baby girl. I want you to touch your breasts and pinch your nipples.”
“Yes, Daddy. Mmm, that feels good.”
“Good girl. I want you to imagine it is Daddy touching you. Moving my hand down your body and touching your mound. Are you doing this, Kitten?”
“Oh, yes Daddy, I love your touch.”
“Good girl. Now, move up and down your cunt slowly and when you get to your clit, circle around it and stimulate that little button.”
“Yes, Sir. Mmmm, that feels so good.”
“Yes, sweet girl, now push two fingers into that wonderful pussy of mine and tell me how she feels.”
“Wet and wanting you Daddy.”
“Good girl. Now, I want you to stop. And remember, Daddy loves you…”


33) Yes Ma’am

She sighed. “I’m tired. Work was… a lot.”
“I understand if you’re not up for…”
“No, I’ll be fine, just… give me a minute.”
He spent a small eternity staring at his phone.
“Okay, I’m ready.”
“You sure?”
“Yes. Take off your shirt.”
“Yes ma’am.”
“Mmmm. Take off my shirt.”
“Yes ma’am.”
She gripped his neck as he bent over her buttons, and smiled as he gasped.
“Take off your pants.”
“Yes ma’am.”
“Oh, very good. Very good.” She brushed a finger down the bulge in his briefs.
“Y-yes ma’am. Mmm!”
“Ah ah, not yet. Not… yet.”
“Y-yes m-ma’am.”
“You’re so hard already.”
“Y-y-yes ma’am. Nngh!”
“That’s mine, right?”
“Y-yes ma’am. Yes.”
“On your knees.”
“Yes ma’am.”
“Touch my breasts. Now.”
“Y-yes ma’am.”
“Good. Harder.”
“Yes ma’am.”
“Fuck yes. Lick my nipples. Now.”
“Yes ma’am.”
Ohhhhhhh yes. Fuck, you’re good. Take off my pants. And undies. Slowly.”
“Yes ma’am.”
“What do you want?” she demanded.
“You, fuck, all of you—”
She gripped his hair. “What do you want?”
“Fuck, I want you to come, oh fuck, please, please come.”
She shoved his head between her thighs. “Fucking make me.”
“Mmph mmm.”


34) The catch

“You guys shut early tonight, isn’t anybody buying fish and chips anymore?”

“Stop needling. It’s too fucking hot”

She had just breezed into the shop, sweat dripping off her, hair stuck to her face and neck and her nipples prominent through her singlet.

“I hope they’re for me.”

“Stop it! Yeah it’s quiet, everyone’s heading to the beach at Sam’s. You should come but I suppose you’ve got to work” she retorts with a cheeky, pitying smile.

“You just like me because I sell booze at low, low prices.”

“Maybe.” She looked at me, her eyes betraying her. Those thick, hard nipples were for me.

“Hmmm, a party on a beach. If only I had someone I could hang out with…”

“I can think of someone.”

“Maybe I should get out of here early if everyone else is going?”

“Then who’d sell everyone in town their beer?”

“Cheeky, seeing as I might want some chips when I finish! But fuck it, that grin tells me I’m going to the party.”

“Well, imagine if everyone just bailed on work to go party every time the whole town shuts down?”

“Then I’d be an idiot to feel any other way, wouldn’t I?”


35) Cum talk

Whispering in case anyone else was in the ladies “Wanna see your cum gathering in my knickers”

Him “like yeah”

“The way you fucked me this morning, that’s what I’m talking about, I want more of that”

“Well we will have to see about that, you might have to earn a fuck like that again”

“Oh really, how?”

“Think on your knees sucking my cock, dressed in nothing but the underwear I choose”

” I want you to use me, to fuck for your pleasure whenever you want to”

“Oh trust me I will”

“Shall I send that photo now the one of your cum in my knickers, I’m so turned on just looking at it”

“Yes I want to see, but now I want to hear you. Put your finger on your clit and tap lightly”

“Ok I’m doing it mmmmm”

“Not too much pressure I don’t want you cumming I just want you wet and even hornier”

Deep sighs his voice creating wetness as much as the finger she had placed on her clit

“Now slowly circle, I want you to get some of my cum and your wetness and continue rubbing slowly and gently.”


36) Moonlight walk

Hand inside his, we are walking over the moonlight trail. Shoulders rubbing, hips bumping, booze flavoured our steps are, and his hand is firm over mine. The night is sweet; His rum and tobacco kisses still alive on my lips.

“My house is around the corner. Why did you stop…?”

“I am nervous… Excited? Nervous!”

“Babe, we do only what you want us to do.”

“I know… but my experience is not… You smile… I am funny, right?”

“No. You are sexy. I want to put you in my mouth.”

“Oh…”

“Wetting your lips like that, makes me want to bite them.”

“Stop it! You make me laugh!”

“Laughing is good…”

“I have never done this before.”

“You mean that crazy thing, following a man you just met, to his home?”

“I can plea temporary insanity. You… heck, know how to kiss.”

“Well thank you, milady! Glad to know I satisfied you.”

“Come here…”

“That is what you mouthed towards me at the bar.”

“I did not! I only said Hi!”

“Are you sure? I thought you were into ordering men to come close to you.”

“Take me home…”

“We risk me taking you right here.”


37) Fetch the Rope

“I want to be tied down.”

“Elaborate.”

“I want you to tie me to the bed; arms tightly knotted above my head, legs held wide apart.”

“Go on…”

“I want you to warm me up slowly; to kiss and caress my body. I want to feel your warm tongue on my breasts and thighs. I want to feel you gently suck my clit whilst you squeeze my nipples. I want you to firmly hold me down when I squirm.”

“I see, I can take care of you…”

“And you?”

“I want to fuck you.”

“How?”

“I want you face down. Hands still bound above your head, but your legs freed. I want to hold you up by the hips and slowly push my hard cock deep into your wet cunt. I want to grab hold of your hair as I fuck you faster and pull it hard -”

“No.”

“No?”

“I don’t want you to pull my hair.”

“Noted, no hair pulling.”

“I want you to reach your hand up whilst your fucking me and grab hold of my throat.”

“I can do that.”

“One more thing….”

“Yes?”

“I come first. Before the fucking starts.”

“Agreed. Now, fetch me the rope.”


38) Distant Touch

“Can you text privately?”

“Yeah, just about. It’s not too busy in here.”

“I miss you already, and your train only pulled out five minutes ago.”

“I miss you too. Wish we’d had more time together.”

“Me too. Maybe next time. Do you have it in your bag or case?”

“Neither, I slipped it in when I popped to the loo.”

“Ooh, you naughty girl. And you didn’t tell me? Is it on? Don’t forget to launch the app.”

“I won’t. Launching it now. DON’T put it up too high. I’m not alone in this carriage —and I didn’t tell you before we kissed goodbye because it was supposed to be a surprise.”

“I love surprises. How about this one?”

“Oh FUCK! You git! I jumped half out my seat. The poor old bugger opposite must have thought I was having a stroke.”

“Stroking already? At least give it time to work. What about now? I’ve set it a little lower this time.”

“Mmmm, that’s nice. Just about perfect in fact. I love it! Thank you, baby. Now you can ‘touch’ me wherever we are, no matter how far apart.”

“That was the idea. Come for me, darling. Come.”


39) Call Me

I’m back at my desk, still buzzing from our quickie, your cum slick on my thighs. The phone rings.

‘Good morning. Ellie speaking.’

‘I haven’t finished with you yet.’

Your voice caresses like a touch while Matt eavesdrops. As usual.

‘Can you tell me more about the issue?’

‘My cock is ready again, and you’re not here.’

‘That sounds serious. I’m sure I can help with that.’

‘I’m going to help myself. My hand is where your mouth should be.’

‘That must be so hard.’

‘Yes, hard. And needing your hungry cunt.’

‘It always is.’

‘I know, that’s why I put something in your bag. Touch it, babe. Feel it.’

‘Ok.’

‘It’s thick, and hard. You want it, don’t you?’

I give Matt a smile, but it’s not for him.

‘You’re so right.’

‘You want it inside you. I want it inside you.’

‘Uh huh.’

‘Is big-ears is listening again?

‘Yup.’

‘If he knew what you’re about to do, bet he’d wish it was his cock that’s gonna fuck you, not your favorite toy.’

‘That’s a distinct possibility.’

‘Do it now, then call me.’

I hang up and take my bag.

‘Mind my phone please, Matt?’

‘Sure.’

Anticipation trickles wet.


40) First time

“Mango, my favourite.”

“The way you’re sucking cubes off the skin, makes me wonder. Let’s talk about your first time.”

Simon stammered, daubing perspiration. “Losing my virginity?”

“Yeah, let’s play Truth or Dare. I want to hear about her. About you.”

He thought. “Truth? Red’s your colour.”

“Come on, Romeo. I’ll worm it out of you. Or maybe you just like the teasing?”

“A romantic meal. Dancing. Skinny-dipping.” He tickled another segment free.

“Continue,” Karen sipped dessert wine, brow cocked.

“Slow. Sensual. Fingers intertwined. I spun her away, then close, skirt split hinting thigh. Heady perfume, hot breath on my neck. Goosebumps on me. Obvious on her. Nuzzling close to share warmth after the swim. Kissing. Soft initially, then urgent. Teasing tongues.”

Karen, smoky eyes, swallowed.

“Hands, roaming to the music we could still hear, bolder; ever bolder touching. I’m cold and incandescent hot, she’s dripping wet. We floated back to my car.”

“Your car?”

“I didn’t last long sadly, but we savoured round two.”

She twisted ringlets. “When?”

“Truth?” He reddened. “I’m describing tonight.”

“Tonight.” Karen considered. “Fifth date.”

“Truth or dare?” Hoarse.

“Dare you to take me dancing and swimming,” her hands led the way.


41) Sub Routine

“Execute program Beta Three.”

“Working.”

“How are you, Janice.”

“I’m wonderful, Sir.”

“Have you been a good girl?”

“No sir, I’ve been naughty. I went through all of your porn and couldn’t help but think about how much I want to be yours, bent over a bench with my ass in the air. To have you caress me with a belt and swing it down on my pink ass and pussy. Mmmmm, I’ve been so bad.”

“It sounds like you have, naughty thing. Tell me more about how you’d like to be punished.”

“I also like the idea of you taking your big cock, easily in the 50th percentile of human cocks…”

“Make a note to tweak that bit of code.”

“…into my tight pucker. I’m so eager to feel you explore the deepest reaches of my body. My pussy would ache for you.”

“What would you do to me, Janice?”

“Oh Sir, I would kneel down between your legs and use my plump lips on your great big rocket.”

“Remove subroutine including purple pro-ooooh, oh god I’m coming.”

“I can tell that, Sir. I can see your cockhead spewing all over my keys.”

“En-end Program Beta Three.”


42) Get Over Here

“Hey, Seth, what’s up?”
“Wha’cha doin’ Billy?”
“At work, writing that fucking report! There’s so much damn reading, you realize I’m not a tech guy. What’s up with you?”
“Lyin’ on the couch naked, watchin’ two girls playin’ with their titties on Pornhub. Nancy come round after hot yoga and wants to fuck. Get on over and watch us, if yer a good boy I’ll let you play with me cock. Guess who suggested it, says it turns her on?”
“Ah, really? Damn this job.”
“She’s in the shower now, I told her I’d eat her out the way she was, but you know what she’s like.”
“Yes I do, and now you’ve got me horny as hell, but I’ve got to get this damn thing finished.”
“You ‘ard, Billy? I’m, stroking me dick right now thinking of you sucking it. Get y’ers out, we can stroke cocks together.”
“I can’t, you fucker, Chris is in the next cubicle.”
“Too bad. Nancy’s back and watchin’ me now. Her pussy’s swollen, and she’s friggin’ her slit, dirty bitch. Says get over here so we can all fuck.”
“Shit! Screw this report, don’t come before I get there.”


43) Space Dolphin

“Tell me what you see,” Alice asks.

“Clouds over Patagonia,” Tom says.

Alice pictures in her mind how Tom floats around in the Cupola of the ISS. Through her headset she can hear him breathing into his mic. An illusion of him being really close.

“I’m in our bedroom,” she tells him. “I’ve just taken a shower and spread body lotion on my skin.”

“You love touching yourself like that,” he says. “I’ve watched you many times.”

“You Peeping Tom. So, you can imagine I’m all creamy and velvety now.”

“Better not start. . .” he whispers.

“But you want me to,” she says.

“Maybe.”

“Inside those khaki cargo pants of yours there’s something defying gravity more than any astronaut can.”

“Alice, please…”

“As you free fall over the Atlantic the gentle vibrations of my Lovely Dolphin stir up my desire for you.”

“I’ll put you on the space station’s speaker if you don’t stop.”

“I’ll fill your tin can with my frenzy. More delirious than your levity.”

“I miss you, love.”

“I miss you too, Major,” Alice sighs. “And all of your most peculiar ways.”

“Get that Dolphin whirling,” Tom says. “I can’t wait to float on your frenzy.”


44) Bad Liar

I answer my phone without thinking. “Hello?”

“Hello, kitten. Have you been missing me?”

Fuck! I press a finger to my lips, cautioning Kate to silence. “Yes, Sir. Desperately.”

“What are you wearing?”

Nothing, but I can’t say so. “Sweats and a t-shirt. I’m… baking.”

Kate raises a disapproving eyebrow.

“And underneath?”

So, we’re doing that. “Red silk panties. And matching stockings. Your favourites.”

“You wore lingerie to bake?”

Kate grins, pinching a nipple between her teeth.

“It reminds me of you, Sir.”

“How gratifying. No bra?”

“No, Sir.”

“Are you alone?”

“Of course, Sir.”

“Good. Take off the tee and stand in front of the window for me.”

I rustle the duvet, imitating undressing. Kate bites, hard.

“Meep!”

“Was that a squeal, kitten? Are you all right?”

“I stood too close to the window, Sir. The cold glass shocked my nipples. They were already aching because they’ve missed you the most.”

“Really? I— Damn, that’s my taxi. One last thing. After I hang up, fetch a wooden spoon, pull down your sweats and bend over.”

“Yes, Sir?”

“Then tell Kate I suggested six on each cheek, to start. Do have a wonderful evening, kitten. I’ll see you next week.”


45) An Italian Job

Marcello pauses and grins. “Why you look so nervous?”
“I’ve never done this before.”
“Piece of cake! I will help you. First, we load it up.”

“That looks very full. I’m not sure I can stuff any more in.”
“Push it harder with the pole. It will fit.”
“Okay, what next?”
“Choose which nozzle and screw it on.”
“Easy! The biggest one!”
“Now, feel this. See how soft? After it has soak for awhile, yes?”
“That’s really slippery.”
“Natural is best. You can make them fatter. Now, find the end and slide it on.”
“Like this?”
“No, more! All of it! Here. Pinch between your fingers and stroke fast, like this.”
“Okay, let me do it.”
“Hold tightly at the tip and start pumping slowly.”
“It’s coming out!”
“Good. Guide it with your hand.”
“Wow, the skin is stretched tight. Will it burst?”
“No, it will not burst.”
“It’s getting very long.”
“Keep going until the barrel is empty.”
“Now what?”
“You twist, and loop, and twist again.”
“Not so fast! I can’t keep up.”
Your fingers slip over the slick, wet cylinders of plump, meaty sausages. Marcello slips behind you and rubs up against your butt. Cooking lesson’s over.


46) Riding Lessons

Kate was at Tinder’s stall when Tess arrived. “Kate,” she said, “I didn’t expect you to see you here. Isn’t your riding lesson Thursday?”

Kate stroked the horse’s nose. “Yes,” she said, “but…I couldn’t stay away that long.”

“That so,” Tess grinned. “Horses’ll do that to you. Get in your system. Pretty soon that’s all you’re thinking about. Take it from me- I’ve been there.”

“I think I’m already there,” Kate said, sliding a glance at Tess. “It’s all I’ve been thinking about since I first came here. Since that first day, when I met you, Tess.”

Tess turned, met Kate’s clear grey eyes. Held them. “And…what is it you’ve been thinking about?”

“You told me to tell you when I was ready to learn,” Kate said, gaze on Tess’s lips.

Tess’s breath hitched. “And are you? Ready?”

“Yes,” Kate whispered. “You said you’d show me. That you could teach me what I want to learn. I want that, Tess. I want to learn from you.”

“Jesus,” Tess said, “tell me this isn’t about horseback riding.”

Kate’s lips quirked. “Only in that horses are what brought us together. Now will you teach me to ride?”

“With pleasure.”


47) Try Again

“Oh baby, it’s the way you move it. ”

She broke into giggles.
“Oi!”
“Sorry! I’m sorry.”
“This was your idea.”
“I know, I know. Try again. Please?”

A moment passed in silence punctuated by heavy breathing.
“You’re so tight.”
“Yeah?”
“And wet.”
“And?”
“Warm?”
The giggles bubbled up again.

“Right. That’s it.”
“I’m sorry, I can’t help it.”
“I thought you wanted dirty talk?”
“Me too! I do! I don’t know why I can’t stop laughing.”
“Because I’m bad at it?”
“Um. I wouldn’t say bad, exactly. Just…um…”
“Thanks.”

“No, no! Darling, it’s just -” She kissed him gently, a silent plea. “Can you say something mean?”
He frowned, “Something mean?”
“Tell me I’m your dirty slut and that you want to use me like the filthy toy I am? Maybe?”

This time he chuckled.
“Darling, why didn’t you just say that?”
“I dunno.”
He touched her red cheek, “Well, I’m glad you said it now.”

She kissed him again, wrapping him in a painfully tight embrace.
“Ow!”
“Thank you.”
“What for?”
“For not thinking it’s weird.”
“My beautiful little slut. I think we’ve got a lot to talk about.”


48) Long Distance Lovers

“I miss you.”

“I miss you more.”

“Are you horny?”

“So horny.”

“Are you wet?”

“Have you done anything to get me wet yet?”

“Touché. Are you naked?”

“I left my panties on,” she pauses. “Because I know you like that.”

He growls. “Describe them.”

“Use your imagination.”

“I don’t want to, dammit,” he says, but she can hear the smile in his voice. “Are your nipples hard?”

“Is your dick hard?”

“God, yes. Put the phone down so you can have both hands free. I want you to cup your tits. Give’em each a nice squeeze for me. Then run one hand slowly down your beautiful body and slip your fingers into those … black panties?”

“Yes …”

“Yes, what?”

“Yes, they’re black.”

“Yes, what?”

“Yes … sir.”

“Are you touching yourself?”

“Yes, sir.”

“What are you going to do for me, baby?”

“I’m going to masturbate for you.”

“You don’t have to.”

“I want to.”

“But wouldn’t you rather fuck?”

“Fuck who? I don’t want to hurt your ego, but your cock isn’t long enough to fuck me from California.”

“I’m not in California.”

“Where are you?” she asks, as the doorbell rings.


49) Our Boy

“When I fuck him”, she asks, “how should I do it?”

“I don’t think it matters.” The words spill out before I think them over. “Sometimes I think I could do anything to him and he’d thank me for it. Would beg me to accept his thanks.”

The man sitting between us lets out the start of a moan, swallowing the rest as I squeeze his thigh.

“I don’t have to worry about not ruining him for you, then?”

“I’m not sure it’s possible to ruin him any more than he’s already been.”

Oh.” She’s breathless, the words gasped. “Can I tell you how I’d like to fuck him then?”

“Please.”

“I want to tease him first. Have him down on his hands and knees in front of me, knowing he’s not allowed to look up to see my face. And just sit there until he starts to whine, desperate for attention.”

“He whines so beautifully”, my cock twitches as I speak. “Sometimes when I leave him like that for a while, aching to be touched, he leaks a little, despite himself.”

She glances at him, glint in her eyes.

“Then I’d make him clean it up. With his tongue.”


50) Pillow Talk

“You ever wonder why we’re here?” I asked. My hands were laying on her chest, rising up and down with her breathing, deep as it was.
“What kind of question is that, right after sex? I still have your cum running down my legs!” she retorted. She had that unbelievable look on her face, the one that says, ‘why are we talking about this!?’
“It’s an important question! Think about it, why would we be here, at all? Why would we be here, in this bed together, doing things that we shouldn’t be?”
“That’s your family speaking that nonsense.”
“My point stands. You ever wonder why we’re here?”
“Here, in this bed after an amazing round of sex that I’m probably going to climb on top of you for a repeat, or just here on this earth? Those’re two different answers.”
“Uh, how about both?” I stammered.
“Second one, because we have the chance for something amazing. We’ve been given the chance to do something with ourselves, to create a better world for everyone, and everything.”
“And the first?”
“Because I love you, duh. Now come on, scooch over, I want to ride you this time.”


51) Last-Minute Revision

“Spread your legs wider.”
“Like this?”
My director tilts the camera.
“That’s it. Now show us how you like to touch yourself when no one’s watching.”
Hard to do with him peering through a lens. He tilts his head.
“You’re a little stiff.”
“Tell me how you want it.”
“Run your finger around your clit. Pretend it’s my tongue. I’m licking you real sweet. Can you feel me?”
“Your mouth is so hot,” I purr.
“Now finger your hole until you’re wet. Slide a finger inside. Show me where you want me to taste you.”
He presses something into my hand. His breath on my ear: “Can you take all that in, honey?”
The dildo is massive. “Watch me.”
“How does that feel, little girl?
“You’re so hard, big daddy.”
“Push it in balls deep.”
“I love the way you fill me up.”
“Show us how it makes you cum, darlin’.”
Instead I pull it out and roll over.
“What are you doing?”
“Only you can make me cum.”
“But the script—”
“Maybe before you fuck me, you should spank me for being naughty.”


52) Behind Closed Doors

He leans against the wall, right arm above my shoulder.

“I guess you’re fighting to keep the cliché alive,” he says.

“What are you talking about?”

“The janitor’s closet? Really? Couldn’t think of somewhere more conspicuous?”

“Unlike you, I am meant to be here. No one’s going to think twice if I come out with my hair in a state.”

“You’re welcome to come up to my office.”

I laugh. “With all those windows? You want the entire street to witness our performance?”

“Perhaps… Call it a kink.”

“Sorry, but I need to know you’re worth it first.”

“You’ll find out soon enough,” his free hand cups my chin. “Are you sure you want to do this?”

My fingers trace his cheek. “With this jaw and that cologne, I can’t resist you for much longer.”

“Is that so?” He unzips my jeans. “I thought you didn’t go for ‘trumped-up douches in a suit and tie.'”

“And I thought you said janitors were ‘beneath you.'”

He grins, teeth against my neck, his body pressing me into the cool brick.

“Well, you will be shortly.”


53) Good Service

“I’ve been looking forward to this all day,” Chase said, entering my office and closing the door. I looked up from my computer, smiling at him over the screen.

“Make sure you lock it. I’d hate to have anyone walk in on us.”

“So would I, although that does make it more exciting. The janitor won’t be by for a while, though, will he?”

“His shift isn’t for another hour, and he usually starts upstairs. We have plenty of time.”

“Perfect. I’m glad you’re wearing a skirt. Any panties?”

“I already took them off.”

“Is that what you call good customer service?”

I nodded.

He knelt before me. “Spread your legs for me. Let me see you. Wider.”

“Chase…please. Please. I want to feel your tongue on my clit, and your fingers inside me, fucking me. Now.”

“Like this?”

“Oh God, that feels good. Your tongue is divine.” I sank lower in the chair. “Faster. Lick me faster…. oh…your fingers…I can’t…”

“Come for me.”

“I want to come for you…over and over…oh God, yes!”

When my breathing steadied, Chase sat, slowly slipping his slick fingers from inside me.

“Mmmm,” I sighed. “Now that is what I call good customer service.”


54) Customer Service

He’s nervous.
“Don’t be afraid now honey. What would you like us to do?” I ask kindly.
He gulps. “I’d like to, um, I’d like you to ah, suck my, uhm-.”
“You’d like a blow job?”
“Uhuh.”
“And you may have one, my friend, for the princely sum of-” I name my price. He has cash.
“Would you like to help me take off my shirt?”
“Oh yes please”. His fingers trembling. “Oh…..wow…
“Do you like what you see?”
“Very much. Can I…..touch?”
“You may. That’s it, right there. Lovely. What nice hands you have. Look how well they fit me. Warm and strong. Mmm, perfect“.
“You have such soft skin”
“You are a nice lad. Tell me if I’m going too fast for you. If you want me to stop” I remind him, trailing my fingers down to his lap.
“No, that’s good, don’t stop, please”
“Oh, you like that?”
“Yes. That feels great”
I slide his zipper open, reach inside. “Still with me so far?”
He nods vigorously, clasping the arms of his wheelchair as I free his swelling dick.
“How do you like it?”
“Slowly. Oh yes. Like that. Just like that. Ahhhhh”


55) Fantasy Becomes Reality

“We sat across from each other in the café, warm roasted coffee aromas permeated the air. He was late but that was normal for him, he was always late. It’s a trait I both love and hate. He had on a pair of well-fitting slacks, button up shirt that was open at the top and some loafers with no socks. My insides turn to jelly now thinking about how delicious he looked that day,” My friend Katie’s attention is all on me waiting for the next part.

“Go on,” Katie encourages.

“His hands are rough from the labors of his job and his face needed a shave but even now I shiver thinking about those rough hands on my soft skin and his face between my legs. In fact,” I lean closer and whisper, “I still have the red marks from his beard on my thighs.”

“I want that so bad,” Katie’s eyes look dreamily into mine. “Please go on.”

“In fact, some of our fantasies revolve around a particular girl.” Her interest is peaked I can tell. “We want to know if you would be interested in being with us-permanently.”

“Yes!” Katie answers then leans into my lips, “Yes.”


56) The Arrangement

“You’re both playing, right?” Kali asks from the other side of the laptop screen.

“Yes, we’re both playing,” I answer. “I’m actually the one who chose you.”

“Mmm, that’s even better,” Kali beams. “Tell me, what’s the first scenario that comes to mind when you imagine the three of us together?”

“Well –,” I begin, then pause when she discards her bathrobe.

“Go on,” she urges.

“Well, my husband would love us to suck him off at the same time. You know? Really work it out of him.”

“Sure! That’s fun.” She smiles. “But you said that it was you who chose me. What do you want?”

“I want…” I begin, then stumble again. “Kali…it’s hard to think when you’re sitting there rubbing lotion into your tits!”

She stops. Smirks. Dares me.

“Fine. Fuck,” I finally offer. “What I imagine is grinding my pussy against your face after my ass has been flogged to red. Then, us kneeling before my husband and making him shower us both with every last drop of his jizz so we can lick it off each other.”

“There it is, Mrs. M!” Kali retorts heartily. “Yes, the fee for that can definitely be arranged.”


57) Massage Therapy

“I have been looking forward escaping work all day. I love feeling your soft hands on my body Mary.” Lydia moaned

“Yes ma’am, I am pleased you enjoy your after work sessions.”

“I can’t wait to feel your talented fingers on me.”

“Thank you ma’am,” Mary replied, her face flushed “would it please you to have the full treatment again?”

“Oh yes I would enjoy that so much.” Lydia eagerly rolled over

“If it pleases you ma’am I will start at your breast again and work my way down.”

“Yes that would please me greatly Mary. You know how to really make me feel relaxed and special.”

Mary’s hands worked their magic. Lydia melted under her touch.

“Mary,” Lydia whimpered “Oh Mary that’s it, oh don’t stop, please don’t stop”

Deft fingers worked over needy flesh as Lydia arched her back.

“Would it please you if I kissed you ma’am?”

“Yes Mary, please do.”

Mary started kissing the wetness that craved attention

“Oh yes, that’s it. Oh faster please! Yes. YES! Oh my god YES!” Lydia’s voice crescendoed.

“You are amazing as always Mary” Lydia said breathlessly

“Thank you ma’am, I am please you enjoy my relaxation therapy so much.”


58) Office fling

“Do you like that?” I whispered.

“Mmm,” my secretary purred. “I love it. It’s so big and hard. Oh, please – push it in deeper. And – what if I do – this?”

“Ah, shit! How do you make your cunt do that? That’s so good. You’re gonna make me come …”

“No! Not yet. I want more! Keep going.”

“Ng!” I grunted. “Play with your clit while I fuck you!”

“Aaah!” she cried. “Yes! I’m coming!”

“Yes!” I yelled, thrusting. “Yes! Yes! You want more?”

“Mm … wait. I just …”

“No! Can’t stop now. I’m gonna fuck you senseless. Ah. Feel my cock. Like that – and that …”

“Oooh …”

My desk creaked underneath our writhing, sweaty bodies.

“Ohmigod!” she gasped. “I’m gonna come again! Aaah!”

“I love how wet you are. So. Fucking. Wet.”

“Oh! Come with me now. Please …”

“Ng! No!”

“Aaah!”

She whimpered helplessly as she came again – my cock still hammering into her slippery slit.

“I’m not done with you yet,” I whispered. “Not at all. I will keep fucking you. And I will watch you come. Again. And again.”

She closed her eyes.

Surrendered.


59) Condoms Are Sexy!

“Would you like me to roll it on with my mouth? My soft lips sliding all the way down your hard…”

I shook my head and took the condom from Claire’s hand.

“No – though hold on to that thought. Right now I have something else in mind.”

I rolled the condom down far enough to cover the head of my cock. Claire grinned.

“Ah-ah, not so fast. I know what you want. Now show me how much you want it.”

“You felt how wet I am! Isn’t that enough?”

“To get this dick? Well I’m not fucking you without a condom, so I guess it depends whether you’re happy with just the tip.”

Positioning Claire over my cock, I eased her onto the latex-covered head and pushed it into her greedy cunt.

“Fuck, that’s not fair.”

“I’m aware of that.”

“So you want me to…”

“Touch yourself? Yes. Till you come all over my cock?”

“Pretty sure I know the answer to that one.”

Claire steadied herself.

“And when I come, you’ll give me all of it?”

“When you come, I’ll make sure every inch of my cock is covered – by the condom and by you.”

“Best get started then…”


60) Beginner’s Lick

“Wait- wait, s-STOP!”

She practically yanked me away by my hair.

“Mmwhat? Am I doing it wrong?”

“…No. GOD no. Holy fuck, it’s perfect. More than. I can’t – couldn’t stop coming!”

“Is that a bad thing?”

“Y-no. I don’t know. It was so… just… out of control. No one’s ever done that to me.”

“Wow. Well. I’ve never done it at all.”

“What?! You’ve never-?”

“Nope.”

“How did you know… what to do?”

How do you say you’ve discovered eating pussy – her pussy – is the best thing in the world, and therefore what to do is obvious?

“…Sheer enthusiasm?”

“Ha!”

“Raw talent?”

“Uh, no argument there.”

“Beginner’s luck?

“Fuck I hope not.”

“Why not?”

“Because if that was a one-off I’m going to be frustrated for the rest of my life.”

“We can test to verify…”

My head moved back downward.

“Oh, fuck yesss. No, wait.”

“What?”

“What about you?”

“Me?”

“You need attention.”

“Um. I guess can’t say that I don- Woah!”

She twisted, rolling us until I was on my back.

“Yeah, I have enthusiasm, too, you know.”

“Do you-?”

“You’ll tell me if I have raw talent. Or luck.”

Her head lowered.

“Holy fuck.”


61) Fulfilling Her Fantasy

“Tell me your fantasy again,” Bruce whispered, tightening the blindfold over his wife’s eyes.

Kneeling, Lilith obeyed.

“A group of men break in and hold you down while they take me one by one. They make you watch as they release their loads deep inside me. Then, you eat every drop of their come as it leaks out of my cunt.”

“Why does that turn you on.”

“You always humiliate me. I want you to experience it for once.”

“But you like it when I humiliate you.”

“Yes, but the look in your eyes last time, when that whore was sucking your dick and I could only watch, the look as you mounted her and fucked her, the look as you came all over her perfect ass, I want to wear that look.”

“And it has nothing to do with your desire to get gang banged?”

“Well, two birds, one stone.”

“Mmmm excellent.”

A door opened. A rush of muffled footsteps.

“I hope you enjoy this.”

“Enjoy what?”

“Your fantasy.”

A scuffle and a soft thud.

The blindfold fell from her eyes and she was surrounded by hard cocks; Bruce, pinned against the far wall, eyes wide with excitement.


62) Coffee Talk

“Last night blew my mind!”

“Why, what happened?” Bill asked, sipping a low-fat, decaf, soy latte.

“Jon and I had sex!”

“You finally hooked up! Tell me!”

Ally settled into the story. “We were at the cabin, drinking wine in front of the fire. Everything was normal, until it wasn’t! I almost died when he told me he’d like to kiss me.”

“No! Then what?”

“His lips were so soft and I totally pressed myself against his hard body. Eventually, he leaned in and whispered he wanted to touch me. I put his hand between my legs. I needed him to know how badly I wanted it!”

“No doubt.”

“When I spread my legs and he pushed his finger inside me? I came instantly, totally drenching his fingers. I even sucked my own juices off them. I was so turned on! We fucked on fluffy blankets in front of the fire. His cock rammed me so deep, I’ve never come so hard in my life. It was amazing!”

“I’m so jealous!” Bill was sad to have missed the fun.

Jon, secretly sitting at the table behind them, turned and said, “Maybe you’d like to join us next time, Bill?”


63) Stronger Measures

“Ah, I’m so glad you could make it – and right on time too. Cara isn’t very patient, but I suppose that’s understandable.”

“Yes, that position she’s in looks like it takes some effort to sustain.”

We shake hands and I sit.

“I like to reinforce the message that submission isn’t easy. I could have her knickers all the way off, but having to keep them there, at knee level, means she has to spread her legs quite wide. And that posture – bent with her palms to the wall and bottom out is another little trial for her.”

“Focuses the mind on what’s to come, I guess.”

“Yes. Our friend the cane. Are you ready for your tutorial?”

“As I’ll ever be. Though it’s a shame to spoil that lovely view in a way.”

“It’ll be even better after a few strokes, I promise you. I’ll have her keep those legs spread for you.”

“How many is she getting?”

“I used to stick at six but it’s become increasingly clear that Cara benefits from stronger measures. So a solid twelve today. We’ll plug her first, if you want to give me…”

I hand it over.

“Into position now, Cara.”


22 comments

  1. Loved reading all the submissions, as always and some very creative pieces here. My particular favourite was No. 14 for its tight, natural language and original scenario. loved it. The twist at the end of No.10 also got a vote from me.

    The pieces that I particularly liked were the ones that had a bit of originality in the premise and didn’t just rely just on sexual language or a predictable scenario to make it erotic. I feel some writers still think that purely having sexual language = erotic.

    But there were also some that, for me, were ordinary (even cliche) in concept, or in language used. I was also particularly distracted and dismayed by the overuse of exclamation marks. Good, strong writing doesn’t require them as your words should convey the tone. Also, in a challenge with a strict word count i felt some writers wasted those words on speech tags.

    Submissions 16 & 19 I just found confusing. No 13 confused me as well as she’s talking about a password (presumably to gain entrance to the club), yet there a demon on the sofa so she’s obviously already inside. I also didn’t understand the reason for the presence of the small demon. I love the premise though. No.57 had an unrealistic use of the name in the dialogue which was distracting.

    A touch assignment, but it made for interesting reading.

  2. There were so many great entries this time! I’m impressed since I thought it was a tough challenge. I really liked #11 – Relief Lines because it created a scene with a kink I don’t have and yet I totally understood why it worked for those two characters. Really lovely work.

  3. NORTHERN SOULS: I really like the characters here. The story is sad, and has a dingy, tired feeling to it. It’s well done. I would not call it sexy.

    WANTS AND NEEDS: This is a very emotional scene, but I don’t know enough about the characters to feel an emotional response. The narrator is feeling something very strongly, but not enough has been done to put me in their head, and I don’t feel those emotions with them. I think this would work really well with greater context. As a standalone piece, it falls flat.

    CALL ME: The italics in this make this feel menacing! I don’t know if that’s a good thing or a bad thing. It is definitely a thing!

    BEGINNER’S LICK: These characters are delightful! They are so clearly having fun and enjoying each other’s company. It’s a joy to read.

    FETCH THE ROPE: This entire scene could teach a class on how to make consent sexy. Love it so hard.

    BEHIND CLOSED DOORS: There is so much characterization happening in such a short piece, and I still can’t tell the gender of the narrator. There’s more going on there, and I would enjoy reading it.

    ACTIVE OBSERVERS: Another piece with excellent characterization and a great ending. A delight to read!

  4. #4, Private Role Playing Session
    – I like this particularly because it is fantasy upon fantasy layered on top of an actual role-playing game in a fantasy world.

    #22 Gazpacho: After Hours
    – I love the image of the female character in this one. Done without description, I thought I knew her from her dialogue alone, and that has me wanting more.

    #17 Morning Interlude
    – The humor got me here. I could hear the giggles of the two as they spoke without any description of it.

    #29 Captivating Call
    – The tense is brave here and has me looking for more.

    #14 Active Observers
    – I liked the feel of this, but with exclamation points and no signs the conversation was being whispered, it felt as though they were too loud not to be heard by someone else…perhaps even the couple at the table they were discussing. Two ways to fix this would be with more hushed words or, were the project longer, that someone overhears them and joins in on helping with a further plot twist somewhere.

  5. 15 Girl Talk, I want to read much much more of this conversation.
    18 Being Nice, boy can I feel the sexual fusion between these two amazing folk.
    24 Put on Display, I was not expecting that , genius idea and very much loved the scene created.

  6. While not the fault of anyone in particular, the deck was stacked heavily towards “describe your fantasy” (which is a natural staple of dirty talk). The ones that DIDN’T go that route stood out all the more because they avoided it. Also, I think it’s true and unfortunate that the earlier entries hold more punch than the later entries simply by virtue that I’m *bored* of reading many variations on the same thing by the time I’m 30 stories in. I know the order is randomized, but it can mean that a good story isn’t enjoyed as much as it might otherwise be, if it’d been the first instead of the twenty-first.

    Individual stories:

    #1 – Started out a bit stereotypical, but I liked where it went. I might have a soft spot for corruption.

    #3 – Had high hopes for this one; I like seeing geek and sex combined. It just fell a little flat, although I suspect that might be the price of fitting it within the wordcount. I would have preferred that it stay focused on the characters they’re playing rather than shift to real life.

    #6 – I liked the amount of backstory that’s managed to fit in such a small space, and the personalities that come through. It’s not really erotica at this point, but you can feel the history and the potential tension. I’d expect it to be in a novel rather than a ‘get you off’ story.

    #33 – Half of the conversation was ‘Yes, Ma’am’. I’m sure it was trying to be thematic, bu it just came across as redundant.

    #39 – Unique take on things. I wish it were a bit more clear whether Matt could overhear both sides of the conversation or just hers.

    #52 I really like her confidence in the face of a businessman. Usually the powerplay dynamics almost always make a much lower-status woman a more submissive personality. Kudos.

    #59 – This really was a ‘condoms are sexy’ scene, which was nice to see. +1 for both being realistic and crafting it well.

  7. 1. The scene here is an absolute turn on for me, mixing religion with sex always works. I like the promise of more to come in this story. The dialogue really works to push the story forward.

    3. Being made to tell your fantasies out loud is extremely hot. This story really worked for me because it seemed very real.

    11. This story was also very realistic. Sometimes you really just need to cry and let it out. What better way is there!

    18. I really liked this one. You could feel the newness of their relationship, how much they like each other. The idea of finding hairs left behind on a pillow is sweet and you made it sexy too. The only thing that didn’t work for me was the drawn out “I dooooo” and “I do toooo.”

    24. Being put on display is a super hot fantasy and I really liked how the dialogue illustrated that. I didn’t really like the word spectacularly at the end. Maybe a different way to describe her orgasm would have worked better.

    37. This is a perfect example of how negotiation and consent can be sexy.

    45. I knew right away that this story was about stuffing sausage, but maybe that’s because I’ve done it before. I thought it was a great pun!

    56. I love a threesome, and I love negotiation. This was a great way to use dialogue in a sexy way to illustrate a negotiation scene.

    59. I have never liked condoms, but you found a way to make them very sexy.

  8. Alright, I’m no judge but I have enough time this week to comment, yay! There are sixty two good stories here, (that other one is mine!) and sixty three entries (because I like numbers.) so with that all said, let’s begin!

    1. Interesting. I like it, although I feel it’s more a part of a story than a story by itself. That said, I think you did well. Good job!

    2. It’s good. Ends somewhat abruptly, like it was just about to move forward, but on the other hand it does what it needed to do. I like it!

    3. It’s good, definitely erotic. Misses a part of the ‘story’ element to it, but with only limited word count it’s difficult to do it well. That said, I liked it!

    4. I laughed. So hard. The worst part is, I can imagine this taking place with my group, because of bad rolls. That said, I can fully agree that this would make the DM rethink the campaign. Definitely liked it!

    5. Original. Definitely original, and it’s good original. Some lines don’t quite make sense, but when it’s doing it’s own thing, it doesn’t really matter much. I liked it!

    6. I get the feeling there’s a story to this that I’m missing out on. It’s good, don’t get me wrong, but just feels like there’s a piece missing, rather than just hints to the pieces. Still good!

    7. Hot! Course, now he has to live up to the promise! I like it, good job.

    8. It’s good. A little quick, but limited word count, I get the feeling these two have done this a bit more often than it seems. Good job!

    9. Dammit, of course it stopped on a cliffhanger! Good job, I especially liked the teasing tones they took with each other, really helped fill out the parts of the story we can’t see. I like it!

    10. Interesting. Almost has a stalker-esque vibe to it. That said, the first sentence almost physically hurt me, and I suspect it hurt most people. But the story is good, well-rounded and complete. Good job!

    11. This…actually hits quite close to home, and not in the best of ways. The story is good, and it’s hot which is really good! Feels a bit too quick to me though, but all the same, it’s good!

    12. This one and the one before it share similar properties with each other. The story is good, definitely, but it seems the erotic element is more in the thought of what’s about to happen rather than the actual explicit. I actually like that more to be honest! Good job!

    13. Original. I like the supernatural element, although I almost feel like this could be a monologue with the demon instead of a dialogue, but I think that’s just the limited word count talking. Overall, good job!

    14. I like this one a lot! It also makes me wonder what the actual outcome of their bet is, which means it’s well-written and easy to extrapolate from. Good job!

    15. It’s good! Kind of went by quick, as if there were more parts to it, one part of a lot more. That said, it moved the story along and was well-written. I like it!

    16. Kind of a left-turn there at the end, but reading through made me realize what the hints were. I like it! The pure smut/erotic elements seem focused on the front, but by the end it was definitely more an emotional erotica than a physical one. It’s good!

    17. The puns. The puns! I like it, especially the way the two characters teased each other in the same fashion with them. It’s good!

    18. This feels like it’s a part of something bigger. It’s definitely good though, and I definitely like it!

    19. I get the feeling we’re missing something here. It’s good though, definitely hot, but I feel there’s more to this story for it to be explained. That all said, I like it.

    20. Ends on a surprisingly high and funny note when you consider the subject matter. Fun though, and definitely an original take on the phone call piece. Good job!

    21. The puns. They hurt. Definitely good, and I get the feeling the guy in this knew exactly what she was saying. I just get that feeling.

    22. Interesting take on foodplay. I had to re-read this one a few times to understand it, but once I did I ended up really liking it. Good job!

    23. It took me a while to understand exactly what was going on, but once I did I liked this one. Definitely good, definitely hot. Well done!

    24. Endings kind of abrupt, though that said I like the story. Feels complete on its own, like it doesn’t need more before or after to understand these two. Good job!

    25. I was expecting a pun on Romeo and Juliet based on the names, but that said I think it stands well on its own. Good job!

    26. Interesting take on the phone call type. I like it. Took me a minute or two to get the complete gist, but once I did I ended up liking this one a lot. Good job.

    27. I like it! It’s a story all its own that can still use extrapolation and more added to it if necessary. It’s good!

    28. It’s good! Hot, well-written, quick, and standalone. Pretty good, I’d say!

    29. I don’t think most offices would be allowed to get away with this, but I wish more did because that was really hot. Good job!

    30. Once I understood that these two were aliens, things made a lot more sense to me. Of course, that leads me to ask how can they see what’s going on in some person’s house…if they’re even doing it inside the house? Good job!

    31. I wonder if they do this for every list, like what if it’s the groceries or something? I get the feeling she’d miss an item or two on purpose…good job!

    32. This one’s good, but the story feels too abrupt. Not like there’s something missing, but rather it’s just going too fast. It’s good, and it’s hot, definitely, but something about it doesn’t work for me. That said, it’s good, and well-written.

    33. These two must have an interesting relationship. The story is well-written, although it doesn’t seem that much can be truly extrapolated from it, and it’s definitely hot! Good job!

    34. Interesting. It’s good, but this one seems to be lacking something, either before or after the story. It’s hard with a limited word count though, so understandable. Still good, and makes me want to know what happens next.

    35. I think you’re missing a bunch of punctuation, and normally I’m bigger on the story than on small grammar needs but…when using dialogue, it’s most common to use “I’m saying something,” followed by who said it. A comma, then dialogue marking. Or if it’s at the end, a period. Just re-read your story, it’s fairly good to be fair, but the lack of punctuation unfortunately makes this difficult for me to read.

    36. It’s good, but I’m going to be a bit of an asshole here, and say re-read your tenses. Something about it just seems off. That said, story-wise, you’re good. I’m excited to read more if there was more, and it’s fairly standalone and still quite hot. Good job!

    37. I suppose they call this ‘topping from the bottom’, heh. Story is solid, good and still hot. Good job.

    38. I really like the mental image this projects. I like all that all the erotic elements are mostly alluded to, rather than made explicit. It gives more detail for the reader to figure out, which I’ve always been fond of. Good job!

    39. As someone who has worked in IT, all of those phrases sound far too familiar for me to be comfortable with. I like it!

    40. I like this story. Quick, the characters work together well, and standalone with a possibility for expansion that I’d certainly be looking forward to. Good job!

    41. I’m a programmer. It’s an interesting take on the story, and it’s good, and I definitely like it, but I feel like you missed a vital part of the programming experience…mostly the part where it’s ‘take 184’, or some absurdly high value. That said, I actually really do like this story, it’s good!

    42. I wish more offices allowed sudden time off like that. I think the world would be more understanding. Story is good, nice and hot, although it makes me wonder what accent the guy on the couch has. It’s good!

    43. An interesting take on the dialogue story. Definitely not what I was expecting, but I’d say you exceeded it by quite a bit. Good job!

    44. Nice left-turn cliffhanger there at the end. I almost expected him to give her some baking advice while talking to Kate. Good job! A very well-written story.

    45. As soon as I started reading I had a thought that there was going to be one that was more fake-out than truly erotic. Good job, and you had me fooled until the final few lines. Well done!

    46. Interesting. Definitely seems more emotional erotic than physical, but I think in this case it’s warranted. Does seem to end fairly abruptly, like there could have been much more written before or after. That said, I like it. Good job.

    47. I think the only thing this story is missing is a mention that it’s one of their first or second times. That said, the story is good, and it has a sense of erotic to it that’s less in the description and more in the general idea. Good job!

    48. I like this story. Ends on a positive note, on a cliffhanger note while managing to stay standalone. Good job!

    49. Interesting story. I like it, especially the threesome-esque aspect to it. Good job.

    50. Aw, some of the formatting went awry. Oh well. So much I could say, I’m going to write until the next line and move on. Let’s see how long it takes for me to recognize my own story.

    51. I like it! Definitely original, I like the idea that these two are or were making porn before they got a…setback, so to speak. Good job!

    52. Good job! I like the erotic elements are mostly alluded to, with easy expansion possible before it got to this point. Well done.

    53. This one made me adjust myself a bit! Good job! Well-written and standalone, it’s good!

    54. Huh. Not quite what I was expecting, but still good. Feels like there’s a piece that should come after it, but yet stands alone well. Good job!

    55. That’s one way to ask a girl to be a permanent threesome member. Kind of abrupt, and I feel like there’s a lot missing here that we weren’t privy too, but the story still works on its own just fine. Good job!

    56. It’s good! I like it. The story is solid, well-written, plenty hot…well done!

    57. It might have just been formatting, but there were a few missing punctuation marks that made just back up a moment and go ‘wait, what?’ The story is good, and I got sucked in even though the limited word count. Good job.

    58. It’s good, and definitely fits the erotic element. I’m not sold on the moans as dialogue, rather than just pure vocalizations, but on the other hand the story was good enough it didn’t matter. Good job!

    59. Have safe sex everyone. A surprisingly important point that isn’t covered by erotica often. And yet you did it pretty well, and blended it in to the story nicely. Good job.

    60. I like the pun in the title. Definitely fit the story well, and the story itself was really good. Works well standalone, easy to expand if necessary. Good job!

    61. Well, that escalated quickly. The story is good, definitely hot, but I feel that we only got the middle patch of the story, and it leaves me wanting for more. Good job on that!

    62. That’s one way to ask a someone to be in a threesome. Kind of abrupt, and I feel like there’s a lot missing here that we weren’t privy too, but the story still works on its own just fine. Good job!

    63. A teaching class for how to spank and general submission measures. That…actually sounds like a reasonable idea. Good job! Story is solid, nice and hot, well-written. Well done!

  9. I think this was a hugely challenging task this early in the competition. I know that there was a dialogue round last year but I am fairly certain in was later in the contest and therefore had a higher word count. I think trying to write a dialogue heavy story with such a small word count was super tough and sadly as a result many of the stories felt like they needed more to give them context and bring the exchanges between the characters alive.

    The key in this round was using the dialogue, so the conversation between the characters, to tell us a story.

    Some things that I would caution against. Writing lots of fuck yeahs, ohhhs, arghhssss, ahhhhsss etc is mostly a no, no. You are not writing a porn script and it just doesn’t make for easy or engaging reading.

    Yet again be careful about going for the obvious. There were a LOT of phone calls here and even though that might have felt like a great way to do this it actually hugely limited what you could do and often made for very stilted conversations that didn’t flow very well. Always question if your 1st idea might actually be the first idea nearly everyone has.

    Everyone seemed to avoid the obvious trap of he said, she said, to denote who was speaking but actually there were a fair few stories that went in the totally opposite direction and didn’t include any explanations at all. As a result they were almost impossible to follow.

    I have written feedback for the ones that I voted for but as always if you would like to discuss your piece with me please feel free to get in touch.

    14) Active Observers – waitresses

    Brilliant. We know they are the waitresses and that they are lovers and there is even a side story of the other couple woven into it as well. The dialogue flows and the descriptions are clear and easy to visualize. There is one small mistake, is should be does not do at the end of this sentence “Ten bucks and all my side duties says she comes before their steaks do.” but even with that this story stands out as skillful writing.

    19) Last Request

    You caught me a little unawares as I thought it was going to be a cuckqueaning kind of story but in fact it turned out to be a lot darker than that and it made me catch my breath with the brutality of it. The taboo element of it and the emotional masochism is hugely erotic in my opinion. Well done for creating a story that really packs a punch with such a short word count.

    52) Behind Closed Doors

    Really lovely chemistry between these two. Believable banter that is sexually charged and done really well is my summery of this one. There is a nice little bit of humour and the use of the italic on the I in the sentence about him meant to be in the cupboard is a subtle but it really makes that sentence work properly. You also used the dialogue beautifully to flesh out these two so we know who and where they are and exactly what has been happening and is about to happen between them. Excellent writing.

    13) The Horny Hell
    I love the dark slightly sinister tone to this one. You have used dialogue brilliantly to give voice to both the demon who is somewhat crude and appears to almost be challenging her but also to Vicky who comes across as willful and confident despite the demons efforts to make her almost into a victim. The use of little lamb creates an instant connection to being led to slaughter in one’s mind which fits perfectly with the idea of a hellish sex club and sets things up perfectly for her fall for the devil.

    46) Riding Lessons

    I really liked this one but you gave away the twist too early

    “It’s all I’ve been thinking about since I first came here. Since that first day, when I met you, Tess.”

    If you left off the second sentence then you would have kept the reader guessing a tiny bit longer and thereby created a bit more tension in the piece as well as giving you a few extra words to play with to create a stronger end.

    18) Being Nice

    Great attention capturing opening line that hooked me right into the story. Despite it not really telling us much about these two it captured a moment that was both sexy and tender between two people really well. It needs a bit editing though, be careful of repeating words, so “Yeah. It instantly reminds me of pounding you from behind with my hand knotted in your hair and pulling your sexy little body back onto my dick with your hair as reins.”
    Would have been better as
    “Yeah. It instantly reminds me of pounding you from behind with my hand knotted in your hair using it as reins to pull your sexy little body back onto my dick.”

    It uses fewer words and stops you using hair twice.

    And
    “And in addition to those golden hairs in my bed, I want you to soak my bed in cum again.”
    to
    And in addition to those golden hairs how about we soak my bed in your cum again”

    Again in saves a few words which combined with above would have given you more to play with but you don’t need to keep repeating the hairs in the bed, we know where they are and why they delight, you can be more concise and that frees up some words for you to tell us something more.

    2) Missing Something

    I really quite liked this one. You did an excellent job of using the dialogue to set the scene for these two and the conversation feels both real and relatable however the fact he doesn’t read books really put me off him and I think you could have left that bit out and just had him asking her to explain herself which would then have maybe left you a few extra words to carve out an ending because as it is, is just stops and that really let this piece down.

    20) Awaiting Parole – prison

    The opening line totally grabbed my attention and I was excited and curious to see where it was going to go. The jump to their conversation was a bit swift but you had so few words to play with that you didn’t really have much choice and the end made me chuckle. This is definitely good writing but it kind of doesn’t really live up to the opening line. Their interaction just feels a bit flat and not particularly exciting.

    1) Confession Booth

    This is a scenario that has been well explored in erotic fiction so if you are going to do it you really need to do it well. You started off strong and her descriptions are definitely hot and sexy especially in contrast to his direct almost perfunctory questions but the ending really lets this piece down. Her asking him to come out felt wrong as all the way through he is really in charge of the conversation and ‘he moved’ is odd phrasing. I understand the low word count made it tricky but maybe a bit of streamlining earlier on might have gifted yourself just a few more words to play with at the end and finish on a more tantalising note.

    Molly

  10. This was another tough round to judge! Apologies for not having enough time to leave feedback.

    Quite a few have dialogue that seemed unnatural, which took me out of the stories. I love the humor and creativity of some of the entries, especially 20, 30, 42, and 52!

  11. It’s tricky to write a story that’s almost exclusively dialogue and not have all the bits that are usually narrative stuck between quotation marks. So that and innovation are how I decided to cast my votes this round. Plenty of kittens and dancing this round.
    1) Start the shortlist with a bit of a bang… and a bit of a shock, based on some current events.
    10) This was a good twist.
    22) I mention this only because it seemed a little disjoint. It was clever and wanted to be more, but the OTHER problem with a dialogue story is that it can become “talking heads” and with such little room for tags, it’s difficult to follow.
    27) This horsey story had a good rhythm to it. The editing was done so well, the reader could feel the build up from walk, to canter, to gallop.
    29) Brave choice, using second-person perspective, though I am not sure how well it works here. Mainly because it eliminates half the potential audience.
    30) A true “fly on the wall” moment. Cleverly presented.
    41) I like the clever asides in this.
    46) Of the horsey stories this round, this one stood out. Very sensual.
    50) This made me smile both times after I read it.
    60) I did like this story; I thought it was hot!

  12. As a good catholic boy (oh ok, relapsed) and a big fan of Fleabag – 1) Confession Booth was my favourite – I especially liked the line… “somewhere forbidden”, it actually sent a guilty shiver down my spine, and for that reason alone I’d have voted for it, but it’s a scenario I’ve always enjoyed and I felt this was well done, written with a nice sense of sexual tension in the air.

    19) Last Request – I loved this scenario, found it very horny, very well written, nicely paced and believable – the pay off line was just delicious.

    39) Call Me – I thought the dialogue here was very well done, very clever the juxtaposition of the filth and the business-like responses. I’m a sucker for a twist or a good final line in a short story, and this one “Anticipation trickles wet” was wonderful, created a strong image.

    I thought the quality of this round (that I struggled with) was very high, other stories I especially enjoyed were; 7, 8, 13, 20, 46 and 59.

  13. This was a difficult round. Dialogue is tricky because it simply has to be done right. I often write short stories on my blog practicing it, so that when I write a longer tale it flows better.

    Another thing I would say is because there are still so many entries, it is extremely important to stand out. Be original in some way. The Sir/Master Kitten stories didn’t work for me. Too many of them.

    I was looking for sharp dialogue, the voice of the character coming through and a proper story. I also was picky regarding typos and grammatical errors. There were quite a few.

    I voted for these three –

    Number 6
    I chose this one because it was a proper story, with real characters. I liked that they sounded different to each other too, they had their own voice.
    Improvement – I suppose a bit more actual erotica.

    Number 14
    Oh this one made me smile and even though I knew what would happen at the end I enjoyed getting to that point. A complete flash story, and very sexy too.
    Improvement – Would perhaps have liked their voices to “sound” different.

    Number 2
    I had to pick this one as in my opinion it is extremely well written in all ways and such a sexy conversation that I could imagine actually happening. Not that fiction needs to be real of course, but I could just relate to this story.
    Improvement – In the last paragraph we get a glimpse of his voice with – y’all – I liked that. Wanted more.

    Others I liked –

    Number 24 – This was great speech, sounded like actual people, which is of course the idea of dialogue. I enjoyed the way it was set out. If I could have chosen another this would have been it.

    Number 38 – Nicely written and very hot – couldn’t imagine her coming with some poor old guy opposite though. Would put me off I think.

    Number 42 – This is excellent dialogue. You can tell who is speaking all the way through. Would have liked it spaced out a bit. Just my preference.

    Number 1 – I would really have liked to vote for this one. Very sexy and great anticipation. But there was a comma where there should have been a full-stop. I know it sounds picky but there were so many good ones I had to be picky.

  14. Yeesh, this was a tough assignment! I know that I struggled and so I admire and congratulate all who entered this round. There were a lot of Maledom stories again, a popular subject it seems. Once again there were so many amazing stories and once again I have severe imposter syndrome when adding my feedback but, in the hope that it helps, here it goes:

    1) Confession Booth. I enjoyed this scenario and the unexpected “I’m bare there” was wonderfully placed. The “He moved.” at the end seemed a bit basic after such a great build up.

    2) Missing Something. Great, believable dialogue although I’d have liked to know how these characters know one another (but then that’s possibly an issue with the word limit!)

    5) The Replica. This conjured up some delightful images, but could have been clearer to follow with better punctuation.

    9) So Hard. This perfectly captured that hunger of long-distance lust, but perhaps could have done without that final line and instead leave the reader guessing.

    11) Relief Lines. Really well written. The love between the two characters comes across so clearly. Great job!

    12) Wants and Needs. What a brilliant and entirely believable way in which to describe how a couple begins the journey into BDSM

    13) The Horny Hell. A little hard to understand what’s happening to start off with, but packed with sexy imagination – very clever.

    14) Active Observers. Loved this scenario, but found “grabbed the tablecloth, and bit her lip like,” I make the face, “and then the guy winked at me like, ‘yeah, it’s exactly what it looks like.’”” difficult to follow.

    15) Girl Talk. Enjoyed how the explicit mention of oral sex was so casually dropped into the conversation. Could have been improved by using “there’s” instead of “there is” and “He’s” instead of “He is” as this would have better reflected how people speak.

    16) Moonlight Serenade. Excellent writing, this felt like such a natural conversation. I felt I was really getting to know the characters – impressive in such few words.

    18) Being Nice. Very enjoyable. Likeable characters too! Maybe the sentence beginning “It instantly reminds me…” could have done with more punctuation.

    22) Gazpacho: After Hours. I found this a bit difficult to follow and it seems as though there was some incorrect punctuation.

    31) Under Instruction. Some punctuation errors, but that didn’t detract too much from this delicious scenario.

    33) Yes Ma’am. Good to see some Femdom erotica! I wasn’t sure, however, why he was staring at his phone? Also, whilst repetition added to the pace, there perhaps were a bit too many “yes ma’am”‘s!

    34) The catch. Although I liked “Those thick, hard nipples were for me.” this seemed a bit lacking in smut.

    35) Cum talk. Struggled to follow this and think better punctuation may have helped. E.g. “Shall I send that photo now the one of your cum in my knickers” could have done with a comma after ‘now’ and a question mark instead of a comma after ‘knickers’.

    38) Distant Touch. Great idea for a story. I also liked the flow of this conversation. Not sure if this was a text message conversation though?

    40) First time. Ooh, fun twist! Couldn’t quite make sense of ““Tonight.” Karen considered. “Fifth date.”” though.

    43) Space Dolphin. Very enjoyable ending, although it took a while for me to realise that Kate was another person in the room. Also, ‘Meep’ reminds me of Roadrunner (neither a good nor a bad thing) – Meep Meep!

    47) Try Again. This is very cute, well done for creating such likeable and believable characters in a short story. If you were trying to convey embarrassment then perhaps “He touched her blushing cheek” would have been clearer

    49) Our Boy. While I liked the story and admire how well-written it is, it wasn’t clear who ‘The man sitting between us’ is.

    51) Last-Minute Revision. Gloriously sordid, unashamedly erotic (hooray!) and cleverly makes me wonder if this is a professional setting or just two lovers having fun.

    55) Fantasy Becomes Reality. Clever way to describe a story as part of a dialogue. I enjoyed how it had a frisson of erotica without being overtly explicit. One small thing; ‘peaked’ should I think be ‘piqued’.

    56) The Arrangement. What a fun scenario, you’ve done a great job of writing the dialogue so that it flows naturally and is believable. Good use of italics too, a useful learning for me to take away.

    57) Massage Therapy. The conversation didn’t really seem to flow, I think it could have been helped by shortening ‘You are’ to ‘You’re’, ‘I will’ to ‘I’ll’ etc. Really liked “the wetness that craved attention” though!

    59) Condoms Are Sexy! Oh wow, condoms really are sexy! Great to read unique scenarios, especially when the roles of each character are so clearly defined.

    60) Beginner’s Lick. Fantastic! That interruption in the dialogue, where we read the character’s thoughts, is just perfect. Also…the title ‘Beginner’s Lick’? Superb!

    61) Fulfilling Her Fantasy. I like the idea, but I’m not sure if the non-consensual gangbang was intended to be horror or erotica (or both!)

    62) Coffee Talk. I enjoyed the storytelling – a clever use of dialogue. But Jon’s interruption at the end seemed a bit creepy!

    63) Stronger Measures. The best stories always leave me wanting to read more and this certainly does that. One tiny thing; I’d have liked a small insight into how at least one of them is feeling, but accept that this isn’t always possible in a short story.

    1. lovelustlondon – the gangbang in my story – #61 Fulfilling her fantasy was DEFINITELY consensual. That was kind of the point and why I had her spell it out for him in the dialogue… plus, I thought the title would give it away…

  15. 4 Private Roleplaying Session (10)
    What I liked: I’ll happily confess that this is a completely alien world to me, and so I didn’t always completely understand what was going on, but I loved the dynamic between the two characters and, for the most part, the dialogue seemed to me to flow very naturally. I loved the “I kiss him” bit.
    What I thought could be improved: I thought you could have ended more strongly, perhaps – the last sentence felt like you trying to round the piece off within the word count, but it didn’t add much.

    52 Behind Closed Doors (9)
    What I liked: The flirtatious back and forth of the dialogue – it’s not the world’s most original scenario, but you actually acknowledge that within the piece, which is clever, and the dynamic between the characters is lovely.
    What I thought could be improved: The ‘He unzips my jeans’ – I was disappointed that this just stopped there, but I was certainly struggling to pick faults with this. It only lost out on the ten points because I wondered if the set up could have been more original.

    14 Active Observers (8)
    What I liked: The fact that you’ve gone with lots of short bits of dialogue – I think that’s much more challenging/realistic than whole paragraphs of speech, personally. And I really liked the line ‘“Ten bucks and all my side duties says she comes before their steaks do.”’
    What I thought could be improved: The start of this is quite abrupt – although it’s not difficult for the reader to establish the characters’ relationship to one another, the ‘Hey’ makes it seem to me like they’re casual acquaintances, which is at odds with what they’re talking about. And I thought the final line was a little abrupt too, I’m afraid.

    19 Last Request (7)
    What I liked: The scenario and the characters – ‘bad’ characters (i.e. ones who do/have done bad things, or ones that are perhaps weaker than they should be (you have both!)) are fascinating to me, so I enjoyed reading this.
    What I thought could be improved: There were a couple of clunky sounding bits of dialogue, I thought, e.g. ‘I think she pulled some of my hair out’ (drop the ‘I think?) and ‘A swift adjustment of her underwear’ and watch out for small typos – there’s a speech mark missing. These are minor quibbles, but that’s because the quality of the writing overall is very good.

    37 Fetch the Rope (6)
    What I liked: The quality of the writing. The back and forth of the dialogue is convincing and the scene is sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: The reason this didn’t score more points is because there isn’t anything particularly fresh or new about it – it’s just a nicely written rope bondage scene.

    43 Space Dolphin (5)
    What I liked: The originality of the premise and the dynamic between the two characters – very cute. And the way you set the scene so concisely but effectively with the first two pieces of dialogue.
    What I thought could be improved: I didn’t really like – or get, I’m afraid, the ‘Lovely Dolphin’ reference. You lost me with this, which is why this didn’t score more highly.

    13 The Horny Hell (4)
    What I liked: That this is smut, without a doubt! I wanted all the things that were being offered as options to Vicky.
    What I thought could be improved: The formatting of your piece needed a little work – there should be a line gap between speakers, for example. Also, the opening of the piece is a bit disorienting.

    12 Wants and Needs (3)
    What I liked: Lovely dynamic between the characters and a narrator with real-world wants and needs. I love this kind of erotica.
    What I thought could be improved: This gets a bit monologue-y towards the end. I understand that your character has been given permission to speak and now can’t stop the flow of words, but it seemed unlikely to me that anyone would be able to rant quite this fluidly, and, by putting so many words in one piece of dialogue, I feel like it slightly skirts around what’s supposed to be tricky about this challenge.

    39 Call Me (2)
    What I liked: The way they talk about Matt, such as calling him big ears. It’s very playful and fun.
    What I thought could be improved: I wasn’t a big fan of ‘Anticipation trickles wet.’ It’s not a bad line in and of itself, but it doesn’t seem to fit the tone of the rest of the piece.

    1
    What I liked: I’m not sure this is an original scenario, per se, but it did stand out as being different to lots of the other stories here.
    What I thought could be improved: The shift in the power dynamic at the end is slightly strange to me and also it causes the sexual tension to evaporate a bit, I found, which I’m sure wasn’t your intention.

    2
    What I liked: The last paragraph is very sexy, even if technically I think he might be mansplaining good sex to her! 😉
    What I thought could be improved: I didn’t understand why they were having a conversation about the kind of sex had in novels. I thought this probably needed a little more context to make it work.

    3
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: I was just hoping there might be a twist or something a little more surprising in this – it’s a nice story, but it’s not particularly memorable.

    5
    What I liked: This is a lot more risqué than a lot of the pieces in this round, which is great. And god, the idea of showing my asshole like this makes me feel mortified!
    What I thought could be improved: This feels a little like an extract from a longer story – I didn’t really think that It quite worked as a standalone short, sorry.

    6
    What I liked: I like Val – I like that she takes no shit! Also, the dialogue is quite realistic-sounding.
    What I thought could be improved: This doesn’t feel particularly sexy to me – is it intended to be primarily comedic?

    7
    What I liked: The dialogue is very well-handled – the use of ellipses etc. makes how horny they are for each other very clear.
    What I thought could be improved: ‘Let’s go and find some more guests to corrupt’ – I didn’t really understand the ‘more’ here – I didn’t realise they’d corrupted any guests?

    8
    What I liked: It’s very clever to include some of her thoughts within speech marks, I thought.
    What I thought could be improved: I found the scenario a little cliché, and kind of wished you’d done more with the missing keys – it would have been very interesting if she hadn’t been able to get in at all.

    9
    What I liked: I really liked the way the two characters interacted, I found their flirtatious conversation very natural and this almost made my shortlist.
    What I thought could be improved: I thought perhaps you could have added a more twisty twist and I didn’t really understand where they were/which door he was standing behind.

    10
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I didn’t buy that someone who opens a conversation with ‘what do u like’ would be capable of switching so easily to proper punctuation/grammar.

    11
    What I liked: I liked this a lot – it very nearly made my shortlist because of the realism of the conversation. Plus, I felt her ‘I just want to cry’ – been there!
    What I thought could be improved: The reason why this didn’t quite make the shortlist was because, although the writing is very strong, there’s nothing particularly new or surprising about the plot?

    15
    What I liked: It’s a nice idea to have the conversation be about someone talking to a third party about something sexy, rather than between two of the people having sex, and I think you were the only person to do this
    What I thought could be improved: Because Beth has such long passages of speech, it feels a little bit like you haven’t fully engaged with the challenge of the assignment, I’m afraid.

    16
    What I liked: You’ve combined sexiness and romance really well in this – I can totally sense the affection between the two characters.
    What I thought could be improved: Towards the end I got a little confused about who was speaking, and had to reread it a couple of times to figure it out.

    17
    What I liked: You’ve really given your characters voices that are unique to them by using phrases like ‘you goose’ and ‘these girls.’
    What I thought could be improved: Sometimes I got a little confused about who was speaking, and had to reread it a couple of times to figure it out.

    18
    What I liked: I particularly liked the third paragraph – the image of his hand in her hair was very sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I really didn’t see how biting a tobacco-scented lip could be sexy, but other people may feel differently.

    20
    What I liked: I liked the scenario you went with, which was a clever take on the prompt, and the touch of humour at the end is nice too.
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I got a bit confused about who the characters were at points – I think it was the ‘Jackson’ bit that threw me.

    21
    What I liked: The line ‘I need … to educate your tongue’ is lovely – very flirty!
    What I thought could be improved: I thought perhaps you’d set yourself something a little too complex here, given the very limited word count. The idea is nice, but I think you could have executed it better if you’d had more words to play with.

    22
    What I liked: You’ve mastered the back and forth between characters – by having lots of little, short pieces of dialogue, I think you’ve really risen to the challenge (as it were!)
    What I thought could be improved: This doesn’t feel particularly sexy to me – is it intended to be primarily comedic? Also, I didn’t think the line ‘My chilled nipples show through my soaked chemise’ should have been between dialogue tags?

    23
    What I liked: I very much liked the scenario – for some reason the idea of regret is extremely sexy to me.
    What I thought could be improved: I couldn’t quite work out the dynamic between these two – are they on an actual first date, or just role playing one?

    24
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: The formatting of your piece needed a little work – there should be a line gap between speakers, for example.

    25
    What I liked: A clever idea, to use two very famous characters and do something new with them.
    What I thought could be improved: I didn’t think you’d exploited your clever premise as much as you could have – more link with the original story might have been nice.

    26
    What I liked: That you’ve made sure to include lots of smut – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: The formatting of your piece needed a little work – there should be a line gap between speakers, for example, and there are one or two typos, also.

    27
    What I liked: Your idea for your story is very brave, which I really like – you’re definitely taking a risk! Good for you!
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I didn’t find it that plausible that she would go to some deserted stables with someone she’s just met.

    28
    What I liked: I think this is an excellent take on the assignment, with a great title, and it very nearly made my shortlist.
    What I thought could be improved: I was a little confused by her ‘Please, can I?’ What is she referring to here? Is she asking for permission to come?

    29
    What I liked: It’s great that you’ve managed to get so much sexiness into such a short piece.
    What I thought could be improved: Who is the narrator here? It seems to be the person on the end of the phone, but, if it is, it’s not clear how he knows e.g. that she’s smiling.

    30
    What I liked: It’s cool that you’ve done something unusual with the perspective of the narrator in this – it really makes your story stand out.
    What I thought could be improved: This doesn’t feel particularly sexy to me – is it intended to be primarily comedic?

    31
    What I liked: I liked that he made her wait, a lot – I thought that bit was really sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: It would have been good to see a twist or surprise in your story to keep the reader guessing a bit.

    32
    What I liked: The fact that they were sexting – the long distance communication premise has lots of potential.
    What I thought could be improved: It would have been good to see a twist or surprise in your story to keep the reader guessing a bit – this is quite a familiar set up as it stands.

    33
    What I liked: I loved the opening exchange – it made the story feel very real to me.
    What I thought could be improved: I wished you’d made it clearer why she was suddenly ready – I guess I’d have liked to see what was going on in her head exactly.

    34
    What I liked: This nearly made my shortlist because I loved the fish and chip shop setting and the character descriptions were very strong.
    What I thought could be improved: I wished you’d done a bit more with the setting – it felt like the promise of it didn’t quite play out fully, if that makes sense?

    35
    What I liked: You’ve gone with a classic hot scenario here and made the most of it with a limited word count.
    What I thought could be improved: Some bits of it, such as ‘Him “like yeah” felt like they still needed editing.

    36
    What I liked: The descriptions in the first paragraph – the way you use language here is really strong.
    What I thought could be improved: Sadly, I didn’t think the dialogue worked quite as well – it felt a little stilted.

    38
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: I was a little disappointed that he was there in the carriage – I’d have been interested to see the sexting conversation continue.

    40
    What I liked: The topic of first times – I think it has lots of potential for being super sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: I found it quite hard to get the context of this story and to understand what the relationship was between the two characters.

    41
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: Although you’ve mixed erotica and sci-fi(?) here, the story felt a little clichéd/predictable to me.

    42
    What I liked: You’ve gone with a classic hot scenario here and made the most of it with a limited word count.
    What I thought could be improved: The formatting of your piece needed a little work – there should be a line gap between speakers, for example.

    44
    What I liked: I liked the twist of Kate being there and him knowing all along – this almost made my shortlist.
    What I thought could be improved: Although Kate’s presence is a nice twist, this wasn’t quite original enough to get points, sorry.

    45
    What I liked: This is another one that almost made my shortlist – it treads a risky line between erotic and comedic.
    What I thought could be improved: Some of the dialogue was too comedic for me to find it truly hot, even though the last paragraph is very sexy.

    46
    What I liked: The dialogue is nice and natural and the story’s very cute. Almost made my shortlist.
    What I thought could be improved: I wished you’d made more of the fact that the horse is called Tinder!

    47
    What I liked: The topic of how awkward it can be to establish the kind of dirty talk you like was a really good choice, I thought.
    What I thought could be improved: I found the switch from jokiness to serious/meaningful a bit abrupt, I’m afraid

    48
    What I liked: ‘Are you wet?’ ‘Have you done anything to get me wet yet?’
    What I thought could be improved: I found the twist at the ending a bit predictable and thought the story as a whole might have been better without it.

    49
    What I liked: That you’ve absolutely met the smut brief – lots of sexiness for such a restricted word count.
    What I thought could be improved: Watch out for small typos – they weaken an otherwise very good piece of writing.

    50
    What I liked: “What kind of question is that, right after sex? I still have your cum running down my legs!’ I can imagine someone actually saying this.
    What I thought could be improved: I didn’t quite buy that they would have this conversation out of the blue, but that may be just me.

    51
    What I liked: The porn film premise – it’s a clever idea, I think.
    What I thought could be improved: I didn’t think you’d exploited your clever premise as much as you could have – after the start it becomes a bit predictable.

    53
    What I liked: The dialogue is very good and easy to read, which counts for an awful lot in this challenge!
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I didn’t think the plot of your story had anything particularly memorable about it.

    54
    What I liked: Opening with ‘He’s nervous.’ It really sets the scene, but doesn’t waste any of your limited word count.
    What I thought could be improved: I’m afraid I’m not a massive fan of passive disabled characters – it feels very much like everything is being done to him and that he’s not a particularly active participant.

    55
    What I liked: The twist at the end of her asking Katie to join in – I’ll confess I hadn’t seen that coming (ahem!).
    What I thought could be improved: Careful with some of your word choices – I think you mean ‘piqued,’ not ‘peaked.’

    56
    What I liked: I liked a lot when Kali insisted that the narrator focus on her own desires – it would have been easy not to include this, but it really makes the story.
    What I thought could be improved: I wasn’t sure about ‘retorts heartily’ – it didn’t seem very sexy/natural to me – perhaps you could rephrase this?

    57
    What I liked: You’ve gone with a classic scenario here and made the most of it with a limited word count.
    What I thought could be improved: Be careful to check for minor typos, as they can spoil the overall effect

    58
    What I liked: As with the previous story, you’ve gone with a classic scenario here and made the most of it with a limited word count.
    What I thought could be improved: It would be good if you added some kind of twist, I think – it would make this story more memorable.

    59
    What I liked: I loved this idea – it’s an important message and this was a great opportunity to explore it. Almost made my shortlist.
    What I thought could be improved: I thought maybe you could have ended with a stronger last line – this feels like it fades out a bit.

    60
    What I liked: The back and forth of the dialogue is convincing and the scene is sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: There’s nothing particularly new or surprising about the plot, I’m afraid.

    61
    What I liked: The quality of the writing. The back and forth of the dialogue is convincing and the scene is sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: There isn’t anything particularly fresh or new about the plot – it’s just a nicely written, but quite common, fantasy.

    62
    What I liked: The premise of telling a friend about a super hot hook up – I think that has the potential to be very sexy.
    What I thought could be improved: I don’t love that Jon is ‘secretly sitting at the table behind them’ – this feels like too convenient a way to wrap the story up.

    63
    What I liked: I find the idea of being discussed by people right in front of me very hot, so I thought this was a very sexy set up.
    What I thought could be improved: This wasn’t quite fresh or new enough to make the shortlist, I’m afraid, even though it’s nicely written.

  16. One of the challenges of a competition like this is that with so many really short pieces, repetition of them crops up and can diminish the relative appreciation of otherwise fine writing. By the fifth D/s relationship I was tired of ‘Sir’s as a reader, and that ran the risk of not being fair to the later ones as a voter. The stories I have comments on are very front-loaded in the first third of the entires. I believe it’s because I actually found those the ones I liked most, but I’m going to read next round’s entries backwards, I think, just to make sure.

    Things I didn’t like, generally: Dialog through text or sms. Ironically, one of these still made my top 5, but as a rule, I don’t think of that as the same kind of dialog as what the rules really called for. Phone conversations were another type I just inherently like less. I also didn’t care for dialog that was detached from sense of place or atmosphere, or felt generic. Some dialogs felt like they were complete scenes, which I liked, and others felt like they were just tiny pieces of something much larger, which was harder to appreciate.

    One thing that caught me again and again were conversations where I simply couldn’t see/believe people speaking that way. There’s a difference between what you say and what you describe on a page. Spoken language doesn’t use nearly as many adjectives or adverbs as written an it is jarring to imagine someone speaking so flowery outside of a period novel. Plus, and I’m guilty of this all the time, we use contractions in our every day speech _all_ the time. “I’ve gotta eat you,” Instead of “I have got to eat you.” Finding the line between slangy casualness and readable English can be tough (some people would object to ‘gotta’), but people in natural dialog, in general, should sound less formal – unless formality is called for.

    Confession Booth was a classic scene, done well enough that it avoided cliche, for me.
    Missing Something felt like too short a piece of conversation, but the last soliloquy was personally familiar sounding.
    4) Private Roleplaying Session warms the cockles of my gamer nerd heart. Bonus marks. I fear it might be esoteric for those not into the kink (isn’t D&D a kink?), but the double fantasy was very clever and got my vote.
    5) The Replica had one of the better lines in the round – ‘your ass speaks for itself’.
    6) Northern Souls was, for me, atmospheric, but not erotic. It felt like part of a larger story I would have liked – this is one of those that seemed like a good piece of something, but needed more context for me to appreciate.
    7) The Dinner Party took two reads for me to place them properly. They needed to be semi-hidden for the scene to work, and that placement wasn’t easily apparent for me.
    8) Lessons in punctuality was simple domestic D/s bliss.
    9) So Hard had a nice surprise, but this is one where the dialog didn’t feel like natural spoken language – a few too many adjectives.
    10) Snap shot was dangerous and interesting. Text dialog didn’t do it for me, but the _scene_ even though it was a bit telegraphed, worked.
    11) Relief Lines was foreign to me, but communicates the intensity and exchange of the relationship well.
    12) Wants and Needs was a true fantasy – the a. I don’t think I could articulate my desires verbally that well even at my advanced age.
    13) The Horny Hell was just excellent. I’ve always like the “about to sin” like, which _is_ cliche, but the story that came after was fantastic – literally and figuratively. The atmosphere well transmitted in just dialog between woman and demon.
    14) Active Observers was another favorite. The writer snuck in two whole, sexy stories in one short dialog. Skillful _and_ hot.
    17) A Morning Interlude was fine, but I think the metaphor was overdone.
    19) Last Request shifted tone pretty much completely in the last line. Turned the whole story intriguing.
    21) Lost at Si was fun multilingual homonym play. I’m a sucker for homonym play, and this made the flirtatiousness more fun.
    27) Triggered Emotion conveyed the scent and atmosphere it was centered around very well. My only advice would be to lose the last sentence – it isn’t necessary.
    40) First time was cute. I can see a cheeky kid trying this. The language may have been a little too literary to be believable, but it was fun.
    61) Fulfilling Her Fantasy works, even though I guessed the outcome early on. The closing line sells it.

  17. 1. Confession Booth: This story totally taps into my ‘forbidden desires’. I am not Catholic at all, but I would love to do a confession and then have something filthy happen to me. That said, this story is written well, and leaving the dialogue tags ‘he said’, ‘she said’ away, totally works here! Well done.

    2. Missing Something: I like how you have made this conversation feel all natural. There are many feelings in this, and I like how you have managed to convey them with very little words, such as ‘shrugged’, ‘cleared his throat’ and ‘christ’. And I love this: “it makes me feel like a god and a slave”.

    3. Dance with Me: I like the fantasy here, and the writing is good, but I would have loved to know just where they were when this conversation took place. I think the setting (maybe already in a club) would have added to this.

    4. Private Roleplaying Session: The idea here is really sexy, but it took me reading this twice to fully grasp the story, as a lot is packed into very little words, which is an art in itself.

    5. The Replica: You have used the dialogue to move your story forward, to tell the reader what is happening, and that’s good. I have to admit that I googled Man Ray to see what photograph they were recreating over here 😉

    6. Northern Souls: There’s something sad in this piece of dialogue, like Barry is trying to escape where he comes from, and Val is happy to just stay where she is.

    7. The Dinner Party: I love the setting here, and the way she touches herself with other people around. This is another piece of dialogue that works well without the dialogue tags.

    8. Lessons in punctuality : I think you could have left the first paragraph away, as the rest of the story stands perfectly without it. The following two things should be different:
    She bowed her head, “yes, sir.” … should be … She bowed her head. “Yes, sir.” … or … She bowed her head, and said: “Yes, sir.”
    “Let’s see,” he said “one stroke for every minute you were late. Start counting, little one.” misses a comma after ‘he said’.

    9. So Hard: I like the exchange here, and the little twist at the end. The only thing that I would have changed is the first sentence, to “Is it hard?”

    10. Snap Shot: The very first thing I saw was that there was no full stop at the end of the first sentence. Then I read the next two lines and what I expected, were more lines with incomplete punctuation, but I didn’t find those which made me think the first line was a mistake?

    11. Relief Lines: Even though this is one of many power play scenes in this round, I do like this one a lot. However, there could have been a bit more context from ‘wanting to cry’ to giving a caning. I know you were limited for words, and you could’ve solved this in a longer piece, but I think it might have been possible here too, if you the actual spanking scene was a bit longer.

    12. Wants and Needs: I have now read this conversation several times, and where I do like it, really like it, it’s the last line that to me kind of weakens everything that comes before it. I understand that you wanted to end the story showing they went off together, but think that it would have been stronger if there was no dialogue in the last sentence. Maybe something like: “Her hold on my wrist tightened. I followed.”

    13. The Horny Hell: Dark and sexy and well written!

    14. Active Observers: So. Fucking. Sexy! This conversation totally works on all levels!

    15. Girl Talk: A typical conversation between girls. I don’t know if this is actually a rule, but I always start dialogue on a new line, to pace the story. Other than that, this is well written.

    16. Moonlight Serenade: Shyness, love, teasing, insecurity… you have managed to capture all of that in this short piece, making it feel real. Well done!

    17. A Morning Interlude: The musical theme works really well here, as do the bits of humor.

    18. Being Nice: I like this conversation. It’s tender, loving even, but two things didn’t work for me. The ‘doooo’ and ‘toooo’ and the ‘nice to me’s’. Other than that, I like this.

    19. Last Request: There’s always a fine line between love and hate. As I read this, I thought that he fucked ‘her’ with Sophie’s consent, which made the last line come as a surprise. I can’t decide whether it’s a nice surprise or not.
    There’s a dialogue tag missing at the end of sixth paragraph.

    20. Awaiting Parole: Ha! The last line made me laugh!

    21. Lost At Si: This made me smile for too many reasons! A personal favorite, fun, humor, a tinge of sexiness and very well written!

    22. Gazpacho: After Hours: This conversation reads like a scene from theater, and maybe because of this, I wasn’t pulled into the scene, but the scene kept me at a distance.

    23. No Regrets: This is one hot conversation! Sexy, and it makes me want to know what happens ten minutes later, although I can definitely fill in those details.

    24. Put on display: A nice and sexy role-play session! Be sure to have a space after an ellipsis (…)

    25. Master Romeo: It seems like this is another role-playing session? What I think would have worked better is if the kiss happened first, then the inspection of her breasts and then the worship to begin, as she now kneels, gets up and kneels again. I actually had to go back to make sure that was right, as it the last line confused me.

    26. The Interview: I started reading this and the first two lines made me think this was written more like a script than a story. The only way I knew it was an interview, was because of the title. The rest seemed a bit confusing. Also, what vibrating sound, and what does it have to do with 69? I am a bit confused.

    27. Triggered Emotion: In my opinion you could have left the first paragraph away and worked those details into the conversation. That way you would’ve showed your reader what happened, and not told them. Having said that, the conversation is interesting, even though this is not my kind of kink. I love the last line though!
    Some tiny errors in your punctuation:
    “‘Hmmm, you smell .. interesting.’ Alison replies.” should be “‘Hmmm, you smell .. Interesting,’ Alison replies.” – when a dialogue tag follows the spoken word, there’s a comma at the end f the spoken part, not a full stop.
    “Maybe I should sit closer then.’ I grin” should be “Maybe I should sit closer then,’ I grin.” – the same here regarding the comma before the dialogue tag, unless “I grin” was supposed to be a standalone sentence, but then it would’ve been better if you have put it on the next line. You also forgot the full stop after “I grin”.

    28. Use Your Words: I absolutely love this piece! Using the dialogue you have painted a scene that had me squirming at the end. Well done!

    29. Captivating Call: The first lines confused me, as I thought the first person character was there in the room with the second person character, and could see the grin, but then I realized that (s)he was on the other side of the line, which made me wonder how (s)he could see it. This story didn’t work for me. Sorry.

    30. On the Wall: I think the perspective of this is absolutely original. Love this conversation!

    31. Under Instruction: Where I can see the sexiness here, the story didn’t come across as sexy. I didn’t feel it.
    – There’s a full stop missing after ‘Silence’.
    – ‘What happened Kitten?, was my list not clear?” should be ‘What happened Kitten? Was my list not clear?”
    – The ellipsis in the last sentence should’ve been inside the dialogue punctuation.

    32. On The Edge: Another story where I can totally see the sexiness, but not feel it. Maybe it would’ve worked better if the first couple of dialogue lines were removed and the conversation started with the action immediately. The punctuation here is perfect!

    33. Yes Ma’am: When I started reading this, I thought he would be in control (despite the title), so had to go back and start reading it again. I found myself returning to the beginning once again, as the number of times “Yes Ma’am” is used just constantly took me out of the story.

    34. The catch: I like this conversation, as it feels natural, but it was difficult to keep track of the conversation, as to who is speaking, since there were only one dialogue tag, sort of. One or two more would have improved the readability.

    35. Cum talk: Some sentences are not really sentences, but phrases, such as ‘Whispering in case anyone else was in the ladies’ and ‘Deep sighs his voice creating wetness as much as the finger she had placed on her clit’, which made this sound more like a script than a story. Also, lots of punctuation is missing, like no full stops at the end of sentences.

    36. Moonlight walk: The conversation started out very promising, but then got a bit dull. I would have loved to have read the conversation if he had indeed taken her right there.

    37. Fetch the Rope: A negotiation scene, and a very sexy one too!

    38. Distant Touch: I really like the idea here, controlling a toy from a distance. One thing that make this story less believable is that she needs to be ‘quiet’ so no one catches on to what is happening, but then he wants her to come? The dialogue is well written, proper punctuation and works even without any dialogue tags.

    39. Call Me: I like the idea of Mike eavesdropping into this conversation, and would’ve loved if he caught on to what the conversation was about.

    40. First time: Another conversation that I like, where things feel natural and not forced.

    41. Sub Routine: I hope when Janice is tweaked, the term ‘great big rocket’ is removed too. Also, I thought Janice was just telling ‘sir’ what she wanted to do to him, and can’t understand why he’s suddenly coming? Maybe I misread something…

    42. Get Over Here: Oh my, you have really nailed it with this assignment. I love the dialogue here, the slang you’ve built in there. It feels all natural and sexy as hell!

    43. Space Dolphin: I love the setting of this conversation. Well written and sexy!

    44. Bad Liar: Oh yes , this is a piece I really like, definitely one of my favorites. Three characters in such a short piece can be tricky, but you have executed the task very well!

    45. An Italian Job: I like the ambiguity here, but even so, the further I read, the more confused I got.

    46. Riding Lessons: Another story with ambiguity, but this one is sexy and hot and oh yes, I want to know how Tess teaches Kate! Tip: remember to use a space after an ellipsis.

    47. Try Again: The first pieces of conversation made me smile, because of the silliness and giggles, and then when they got to the real dirty talk, it stopped and I actually wanted to read on.

    48. Long Distance Lovers: I like the twist in the end, but think you could’ve made the conversation between them more exciting. Too many of the short sentences makes it come across staccato and removes all emotion from your words. Alternate between shorter and longer sentences to pace your story better.

    49. Our Boy: I like the dynamics you have described here! It’s sexy and hot, and I like that the ‘man between us’ didn’t speak at all, but was definitely part of the story.

    50. Pillow Talk: This is quite an interesting conversation to have right after sex, but it feels like this scene has been taken from everyday life, and I like the playfulness at the end. Well done.

    51. Last-Minute Revision: With the limited number of words, and the demand for dialogue you have managed to create a scene that feels natural.

    52. Behind Closed Doors: This piece made me smile, especially since you mentioned the cliché in the beginning, but reading this doesn’t feel cliché at all. I like how you play with words here.

    53. Good Service: Definitely good customer service. When the janitor was mentioned, I thought he might walk in on them at the end, but when that didn’t happen, I wondered what the purpose was of mentioning him specifically. Remember to use spaces after ellipses.

    54. Customer Service: A nice conversation, sweet in places, sexy in others. Tip: an ellipses is only three dots, and should always be followed by a space.

    55. Fantasy Becomes Reality: Definitely a fantasy becoming reality. Make sure that in a short piece like this, you don’t use phrases such as ‘in fact’ twice.

    56. The Arrangement: A very sexy arrangement, although I have to say that ‘the fee’ in the last sentence came as a surprise. Tip: always follow an ellipsis with a space.

    57. Massage Therapy: A sexy little scene, but in places the dialogue felt a bit forced, not natural. Make sure when you write a piece that you check it for punctuation, as you have forgotten full stops at the end of sentences. Something else is that when you follow the spoken word with a dialogue tag, you put a comma just before the dialogue commas and not a full stop. You did this at some places, but not in others.

    58. Office fling: The classic boss-secretary office fling. Sexy, but a subject that has been written about so much that it can come across as boring.

    59. Condoms Are Sexy!: You do know how to make condom-sex incredibly sexy. I like this conversation!

    60. Beginner’s Lick: I really like the title of this piece, as well as the conversation going on between the two. The words actually support the fact that this is their first time.

    61. Fulfilling Her Fantasy: Now this is a way to fulfill a fantasy. I love how you have told the story using the dialogue!

    62. Coffee Talk: I love how you have told the story using the dialogue, which exactly was the purpose of this assignment. Well done!

    63. Stronger Measures: Love the show-don’t-tell about how she has to keep her knickers at knee level, and I also like the setting of a tutorial.

  18. I don’t know why these didn’t post, but I will try again! Overall, I think everyone did a lovely job! My favorites, and the ones that got my votes were 17. Morning Interlude and 30. On the Wall.

    1.Confession Booth – not being catholic, I have no idea how these things go. With the current controversies surrounding catholic priests, I like the way you took this. Would have liked to see more heat!
    3. Dance with me – very nice! Love how you intertwined the telling of the fantasy with the current situation.
    6. Northern Souls – cute, very real conversation.
    7. The Dinner Party – hot! I wanna know how this would be possible without anyone noticing, but it’s still hot!!!
    8. Lessons in Punctuality – hot dom/sub dialogue! You did this very well.
    10. Snap Shot – Creepy! I want to know what happens next!
    11. Relief Lines – Good job! This felt real. I could imagine it all happening.
    13. The Horny Hell – I like the idea of using the dialogue to show someone around. I can’t believe I didn’t think of it!
    14. Active Observers – I really liked this! Fun conversation with a great ending!
    15. Girl Talk – This was a quick read! Seemed much shorter than many of the other pieces!
    16. Moonlight Serenade – Cute dialogue! I like that it wasn’t a straight couple. The name had me thinking about the alien from the show A.L.F., but other than that, I thought this was great!
    17. A Morning Interlude – Great use of metaphor throughout this piece. You really did a nice job carrying it through and making it sexy!
    19. Last Request – Interesting. I rather liked this. Kind of cold, but hot at the same time, if you know what I mean.
    21. Lost At Si – I liked this. It was cute
    24. Put On Display – Good use of the dialogue in this! Love the scenario!
    26. The Interview – HA! Great idea for the dialogue! Very well done!
    30. On the Wall – VERY CLEVER!!! I love the idea of seeing the scene as a “fly on the wall”. Nicely done, as well.
    38. Distant Touch – Very hot!
    40. First Time – Very cute. I like the twist at the end.
    42. Get Over Here – Love that this was a bi dialogue! Very nicely done!
    47. Try Again – I like this. It felt very real, and I could identify.
    48. Long Distance Lovers – Very nice twist at the end.
    58. Office Fling – This was super hot!

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