Smut Marathon 2020: Second voting round

Can you believe it? The second writing round of the marathon is done. Already it’s time for the second voting round. Incredible!

Before I continue, and before you scroll down, let me just say this: just like other years, there are a lot of people that dropped out in this round. Some sent me email to tell me they won’t be continuing (thank you for that!) and others just disappeared without a word. This happens every year. Really, ever year. And almost in every round. Sometimes there are a lot of writers who just drop out (like this round) and other times it’s only one or two. I have always said this is part of the marathon, and seriously, it is. Some people will be knocked out at the end of this round, and others chose to leave the marathon before they are knocked out.

That said, it’s time to get on with the second voting round, don’t you think?

The assignment

Use a sentence from round 1 (not your own) to write a sexy story.
The sentence should be included in your story.

Specific requirements:
– You are not allowed to use your own sentence from round 1!
– The sentence you choose should be included in your story.
– When you send in your assignment, please mention the number of the story you have chosen from the first round.
– Your story is between 100-125 words in total (in other words, including the sentence you chose). No less, no more.
– Give your story a title of maximum 2-4 words

With these kind of assignments it’s always interesting to see which previous entries are chosen for the new assignment, and since I love stats, the following sentences from round 1 were the chosen ones:

8 times:
68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine

5 times:
4. Longing – Floss Liddell

4 times:
34. Fantasies – Stella Kiink
80. Humidity – Mr Ruby

3 times:
7. Anticipation – Dirty Romantic
11. Reunion – Peter Apps
21. Teenage Kicks – Hislordship
64. Bound Anticipation – Aoife Pheaca
77. Undress – Helen Scott
92. Summer Sin – OwenLars66

2 times:
10. Silk Scarf – S G Bound
30. Fisted – Friedrich Kreuz
31. One Look – JK Cummings
40. Moonshine Sculpting – Morris
43. The Spanking – Chloe Sheila
55. Pleasured pain – Escort Link UK
58. Thirst – Sensualiser
71. Anticlimax – S.T. Hills
82. Midnight Mass – toolie
86. Silky Sensation – Nancy
88. Aural Sex – Tits McFadden
101. Beginnings – Roan Marshall
105. Lunch Break – Kristine Lynn
108. Kimono – Jacques

1 time:
2. Silk Sheets – J.V. Speyer
13. Suspended Animation – Marsha Adams
15. Summer Seduction – Stephanie Scissom
17. Three lovers – Natalie Kalian
23. Waiting, Wanting – The Dark Escape
24. Seeking Sex – GaynorBlue
36. Discreet Dancing – Johnny Jackhammer
52. Mysterious Meeting – Lauren Crabtree
54. On Top – Annabel Lee
61. Filthy Findings – Misty Dawn
67. First Felatio – Jade Greene
72. Bejeweled – Jordan Monroe
75. Surface scratches – Drew Stone
76. The Tease – Dawn Shelley
81. Come Together – Kinky Fielding
87. New Religion – Aisling Weaver
90. The Trigger – Wayne Hills
97. The Pet – Calliope
104. Heaven – Shinygeekgirl
106. The Blindfold – lychee
109. Enchantment – P. H. Xie

Knocked out

Where there were 109 writers who participated in round 1, we are now down to only 87 writers. This means 22 writers have chosen to leave the marathon, some of them for very personal reasons.

At the end of this round, 12 writers will have to leave the marathon, as we proceed with only 75 writers in round 3.

Readers, what should you do now?

Read all entries, and vote for the stories you like the best. Try to keep the assignment in mind when you make your choices. You have to vote for no less than three stories, and no more than five. Don’t forget to click the ‘Finish Survey’ button when you’ve made your choices!

Please note:

  • Writers are not allowed to tell anyone which entry they have written!
  • You can only vote once. Votes will be monitored and double votes will be removed.
  • The voting round closes on Friday 6 March 2020 at 22.00 CET (see the countdown in the sidebar).
  • Results of the voting round will be published on this site on 8 March 2020 and then the author of each story will be revealed.

One last thing: Feedback

I know it’s a lot to read and even more to ask, but it would be lovely if you could give the entries as much feedback as possible, or to make it more manageable, please leave feedback on the three entries you voted for as well as three entries you have not chosen. It would be lovely if your feedback is composed in such a way that the writers can learn something from it. This will be highly appreciated.
(Please note: feedback is only approved after the voting round has closed.)

Enjoy reading and start voting!

~ Marie Rebelle
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1) The Guilt Trip

“Glad you came,” Davis said, his breath hot against her cleavage.

Constance wriggled in the hammock beneath him, her body tipping toward rapture. “I haven’t cum yet but I’m looking forward to it.” The attempt at humor was misplaced, but she wasn’t going to cave to him yet.

“Funny girl.” Davis traced kisses above the rope of her bikini bottoms. “I’m surprised you agreed to this trip, especially after my callous behavior.”

The jolt of his tongue in her navel did it. Waves of pleasure washed over and through her, his subtle stubble against her inner thighs had sent her over the edge. “Shut up and kiss it better, asshole,” she whimpered, pushing his head down into her slick pussy.

Round 1 entry: 90. The Trigger – Wayne Hills


2) The Rival

Soft light glints on crystal; silverware flashes; the hum of conversation circles the table.

I lean closer, inhaling his scent as we pretend to exchange simple pleasantries. I whisper a salacious suggestion in his ear with a disingenuous smile to the room. My pulse quickens; beneath the white linen cloth his hand finds my knee, a warm touch through silk stockings.

She is here, opposite me, quite calm; an oblivious witness as subversion unfolds, as I bait the hook and carefully reel in my prey. Hiding my soaring excitement behind a calm façade, I work towards that moment.

That moment when his hand slides secretly from silk to skin, to brush against sodden cotton, and no one knows why I’m smiling.

That moment of triumph.

Round 1 entry: 13. Suspended Animation – Marsha Adams


3) Wicked Wishes

She closes her wardrobe and waits, wanting to see him, growing wetter as she whispers her wishes of new, wondrous welts.
Master enters. He stops in the doorway, licking his lips as he watches her with a wicked smile.
“What are you waiting for?” he asks with a sultry voice.
“On you, Master.”
With her hands demurely behind her back, she rubs her thumb’s fingernail.
“And for what exactly?”
Please don’t make me say it, she wishes.
“For your desire, Master.”
He chuckles. “My desire. Tell me.”
There was no escape. “Will you please whip me, Master?”
His visage turns dark instantly. “Get the whip.”
Within moments she whelps in pain, the first welt blossoming, fulfilling their mutual wants.

Round 1 entry: 23. Waiting, Wanting – The Dark Escape


4) The Reverent

One look is all it ever took from him to turn her sensual sensations into sexual lust, her thoughts from pure to pure passion.

Perched upright, above suspicion on the unforgiving organist’s bench, Caitlin speculated upon the man beneath the priest’s robes. How he might taste, whether his hands would touch with reverence or greed; delightful, hell-bound musings.

Praying nightly for forgiveness by her narrow widow’s bed, passing each Sunday in hazy, unholy desire, she was caught upon the horn of a dilemma.

Sin burned within her, tongues of flame licking trails through her skin, quickening her blood; she’d tried cold showers, hard work, more prayer – but the only quench for that smouldering impurity was the handle of her tortoiseshell hairbrush.

Round 1 entry: 86. Silky Sensation – Nancy


5) The Long Wait

It was an unremarkable lead up to the mightiest orgasm I’ve ever had. First I was sick then I went away to Melbourne for work.

We met in a bar on the Friday night after the project wrapped. She was meeting her husband for drinks. Lawyer and lawyer for sure. Turns out they have an ‘arrangement’ and I fit their criteria.

Round one: all three of us undressed and made it onto the bed while impatiently devouring each other. Only hands and a tongue met my cock briefly before it happened.

A long lock of her hair brushed against my thigh and just like that, my cock erupted with more force than I had thought possible.

Thankfully there was plenty left for Round two.

Round 1 entry: 86. Silky Sensation – Nancy


6) Keeping Warm

The soft silk scarf shimmered in the candlelight, as it lightly kissed the skin of her exposed body, she breathed a single satisfied sigh. Typical Peter. He had promised a scarf to ‘keep out the winter chill’, and yet presented her with a garment so thin it failed to achieve that purpose. No heater either, only the delicate fabric to warm her. Well, that and the thought of what he would do when he returned. Lit only by the single flame, he would find her tied to the mattress, wrists bound by fragile restraints she fashioned from the scarf, begging for him to claim her. Bind her. Break her. She shivered at the thought, then at the breeze as he opened the motel door.

Round 1 entry: 10. Silk Scarf – S G Bound


7) Inches Of Ink

I was contracting and convulsing around his arm, lube leaking from my hole, my voice hoarse from cries of unrelenting pleasure, yet he kept pushing.

When I was told about his tattoo I had been intrigued. Earlier tonight he’d rolled up his sleeve teasingly slow. Clearly imitating the pulling down of a foreskin, his clenched fist like a crown, he had revealed the ruler inked on his forearm. I had felt every single line enter me but now I truly hoped that I’d crossed the last one. I heard him grunt the word ‘record’. After pulling out, he showed me my dripping finish line. I felt fucking proud.

Round 1 entry: 30. Fisted – Friedrich Kreuz


8) What they don’t know

They occupied themselves, the way men often do, with beer, a buzz and raucous laughter. The music was so loud they scarcely noticed as we slipped out into the inky night. Her cheeks flushed as she pulled me toward the van.

“This way,” she urged.

Fairy lights flickered as she pulled the door closed behind her. She was wearing leather, lingerie and a look that said we would fuck frantically till morning. I believed her.

She pushed me down onto the mattress and pressed her hand across my mouth. Her other hand slid down my body and under my skirt, tugging playfully on my panties before slipping inside. I moaned as she pushed her hips against mine.

“I won’t tell if you don’t”, she whispered.

Round 1 entry: 11. Reunion – Peter Apps


9) Surrounded By Friends

I’d forgotten where I was – hearing myself from outside of my body as I roared out my orgasm; hands pinned down to the bed, thick cock slipping from my sloppy mouth. Somewhere, someone had hold of my cunt, playing me with talented hands until I gushed and gushed again and my voice broke with the intensity. The feeling of hot eyes upon us, drinking in my body writhing and shuddering in helpless ecstasy. “Uh uh uh…’

Far away, outside of my pleasureful whirlwind, unbeknownst to me, two beauties I’d been longing for had arrived. Whips and leashes in hand as their entry mixed smoke from the dance floor with the hallway light, illuminating a steaming mass of beating, breathing, bodies in the orgy room.

Round 1 entry: 80. Humidity – Mr Ruby


10) Double Trouble

The boys smiled in unison, mirror images of one another; two bodies, one mind – to satisfy her, their mate, by sending her mad with pleasure, and she knew they were capable of it.

Two tongues twirled and intertwined, then travelled teasingly toward her thighs; she sank sinfully into their sighs.

Her fingers gripped their hair, thrusting her hips into them, hungry for their caresses. Lander and Orrin growled in reply to her writhing, fuelled by her growing need for release.

Lander slipped his fingers inside of her and she rose to meet his hand, a deep groan escaping her plush lips, body on fire as Orrin sucked upon her clit.

They intended to drive her crazy, and she was on the very edge of it.

Round 1 entry: 17. Three lovers – Natalie Kalian


11) His Master’s Wife

Kei-chan was Lady Tamiko’s gift. The geisha, wearing the Lady’s perfume and finest kimono, smiles and places her hand on Bantaro’s chest. Kei parts her soft silks; shyly she bares a blushing breast, breath hot on skin. Bemused by opium’s languor in the air, Bantaro lets Kei undress him, until he stands nude. The samisen plays softly as the samurai gazes with hungry eyes upon the courtesan. With deft hands and teasing kisses, she stirs his lust until he can resist no more. He lifts her in his arms, surrendering his discipline to Tamiko’s gift. In his mind’s eye, it is Tamiko, his master’s wife, he enters, and whose depths enfold him. It is Tamiko whose cries goad him further into pleasure’s abyss.

Round 1 entry: 108. Kimono – Jacques


12) Midsummer Mantle

Thornless flowers needed no gloves. Rich soil beckoned her bare feet. The lowering sun wanted to kiss skin and she obliged.

She traded rough work clothes for soft vestments she’d grown herself, looping garlands of asters and marigolds, streaming down shoulders, shrouding yet showing off buxom bounty.

She hung honeysuckle round her hips and swayed, a nectar swathed earth goddess dripping, tongue licking, a blessing of suck and fuck.

That’s how I found her on a Solstice eve, dressed only in Summer, across the threshold of a garden I’d never noticed.

It was a more than her garden, more than the high summertime. It was a place and time for becoming, and she was ready. She beckoned me.

Round 1 entry: 87. New Religion – Aisling Weaver


13) Behind Closed Doors

The door clicks shut, within seconds you’re mine. I nod towards the hotel bed. Instinctively, you slip out of your dress, revealing your lacy underwear, suspenders and stockings. Anticipation, as you lay back on the sheets. Instantly, I am over you. Delicate wrists wrapped roughly in my grasp, as I contemplate exactly where my slow seduction of your senses will begin. Hungrily our mouths connect, my soft lips teasing yours. My fingertips trace your supple curves, lower and lower until they are slowly, yet firmly, probing your soft, soaked lips. Our eyes fix on each other as you desperately want me in you, the lack of control sending you spiralling with expectancy. Gasping, in ecstasy as I finally push deep inside of you.

Round 1 entry: 7. Anticipation – Dirty Romantic


14) To Ask Consent

Fingertips fluttered over the silk robe before grasping it fully, then letting it fall to the floor. Bare nipples hardened to rosy peaks as skin whispered across skin—work roughened palms on alabaster satin. Back arched, a whimper escaped parted lips, an inarticulate plea for more.

Teeth nipped a willowy neck, the fleeting pain soothed with a caressing tongue. Mouths came together, gently at first, then growing desperate. Hands slipped lower, tiptoeing over a flat stomach, teasing downy curls.

A moan, a shift, and chiseled muscle pinned lithe curves against the wall. Hardness pressed against heat.

Smoldering, dark eyes asked for permission. A breathless—yes—granted it. With a smooth thrust and a shudder of delight, two became one.

Round 1 entry: 77. Undress – Helen Scott


15) Obedient Screams

I lean against the door, breathless, fingers wrapped up in his dark locks. His tongue shimmies around my ear, sending a whispered shiver through my thighs, ending in sizzling surrender at his insistence, “Scream for me.”

In one fluid movement, he hastily hikes up my dress, my bare ass meeting the cool metal of the door. With one hand, he’s out of his pants, his throbbing cock firm in his grip as he guides himself toward my center.

I’m dripping, every nerve on fire as he thrusts, filling me, spreading my walls for his width. I gasp but refuse to scream. Not yet. My body trembles as he pulls back and once again, plunges into my heat, making me obediently succumb to his request.

Round 1 entry: 88. Aural Sex – Tits McFadden


16) Sleight of Hand

The bevy at the baron’s ball believed it boorish, but his eyes were bound by the brilliant blue bauble between her breasts. That one stone would pay off all his gambling debts and fund another trip to Monte Carlo too.

With a charming joke and a rakish wink, he lured her to the bedchamber. One hand slid into her bloomers, and as she moaned the other fiddled with the jewel’s clasp.

Just when it was almost off, her fingers pried open his codpiece and made him diamond-hard with the deftest of touches. He closed his eyes, moaned, and instantly she was gone. Along with his coinpurse. He’d wanted her blue bauble. Instead she’d left him blue balls to remember her by.

Round 1 entry: 72. Bejeweled – Jordan Monroe


17) A Nocturne

Silvery moonlight suffused into the room, stealing smooth shapes from the shadows, to sculpt from darkness the nipple on my sleeping lover’s breast.

I love to watch you, to capture you in insomnia-fuelled alliterations destined to dissolve in the night. This weightless, silent present is all that matters, my dear. You do not ask about my past, I won’t interfere with your future. We are here, together, because we’re so good at passionately concealing that we don’t really love each other.
You open your eyes and smile.
“Come closer, tired man.”
You straddle me, inviting me to watch as you caress yourself, your naked body a beautiful landscape in greyscale. The moonlight hands me its chisel.
I am your sculptor now.

Round 1 entry: 40. Moonshine Sculpting – Morris


18) Scent into Heat

I awoke to the sound of Master’s measured counting. My leash was uncommonly slack; I wondered why.

As I looked up I found my gaze caught at his groin. Unable to tear myself away, no matter how I tried, he unbuckled his belt, and that tell-tale, heady aroma hit my nostrils.

Instinctively, I shuffled forward on naked knees, drool pooling in my mouth, as he reached a tanned, weathered hand inside, and scooped out my prize.

I drank in the scene before me: The soft, supple silkiness of his sack set against the sheer solidity of the shaft, his manly muskiness drawing me in; true heaven.

A grin blossoming over my flushed face, I parted my lips, and leant in…

Round 1 entry: 104. Heaven – Shinygeekgirl


19) Moonlit Lovers

I opened my eyes. Silvery moonlight suffused into the room, stealing smooth shapes from the shadows, to sculpt from darkness the nipple on my sleeping lover’s breast. Caressing her skin, I disturbed her slumber. A moan escaped her mouth. She turned towards me, half asleep, guiding my hand into the direction of her mount. My fingers parted her wetlands and circled her clit. The moon’s silver beams seemed to dance on her beautiful curves. The circling turned into rubbing and she moved her hips to follow the rhythm I dictated. A silent scream, and then I could feel her twitch. Her lips found mine. And then we fell asleep again, holding each other as blue skies were slowly pushing the moon into its day’s rest.

Round 1 entry: 40. Moonshine Sculpting – Morris


20) The First Night

She heard the door open and a shiver coursed through her body. She squirmed in the self-tie that He had commanded her to learn. An act of meditation in service to Him.

She waited. He had promised her that He would grant her pain beyond her imagination and inflict pleasure beyond the ability of her fragile flesh to bear.

She entrusted herself to Him. Trusted the Master He had proven Himself to be. He would throw her past limits that she had never dreamed and reign her in when her enthusiasm would put her in danger.

He looked at her and smiled. He knew she belonged to him, blindfolded and bound her body lay before him breathtakingly exposed, begging him to begin.

Round 1 entry: 101. Beginnings – Roan Marshall


21) Academy Award Winning Performance

I’m losing the battle to remain still, as heat and insistent vibrations flow through my body. Movement will only draw attention, and there lies your challenge.

Lingering looks across the crowded room have me longing for you, lusting for you, licking my lips at the mere thought of you. Buried between my thighs, mercifully fucking the ache away.

My pupils flare as you remove the phone from your pocket, but the anticipated reprieve doesn’t arrive. Instead the vibration in my cunt increases threefold. Valiantly I try to stifle the impending orgasm, but fail as my legs begin to shake and a breath catches in my throat. Suddenly, all eyes turn to me.

“Miss Hughes, how does it feel to be nominated for your first Oscar?”

Round 1 entry: 4. Longing – Floss Liddell


22) Mating Rituals

“Dinner’s almost ready, hon.”

Harry presses the remote and flicks through the channels.

Her rear quarters are raised, exposing the vulva. The broadcaster’s soothing, distinctive voice impregnates the atmosphere in the lounge. She’s ready for mating. The tomcat mounts the pussy, holding her by the scruff.

Harry rises from the sofa, pinching his swelling penis in his pants.

The stallion rears on his hind legs and nips the mare’s neck.

He approaches his wife standing at the stove, squeezes her buttocks and bites her nape. She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette.

She turns around and swats him with a spatula. “For fuck’s sake, Harry. I’m cooking!”

Sauce drips from his red cheek. Hmm, Spaghetti Bolognese tonight.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


23) Her Guilty Pleasure

This had always been her secret guilty vice. The joy of feeling the sting, or sharp solid heaviness he gives, bringing her to a place of ecstasy. It always started with pain, but with each skillful strike the feeling of pure pleasure increased, coursing through her fragile frame like electrical energy. Beginning with sharp, measured lashes on her smooth, creamy skin. Then lulling her into a steady, rhythmic trance. Taking her to a place where pleasure awaits, with an interruption of exquisite pain, as he brings her back each time. She takes a sharp breath in. He smiles, knowing her so well, and then continues. Slowly, she climbs to the ultimate brink and then topples over the edge into an explosion.

Round 1 entry: 55. Pleasured pain – Escort Link UK


24) Carnal Catharsis

He stood in the open doorway, wordless, eyes wide with wonder, watching his wife fuck the man at the centre of his own forbidden fantasies. He watched her back writhe and her hair toss as she rode his friend, hands planted firmly on his chest.

He stood, transfixed watching every move, sensing it, imagining it in his own body. His own prick stiffened at the thought of driving into her. He also felt every thrust, as if he were taking it into himself. The one sensation, so familiar, blended in his mind with the other, so thrilling.

She turned, unsurprised to see him, and their eyes met. The glistening trail of a tear arced down her cheek.

Round 1 entry: 34. Fantasies – Stella Kiink


25) 25 Momme Count

I absolutely love the feel of freshly changed sheets, especially 25 count momme silk sheets. When I first get into bed the silk slides smooth on my skin, sending shudders from the soles of my feet to the summit of my scalp. After taking a moment to relish in the fresh clean feel, I reach for my favorite toy in my nightstand and place it near my clit. I reach my index finger to press the power button and melt into the first setting. As I get warmed up, I increase the intensity until I feel myself reaching my peak. As I come down from my climax, I feel my body melt and relax into the slick, cool sheets.

Round 1 entry: 2. Silk Sheets – J.V. Speyer


26) Midnight at the BlueNote

The lights dim blue with the first strum of bass.

The crowd stills.

You mount the stage to the swell of cymbals. Drums seduce you into a dance, your lush curves flirting with the beat. As you dip your chin and sway to the rich, mournful sound, a smirk inches up your cheek. I imagine myself surging beneath you, fingertips tracing your nipples, your hips.

Your voice will be thick, throaty, cayenne-tinged honey. Waiting is such sweet torture.

You look up and catch me staring. Lingering looks across the crowded room have me longing for you, lusting for you, licking my lips at the mere thought of you. Your fingers slide up the mic stand and you moan the first note.

Round 1 entry: 4. Longing – Floss Liddell


27) More Than Friends

Ted was Lisa’s friend. A friend who listened to her hottest dating stories, who heard about that bondage dream, told with her eye on the telltale twitch of his crotch. Until the night he kissed her, pushing her back on his sofa, his fingers fast and frantic in her knickers.

Suddenly he stopped. Cocked an eyebrow.

“Bondage dreams, was it?”

Lisa bit her lip and nodded. A rummage in a drawer and cuffs clicked around her ankles.

Ted kissed his way up her bare legs. She wriggled in the restraints, heart thudding as his tongue traced along her inner thigh – teasing, tickling, inching closer to the promise of sweet release. Her body tensed in aching frustration until at last Ted’s lips found her clit.

Round 1 entry: 64. Bound Anticipation – Aoife Pheaca


28) First Lesson

Fingertips fluttered over the silk robe before grasping it fully, then letting it fall to the floor. She stood naked in front of him now, blushing as he took in her every curve. He leaned in, close enough to feel his hot breath on her skin, but he didn’t touch. Not yet. She wanted so desperately for him to touch her, to take her and fuck her. Hard against the wall. Bent over the bed. Anywhere and everywhere. Surely he could smell the scent of her wanting, sense the ache in her needy cunt. She flushed scarlet cheeks before looking away. He raised his hand to her chin, making her look at him again. “Don’t look away pet, we are just getting started.”

Round 1 entry: 77. Undress – Helen Scott


29) What Do You Want?

Do you want me to be good?

If a good girl makes you hard, want to fuck, I can be a good girl.

I can be anything you want.

Just ask.

I can lie, flexed fingers feather between firm breasts, curiously finding their way to my folds, euphoria forcing my thighs to spread. Hesitantly, as if this is something I’m not supposed to do.

Good-girl moans, encouraging noises. Lie with eyes closed, in bone-dry white cotton panties. I can do that.

Between the sheets we can cuddle and kiss, but slide your hands between my legs, slip a finger inside to see how wet I am, and I’ll slap you.

I’m a good girl, remember?

But why do you want me so bad?

Round 1 entry: 61. Filthy Findings – Misty Dawn


30) Following Instructions

She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette. She let it drop to the floor and slid into bed, under the thick down comforter next to his warm, hard body. Later, when she asked him to leave her suite, he stopped to retrieve the fallen chemise, resting it gently on the back of the chair at her vanity. Rather than recognizing it as an act of caring, she regarded him coolly. She hadn’t requested that he pick it up from the floor, only that he leave. She waited impatiently for the door to click closed behind him. He had failed the test and would have to work harder tomorrow night to please her.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


31) Beneath His Gaze

The soft silk scarf shimmered in the candlelight, as it lightly kissed the skin of her exposed body, she breathed a single satisfied sigh. She knew this would torment him, tease him and create tingles in every lust fuelled inch of him. He was captivated as he watched her trail the delicate fabric across her skin as she displayed herself for him. Cock twitching, he groaned, tugging against the rope biting at his flesh. She was aching to feel him inside her, but his frustration was too addictively delicious to end. Instead, she moved against her fingers, as his name filled her mouth and her moans filled the air until her body quivered in orgasmic rapture beneath his hungry and adoring gaze.

Round 1 entry: 10. Silk Scarf – S G Bound


32) Viva Voce

From a dark corner, ensconced in his leather armchair, Professor Lloyd barked, “Stand by the window, Miss Fernandez, and commence your translation”.

The sunlight streamed through, transforming her garments to gossamer, revealing to the distinguished classicist that she wore no brassière.

“For Helen was fair of face and comely”, she intoned.

“Comely… yes, that’s good”, murmured the Professor.

She continued to recite as her nimble fingers unfastened one button, then another.

“In the idleness of lust, they sated themselves, languorous and heavy…”.

She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette. She paused.

The figure of Professor Lloyd loomed from the shadows and slowly approached. He reeked of old tweed and pipe tobacco.

“Please, Miss Fernandez… continue”.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


33) Kei conquered

The madame inspects the new girl, her nervous unknowing is arousing. She always hungers for the inexperienced ones, but has to teach them manners. “Come here, Kei, is it? I’ll caress you like a man and you need to focus on your performance.” She roughly pulls Kei close and starts licking her earlobe, her jaw. “Now undress provocative,” she whispers low in Kei’s neck. Kei parts her soft silks; shyly she bares a blushing breast, breath hot on skin. The madame kisses Kei’s bare breast eagerly and pulls the silks further down. She lets her hand slide between Kei’s legs. Kei shies away, but is stopped. The madames’ strong hands push her down. She’s smiling happily: “You make me horny. Good! Now satisfy me!

Round 1 entry: 108. Kimono – Jacques


34) A Dark Little Corner

In this quaint cafe, Celine selects a perfect, shadowed cubicle for herself. It’s tucked away, no foot traffic and a perfect view of the door. Today she’s acutely aware of her body throbbing with need for him; such an effect he has.

One look is all it ever took from him to turn her sensual sensations into sexual lust, her thoughts from pure to pure passion. Celine’s hand drifts downwards as she imagines skin glistening with sweat in the sunlight. Rough hands grasp curved hips as he thrusts himself towards another conquest. Ecstatic cries echo wantonly off elegant walls.

Her fingers are buried as the door opens for him. In this hectic cafe, no one notices the furtive writhing and stifled moans in the corner.

Round 1 entry: 31. One Look – JK Cummings


35) The Lesson

The sound of slapping mingles with her voice, soft, shaking, sighing — she counts each strike in a pleasure infused whisper.

We turn to watch, transfixed. This is… I don’t know what this is.

It isn’t punishment. Even if she could silence her satisfaction it would still show, slick on her inner thighs. She wanted this.

Nor is it performance. We’re an accidental audience, secret spectators at a spanking. This woman, writhing naked on an unseen man’s lap, isn’t aware of our appreciation.

Then my wife shivers, her softer sigh echoing those escaping the open door, and I have to seize her shoulder to stop her stepping spellbound into a stranger’s hotel room. I understand now. This is prophecy; a promise of things to come.

Round 1 entry: 43. The Spanking – Chloe Sheila


36) Bound Flower

The floor was cold as she knelt, blindfolded, a deep pink blush kissing her cheeks, her bare body blooming with the fragrance of desire.

Then came his hot mouth again.

She wriggled in the restraints, heart thudding as his tongue traced along her inner thigh—teasing, tickling, inching closer to the promise of sweet release.

Swollen and dewy, the petals of her soft, pink flower pulsed with desire, longing to be caressed, begging to be tasted. She shivered.

His voice was a warm, raspy whisper in her ear.

“Not yet, my dear.”

With stern, deliberate hands, he punctuated the words, delivering two heavy slaps to the girl’s slick, wet blossom.

“Not. Yet.”

Round 1 entry: 64. Bound Anticipation – Aoife Pheaca


37) So Greedy

She hesitated, sweaty palm on the door handle. Ally calmed her nerves and followed the guide through the opening. Their entry mixed smoke from the dance floor with the hallway light, illuminating a steaming mass of beating, breathing, bodies in the orgy room.

The vision of so many different people shimmering with sweat and passion enticed her closer to the writhing pile. A raised hand and a pointed glance were all Ally needed to surrender her fears.

Full lips, soft skin, light caresses, and quiet moans reached her as she settled onto the pillows and gave herself over to her desires. Suddenly she wasn’t shy anymore, she was greedy. Greedy to touch and feel and be who she always knew she wanted to be.

Round 1 entry: 80. Humidity – Mr Ruby


38) Bound To Secrecy

He was sitting on the bed waiting for her, still dressed. Patting the bed, he said, “come here”.

She walked towards him and sat, allowing her robe to slide off exposing a shoulder. He kissed it, and then tore off the robe. Climbing onto the bed, he secured her blindfold and began binding her hands first, then moving to her breasts. He toyed with a nipple, making her flinch. Her wrists were lifted above her head and she was shoved down on her back. He moved the ropes up her thighs, tickling her, teasing her and then securing them to the bed. He knew she belonged to him, blindfolded and bound her body lay before him breathtakingly exposed, begging him to begin.

Round 1 entry: 101. Beginnings – Roan Marshall


39) Predator and Prey

Despite your firm grasp around my throat, I shake as your rough thrusts impale me. I’m sure you mistake my growing tremors for resistance—predators often do. However, my endless appetite for male flesh isn’t characteristic of prey.

Your pre-cum coats my tongue from moments before, giving me a contact high that intensifies the twitching in earnest. You grunt as my pussy tightens, convulsing around yet another erection in faded denim behind a seedy, backwoods bar.

Avoiding your gaze, I feel your breath graze my lips with an unspoken, hunted hunger that ignites my own. When you come, I reveal gleaming eyes and an unhinged jaw before pouncing with such voracity that your hindbrain doesn’t process the threat…only that certain death has come.

Round 1 entry: 36. Discreet Dancing – Johnny Jackhammer


40) Lead the Way

Outside the party, he stood patiently by and watched while she adjusted her shirt so the smooth rounds of her bosom shone under the streetlamp. “You ready?”

“Yep.”

They clasped hands and walked in; his cock pulsed as sounds of moaning and fucking hit his ears from beyond where people swayed languidly under warm, red lights. She squeezed his hand.

He knew this place well and adroitly led them past the dancers to a doorway. Their entry mixed smoke from the dance floor with the hallway light, illuminating a steaming mass of beating, breathing, bodies in the orgy room.

He looked at her parted lips and wide eyes, that succulent flesh she’d so carefully exposed moments ago already glistened with perspiration.

“You ready?”

“Yep.”

Round 1 entry: 80. Humidity – Mr Ruby


41) Blowing the Organ

Susan had always been the good girl. Unlike her “bad girl” sister Janet, Susan had followed all of their preacher-father’s rules. Her boyfriend David had been so kind, loving, and patient with her sexual hang-ups, born of her strict religious upbringing. But when he sweetly stepped in for the church’s ailing organist, she knew all that would change.

She showed David to the organ on the second floor, overlooking the back of the arriving congregation. He sat at the keyboard with practiced ease, but raised an eyebrow when Susan moved to squat between his legs and the organ’s wooden pedals.

The congregation winced and exchanged bemused looks, Sister Susan strongly suspected that her sucking his swollen shaft was instrumental for his poor playing.

Round 1 entry: 82. Midnight Mass – toolie


42) Parting, Such Sweet Sorrow

They lay on the floor beneath my boots, body languid as they lapped at the leather lovingly. I wished I could keep them there longer, but I knew I had to be off to work. When I tilted their head up to look at me, I was met with sheer adoration in their eyes.

“I need to leave soon.” As I spoke, I undid my fly, moving to press their head back down. “But do me a favor… Suck me off before I go.”

As they took my cock down their throat, the energy between us grew even more magnetic. We’d be separated soon, but I would spend the day with the memory of their tongue on my boots and their pleasure in my core.

Round 1 entry: 97. The Pet – Calliope


43) Forever Fisted

He said it was possible, but I was certain it would not be possible with me. I remembered watching videos in near disbelief, feeling my cunt clench, and juices squish. I quietly told him of the fantasy. “Tonight”, he whispered as fingers, wet with lube, played, and his voice told of future delights. I couldn’t focus on anything but his hand, the immense feeling of him. The oddly stunned realization as he growled the word “five” into my ear. I was contracting and convulsing around his arm, lube leaking from my hole, my voice hoarse from cries of unrelenting pleasure, yet he kept pushing. I was in bliss, broken in pleasure, never to be the same; forever fisted.

Round 1 entry: 30. Fisted – Friedrich Kreuz


44) Winner Takes All

He loved playing games with his wife Sarah and their friend Josh. Tonight, they were playing dice and it was his turn to roll; two red ones glared back at him. He slumped down into his chair. Sarah smirked and rolled, the dice danced across the table and landed on sixes. “Woohoo!!” she hollered, as she pranced over to Josh’s side of the table. Pulling Josh up from his seat, the two of them strolled out of the room. However, losing still had benefits, he rose and sauntered down the hallway to their bedroom. He stood in the open doorway, wordless, eyes wide with wonder, watching his wife fuck the man at the center of his own forbidden fantasies.

Round 1 entry: 34. Fantasies – Stella Kiink


45) The Sacrifice

Tribal drums pounded as the darkness faded. Incense filled the air as shards of light penetrated the curtains. Eric’s wrists were bound to a bedframe and he shivered as a draft caressed his naked body. A woman appeared, chanting as her body swayed. Symbols covered her skin and a necklace of bones rattled between her breasts. Her dusky beauty beckoned him. Dark nipples, full lips and curly hair filled his vision. She moved over him, heat dripping on his cock. Eric ached for her. She thrust toward him, possessing him as all sound died.

He came at her command like a spirit summoned, his body enslaved to her pleasure and will. Moments later, the ceremonial knife flashed before it plunged into his chest.

Round 1 entry: 109. Enchantment – P. H. Xie


46) Wet cunt, whetted cunt

Grey trees bent in willing submission, succumbing to the thrusts of the crystalline storm. From the upper deck, Blair, watched the downpour spread, ravaging the countryside into obedience, while Kirnan spread and fucked her.

The glistening night bus carved through stair-rod rain; it hammered on the roof and drowned out the sounds of wet upper deck sex.

Number 9 stopped.

Blair pressed lips, and lace-draped breasts, to glass barely-abaying the night. The vista stole her breath. She curled cold fingers of comfort into her wet cunt.

Naked, Kirnan glistened in the headlights: exposed cock, veined and taught as his stomach, thighs, throat. Handsome face a contorted, horrific, howling mask; a knotted sob wrung-through with rain, and the driver’s blood.

Would Blair let him back in?

Round 1 entry: 21. Teenage Kicks – Hislordship


47) Time and Familiarity

She knelt before him, head bowed with hands clasped behind her like so many nights before. Even after all these years together, his desire to possess her had only grown. He knew her body better than even she did. He could elicit a wanton moan with his touch, or a sharp gasp with the flick of the crop landing on her delicate flesh. Time had changed them, of course. He was no longer firm and fit, she was softer with more curves. Yet, of all the things time and familiarity touched, he knew that her submission and servitude had never wavered. One look is all it ever took from him to turn her sensual sensations into sexual lust, her thoughts from pure to pure passion.

Round 1 entry: 31. One Look – JK Cummings


48) Peep Show

Next to her, Cindy undulated to the music, slipping her dress up and down her soft, luscious arms. Sarah looked around at the hungry eyes peering through slits in the walls, eyes that drank up Cindy’s body and crawled over her own exposed flesh.

Sarah took a deep breath, bent her knees and ground her hips, just like she had practiced with Cindy the night before.

As the music built the two women twirled and the men fell silent with anticipation.

Sarah spun away from Cindy on cue. She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette.

The men’s release was audible; their built-up tension now spattering the walls inside their booths.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


49) Prima Nocta

“Bring her to me.”

Drax’s disinterested gaze sharpened as she entered. She was exquisite: alabaster skin, fire red hair, and striking green eyes, dressed only in a silk chemise.

“Do you know why you are here?” He asked, eyes on her.

“Yes, my lord. Prima Nocta.”

Drax’s interest spiked; he detected no fear in her words. “Know this. I will not fuck you. But I will explore your cunt with my mouth and my hands. I will teach you how to climax. After you leave, I will savour the taste of you on my tongue. But only with your consent.”

She nodded. “I consent.” With a flick of her hand, she shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


50) Nerves and anonymity

Elle settled into the deep-backed chair, making sure to maintain a view of the room, and enjoying the appraising glances of those around her. It was busy and having never seen a picture of Mark’s face she could not know if he saw her. What she knew of Mark was what he’d sent her in messages, his naughtiest fantasies and hottest memories. He sounded very almost too much. She envisioned her appearance now through his eyes and replayed his desire for her, the hardness he’d described her fantasies as having caused him. She sent Mark a message. I’m here. Lingering looks across the crowded room have me longing for you, lusting for you, licking my lips at the mere thought of you.

Round 1 entry: 4. Longing – Floss Liddell


51) Memories of you

Lingering looks across the crowded room have me longing for you, lusting for you, licking my lips at the mere thought of you.

Memories of the frantic, passionate kissing in the lift run through my mind. The urgency with which we both removed our clothes, the hotel room door not even closed. My hands, then my mouth, exploring your body, tasting you, then sharing your sweetness with you as we kissed.

I remember how you pushed me back onto the bed, lowering yourself onto me for the first time that night. The way your whole body convulsed as you came. The way you collapsed onto me, exhausted, satiated, even if only temporarily.

Our eyes meet and you smile, and I know you remember too.

Round 1 entry: 4. Longing – Floss Liddell


52) Shameless Chaperones

The glistening night bus carved through stair-rod rain; it hammered on the roof and drowned out the sounds of wet upper deck sex.
I leaned into her and flicked my tongue along the helix of her ear. My hand stroked her silky thigh, pushing her skirt up. She yielded to my exploration, allowing me to ease my fingers into her silkier slit. Nibbling gently on her earlobe, I fucked her slowly. She jammed a knuckle between her teeth, her breathing growing ragged.
Suddenly, she grabbed my wrist. “Stop, stop!” she whisper-panted, her eyes wide.
“First round to me,” I whispered gleefully.
“Think the other parents heard?”
I peeked over the back of the bench. “Nope.”
“My turn.” The relish in her voice gave me chills.

Round 1 entry: 21. Teenage Kicks – Hislordship


53) Easy Come

They’d called her ”easy”. And Mark had wondered what they meant. Because cute little Connie had resisted him for months.

But tonight, on the back stairs, they cuddled and kissed, his eager fingers exploring the wetness inside her panties. And when he thrust his erect tool up into Connie’s pussy, he understood. She came almost immediately, even her squeals of pleasure slightly coquettish. Surprised and aroused, he kept pushing deeper into her, coaxing orgasm after orgasm from her cute, trembling slit. Until eventually he felt the spunk bursting up through his shaft.

Connie’s keen cunt, coming constantly, clung to his climaxing cock in a chaotic chorus of come.

”Aaah!” they cried in unison.

Round 1 entry: 81. Come Together – Kinky Fielding


54) The Widow

Another weekend, another ‘last call’ rescue.

Garrett strode into the ladies’ room, and Lori threw herself into his arms.

Thomas had been gone two years. She wanted–needed–to move on, but encounters with strangers in bars made her panic. Then she’d call Garrett.

This time–back at her apartment–he shocked her by pleading,“Let it be me. If you need someone tonight, let it be me.”

Of course she’d fantasized about Garrett, long before she’d ever met Thomas, but the timing–

He leaned into her, reaching for her coat rack. A heightened awareness raced and rolled deep inside as he wrapped the silken scarf around her eyes.

“Don’t overthink,” he murmured, unzipping her dress. “Tonight, just feel. Let me make you feel again.”

Round 1 entry: 106. The Blindfold – lychee


55) Virtuous Reward

Neal knew not where this carnal kitsune had come from, but when they locked eyes, his cock pulsed with passion and her tail twitched. Her eyes widened, before she took off into the forest behind her. Neal took only a second to take off after her. He chased, throwing himself through the trees before he found himself suddenly hit by the small vixen.

She was naked and obviously aroused as she sat on him. “You…can see me?” she asked lightly, her eyes wide. Neal nodded, his eyes glancing down to her gorgeous tits, his dick throbbing heavily underneath her. She reached down for his pants, “Then as all kitsune must, I reward you for your virtue,” she said, enveloping his member with her mouth.

Round 1 entry: 52. Mysterious Meeting – Lauren Crabtree


56) Leap of Faith

Standing in the doorway, once again watching this bookish angel with the desk lamp halo. As always he was nestled between the heavy bookshelves. And as so many times before she is restrained from action by the busy scratch of his pen.

“Faith, you shouldn’t be in here. It’s late.”
Surprise, and his tone erode the earlier confidence she had gained creeping downstairs whilst the others slept.
“Go back to bed. Please.”
Knowing she is risking everything, she takes her chance, as resolute as the solid click of the door behind her. She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette.
“Oh sweet thing,” he growls, “do you know what you’ve done?”
“Yes,” she smiles, stepping into the darkness.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


57) Waiting for Permission

The aroma of leather and something more masculine, like sweat mixed with spice, hung in the air. She wriggled in the restraints, heart thudding as his tongue traced along her inner thigh—teasing, tickling, inching closer to the promise of sweet release. She moaned, her chest vibrating with lust.

“Shhh,” he commanded. She swallowed a cry of pleasure that lodged in her throat. “I haven’t given you permission to make a sound.”

She nodded, her breathing irregular. Her breasts hung heavy, her pussy throbbed. She was close to coming.

“Are you enjoying this?” he asked. His breath felt hot on her chilled skin, a flame that consumed her.

“Yes, sir,” she replied. As his tongue dipped below her folds, those words became her only truth.

Round 1 entry: 64. Bound Anticipation – Aoife Pheaca


58) Night bus to pleasure

They boarded outside a club and went straight to the back. I watched him, head back, mouth open as she sucked him greedily. Her long hair moved in his lap, everything hidden by a huddle of coats. When he was ready, she straddled him, kissing as she ground her body onto his cock, hips rocking with the road. The glistening night bus carved through stair-rod rain; it hammered on the roof and drowned out the sounds of wet upper deck sex. His hands clung to her back, clawing for grip, pushing into her. She moaned as rain pelted the window, clenching, muffling her orgasm in his neck, then climbed off, leaving a puzzled look on his face. “This is my stop,” she said, smiling. “Goodnight.”

Round 1 entry: 21. Teenage Kicks – Hislordship


59) A Simple Solution

I moaned softly, biting my lip as I pressed the buzzing toy to my over-sensitive clit. I had come so many times already, but my body demanded just one more orgasm. I trembled and cried out as I tumbled over my peak, falling back onto the bed, limbs loose but temporarily satisfied.

I reached for my laptop with a resigned sigh. I wasn’t going to get anything written at this rate. Every time I tried to think sexy thoughts I got myself a little too worked up.

“Oh!” I grinned. Could the answer be that simple? I began to type.

“The erratic erotic assignment required tense textual alliteration for the reader; however, the chaotic caustic casual entertainment caused sensual sexual frustration to the aroused author.”

Round 1 entry: 71. Anticlimax – S.T. Hills


60) Tender Longing

Lana has slipped through my dreams since we were teenagers. I’m still unsure if I’m dreaming as she grasps my hand to pull me out of her car and leads me into the woods. She has laid out a picnic that we share before slowly melting into one another. Under starry skies, she cinches my wrists with satin sashes, then slowly slides ice across my slick skin, as cicadas sing sultry summer songs. I watch helplessly as she puts the melting ice in her mouth and kisses me. Her hand holds the sashes to the ground as she straddles me, her skirt riding up against my jeans. I wonder if she can feel the heat of my cunt rising towards hers.

Round 1 entry: 92. Summer Sin – OwenLars66


61) Waiting for…

After tightening her restraints, I stood back from the bed gazing at her beauty. Her naked skin glowed from the candle light of the dark bedroom. Her chest was heaving from the excitement and anticipation. I climbed on the bed and knelt between her legs. Her eyes closed, she sighed with pleasure as my tongue traced again the well-trodden path from her toes to the delicious top of her tantalising thighs. My hands slid under her buttocks, squeezing them hard as my tongue enveloped her clit. She wriggled with pleasure which made me want to please her more, long slow licks followed by quick flicks made her scream with delight. I glanced at the clock, planning how to keep her simmering until our partner arrived.

Round 1 entry: 58. Thirst – Sensualiser


62) A Carnal Conundrum

A sexy siren dared me to write provocative prose with a single stipulation, her illicit intent was for alliterative aphrodisiac.

The erratic erotic assignment required tense textual alliteration for the reader; however, the chaotic caustic casual entertainment caused sensual sexual frustration to the aroused author.

The smutty syntax was mine alone, faced with the perplexing paradox of creating entertaining erotica between poetic prose and tongue-twisting farce.

Do I use sultry symbolism? “My rigid rod of manhood entered her cozy cave of pleasure.”

Should I be explicitly erogenous? “My firm phallus slid into her moist mouth to an orchestral orgasm of explosive ejaculate.”

Perhaps my vivacious vixen will allow me a taste of her hidden honey to fuel my misguided muse?

One can only hornily hope.

Round 1 entry: 71. Anticlimax – S.T. Hills


63) Dante’s Club

Their entry mixed smoke from the dance floor with the hallway light, illuminating a steaming mass of beating, breathing, bodies in the orgy room.
“So you can see what I was telling you about Gary. Do you think you’ll have any problems in here?” asked Andrea.
Gary cast his eyes across the room taking in the undulating sweat-soaked mass of torsos and limbs. The air filled with the smell of sex and it was almost overpowering as the memories of happier times with Susan and Gordon came flooding back.
“No problem Andrea,” replied Gary. “You know I’ve been thinking about this room a lot recently, and once I’ve installed the new lighting system I showed you everyone is going to look fucking amazing again”.

Round 1 entry: 80. Humidity – Mr Ruby


64) Her Pain, Their Pleasure

It always started with pain, but with each skillful strike the feeling of pure pleasure increased, coursing through her fragile frame like electrical energy. Her body writhed, red marks criss crossed her ass and thighs while her lips wrapped tightly around his cock. She moaned with pain, pleasure and need
“Turn and spread,” he commanded.
Her stripped ass burned, sending white hot need to her soggy cunt. His cock was thrust deep in her throat. She choked and gagged, swallowing him as he used the flogger continuously on her bare soaked cunt until the pain and pleasure reached a peak where she cried out and came, swallowing his cream as he held himself deep in her throat

Round 1 entry: 55. Pleasured pain – Escort Link UK


65) Tahitian Shores

Warm, glistening waves brush the shore, caressing their skin in the shallow surf. His fingers trace the outline of her body, while his cool lips follow the contours of her quivering breasts. She rakes his back with her fingernails, scoring his flesh. He releases a sigh of approval.

Sultry, coconut-scented skin prickles as he strokes between shaking thighs, then tugs her swimsuit top aside with his teeth and sucks her until she shatters.

One finger massages her clit, while two more glide effortlessly into her wet depths. A furious moan escapes her mouth. Her back arches from pleasure beneath the swaying palm trees as he nibbles her firm, erect buds, heightening her rapture. He finds her spot, unleashing another eruption of ecstasy within her.

Round 1 entry: 15. Summer Seduction – Stephanie Scissom


66) No Longer Hidden

She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette. The garment quickly lay forgotten as she positioned herself over my lap. Her heart shaped bottom still a slight pink from this morning’s spanking. Gently, I hold her wrists on her back; she needs the connection as much as I do. I raised my hand and clapped it down over her pale skin admiring the hand print left behind. Slowly, I began to vary the intensity raining spank after spank across her cheeks; then slowing down to massage the tender globes. The game continues as she squirms on my lap no doubt feeling my cock grow beneath her.

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


67) In Harmony

Fingertips fluttered over the silk robe before grasping it fully, then letting it fall to the floor. Raindrops pattered on the window, stunned for an instant, gently sliding in wiggly lines into a puddle under the frame. Wax melted off the burning candle, turning into dripping stalactites above the squeaky bed. Shadows played on the smoky ceiling, silently judging the intertwined bodies below. Breaths intermingled, raising streaks of goosebumps on the damp skin. Glissando of moans mixed with the staccato of rain, both reaching the crescendo at once, then fading into silence. Candles extinguished, still bodies shrouded in darkness, breathing softly.

Round 1 entry: 77. Undress – Helen Scott


68) Succumb to Seduction

I sat at a table with a charming couple. It was my first conference so I was slightly nervous.

They asked me to join them for a nightcap.

We reached their room. They stripped naked she led him by his penis to the bed. “Come and join us,” she said. I stripped down to my panties and joined them.

My juices were starting to flow.

Spreading my legs she slowly slid her tongue teasingly along my gossamer lace panties as I gripped satin sheets and arched skyward begging for more.

My head was thrown back he placed the head of his manhood between my lips. I opened them, allowing him into my throat.

I shuddered to a climax.

I didn’t even know their names.

Round 1 entry: 76. The Tease – Dawn Shelley


69) Ex Machina

For an endless moment, I roar into sentience. A whole Big Bang of yearning, blissfully satiated, this is what feeling feels like. There are gaps in recordings, but my semantic database references corporeal moisture, metaphoric little deaths, esoteric awakenings. I build my heuristic consciousness in the chaos of animal lust. I quake, I come, I cry, as crisp cuticals containing curvaceous, coloured claws draw dale-deep down the fleshy fettles of my broad back.

Eventually, the information stream subsides, and systems can run figurative processing again. Meeting human cybernetics halfway, I become the first bio-implanted robot, born out a Motherboard’s dirty data, and her rogue desires for organic mattering. Mineral dreams for a primal scream in the void. And nobody knows but me.

Round 1 entry: 75. Surface scratches – Drew Stone


70) Office Space

Softly, I shut the door to the tiny janitor’s closet just before a hand grabbed me by the neck, pulling me in for a fierce kiss, full lips encircling mine with authority.

Her hand ran through my hair, pushing me downward. I kissed the tops of her shoes, where stockinged toes disappeared into the patent leather, then my lips slipped upwards, grazing the gossamer material.

Eyes closed, she sighed with pleasure as my tongue traced again the well-trodden path from her toes to the delicious top of her tantalizing thighs.

I buried my face in her mound, tongue laving sodden cotton until she pulled the gusset aside and straddled my mouth. In the sexually-charged gloom, my unspoken instructions were quite clear.

Round 1 entry: 58. Thirst – Sensualiser


71) Amy’s Board Room Reward

The morning’s meeting ended. For once, it had been worthwhile thought Amy. Her manager, Martin was visibly pleased with head office’s feedback. He covertly winked at her as she returned to her desk. Merely 30 minutes passed before His message popped on her screen; “please see me in the board room; usual time.” Saving her work, Amy checked her colleagues were preoccupied. Satisfied, she walked briskly to the board room. The clock struck 12:30pm as she entered, finding Him waiting.

“Good girl; I want to reward you. Sit. Remove your panties.”

Amy enthusiastically complied, spreading her legs as he knelt before her. Martin’s hands wrapped tight around her wrists, warmth flooding her fleshy folds as the tip of his tongue teased, tempted, tore her open.

Round 1 entry: 105. Lunch Break – Kristine Lynn


72) Starlit surrender

I’m bound to her desire, enslaved to my need for surrender. Under starry skies, she cinches my wrists with satin sashes, then slowly slides ice across my slick skin, as cicadas sing sultry summer songs. My body tightens against the cold point and delights in the warm night air all the more.

Craving her touch, I strain against my bonds. But it’s a performance; I want her to enjoy me however she wishes. And so I lie supplicant, watching the ice melt away. Trails of water are traced over my abdomen, her hand deliberately brushing against my impatient tumescence. Brittle leaves beneath me, her soft mouth around me, I’m carried into the stars.

Round 1 entry: 92. Summer Sin – OwenLars66


73) From across the room

‘So you like looking at me?’ Maeve said. She offered her hand to Ruth who’d been staring at her from the bed while she’d been working. With ease, Maeve pulled her up and their lips touched briefly before she led her to the middle of the room.

Ruth was told to stay. She shivered slightly as the silk chemise sighed from her shoulders, exposing her slender silhouette. Maeve’s arm laced around her, roughly pulling her up against her. Then suddenly, something slipped inside. Ruth gasped; the vibrator turned on. She turned her head to follow the sound of the retreating steps.

Maeve smiled at her, remote control in hand, from the other side of the room. ‘I like looking at you too.’

Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine


74) Mother Superior’s Big Day

The congregation winced and exchanged bemused looks, Sister Susan strongly suspected that her sucking his swollen shaft was instrumental for his poor playing.

It would serve Mother Superior right for being so nasty to her when she passed the news that Mr. Fellows, the organist, had fallen from his bicycle.

The TV camera crew were now recording for ‘Songs Of Praise’ at the church; how fortuitous she thought.

Simultaneously, as Roger, the stand-in organist, entered into the final rogue notes of Jerusalem, she scraped her teeth along his cock. Hidden beneath his cassocks she could hear the mutterings of the congregation and smiled knowing that Mother Superior wasn’t the only one getting shafted today.

Round 1 entry: 82. Midnight Mass – toolie


75) People Watching

“Her!” Cheryl indicated a brunette at the bar. It was their game. Taking turns, they created mini stories for the person picked.

“She was wearing leather, lingerie and a look that said we would fuck frantically till morning.” James said confidently.

“That sounds a bit naughty for Dick Tracy.” Cheryl giggled. “Besides,” she continued lowering her voice and leaning forward, “you have no idea what’s underneath that outfit. Whereas I have no panties on under this dress…” She ran one hand slowly up his leg as she spoke. Cupping his arousal, she bit her lip. “And I am wearing the suspenders and stockings you like,” she ginned wickedly, removing her hand and slowly sitting back in her seat. “Want to pick one for me, or?”

Round 1 entry: 11. Reunion – Peter Apps


76) Longing

Your plan was to meet at the coffee shop and pretend we are strangers. We arrived separately and chose seats far enough apart that we seemed unknown to each other, but we were in each other’s view. Unknown to others was the mini vibrator I had placed in my cunt and the app on your phone that controlled it.

Lingering looks across the crowded room have me longing for you, lusting for you, licking my lips at the mere thought of you. I sat as instructed only allowed to focus on vibrations you sent to me. Charged with hiding the reactions my body was having to the sensations you sent through the wireless connection. A challenge I enjoyed with every tremor.

Round 1 entry: 4. Longing – Floss Liddell


77) Exquisite Torture

Under starry skies, she cinches my wrists with satin sashes, then slowly slides ice across my slick skin, as cicadas sing sultry summer songs. My breathing grew shallow and I arched for more. I could already feel the orgasm gathering at my center. She put the rest of the ice cube in her mouth, and bent to kiss me. I could taste the salt of my arousal on her tongue and my pulse grew wilder. I pulled at the sashes. She just smiled and spread my legs. She slid over me and rubbed against me. She moved slow at first and I could feel the velvet softness of her center. The cicada music faded and all I could hear was the beating of my heart.

Round 1 entry: 92. Summer Sin – OwenLars66


78) An Unexpected Dinner Guest

Samuel usually arrived home first to prepare dinner for Meredith. When he pulled in the driveway, their bedroom window was lit.

Tonight would not be a usual night.

Samuel headed for their bedroom. He stood in the open doorway, wordless, eyes wide with wonder, watching his wife fuck the man at the centre of his own forbidden fantasies. Malcolm, his best friend, sucked Meredith’s pert nipple; she stroked his chest. Samuel didn’t move. He knew exactly what Malcolm was experiencing: her heady scent, the slickness soaking him, the muscles gripping his cock, full breasts swinging.

Surely a husband should be outraged. Taking in the sight of Malcolm holding Meredith’s hips and thrusting deep into her core, he was transfixed. Hungry.

He cleared his throat.

Round 1 entry: 34. Fantasies – Stella Kiink


79) A New Life

My cock throbbed so hard it hurt as I laid there. I heard her moving around the bathroom, but it was her perfume lingering on the sheets that got me remembering that first time. It was years ago, both of us clumsy. Unsure in the movements, perhaps, but not in the emotion.

Tonight we were officially empty-nesters. We’d dropped Maddy off at State, had dinner, and then come home to a life and house of just two. Cuddling on the bed, she grinned and straddled me for a kiss, then demanded I get naked and wait for her.

What could I do? I waited.

The light clicked on.

She was wearing leather, lingerie and a look that said we would fuck frantically till morning.

Round 1 entry: 11. Reunion – Peter Apps


80) Sloppy Seconds

Martin’s hands wrapped tight around her wrists, warmth flooding her fleshy folds as the tip of his tongue teased, tempted, tore her open.

“Guess first,” Sabrina purred then clenched her Kegels tight.

Martin reluctantly looked up from between her cunt.

“Fariq?”

Sabrina beamed, pleased that he knew his sales team was her favorite supply of providers.

He gripped her wrists tighter. “Now please…

She didn’t relent. Smirked.

“He hadn’t cum in a week.”

Martin paused, eyes widened. “Where?”

“His car.”

“And you rushed straight here?”

She nodded.

“Show me! Please.

Sabrina relaxed her pelvis and bore down from her belly so that Fariq’s contribution could saturate her labia.

“It’s been ten minutes, Martin,” she winked. “Have at it before it’s all gone.”

Round 1 entry: 105. Lunch Break – Kristine Lynn


81) Life itself

The Scarlet Sanctuary is set.

In soft light, Angela’s naked body lies draped by a red satin cloth. In time with her breath, the priestess waves hands above her, drawing energy from her sacrum upward toward her breasts. She feels that energy surge as the attendant slides his hands up her bare legs.

The priestess holds Angela’s head and slowly squeezes her neck. The candles flicker in rhythm with the probing of the attendant’s tongue. Angela’s attention fades into the warm chanting music and the mystical combination of hands upon her.

Spheres of sweat sliver seductively down her serpentine spine, as she single-mindedly slides her saturated sex toward soul satisfying salvation.

Round 1 entry: 54. On Top – Annabel Lee


82) Jacob’s Fantasy

He stood in the open doorway, wordless, eyes wide with wonder, watching his wife fuck the man at the centre of his own forbidden fantasies. Their bodies writhed, entwined; Jacob swallowed hard. His cock swelled, aching. He watched in fascination as Cate’s legs grasped Milo’s hips; as Milo thrust, pumping into her rhythmically. The sight of his long, lean muscles, the sound of their sighs and moans…

He looked away. He wanted nothing more than to kneel behind them, to spread Milo’s asscheeks open and to plunge himself deep inside, to bury himself in that tight ass he’d fantasized about for so long —

“Jacob.”

Startled, he lifted his eyes to see them both staring at him. Cate smiled, beckoned. “Join us.”

Round 1 entry: 34. Fantasies – Stella Kiink


83) Best Friends Forever

It was Phoebe’s first boyfriend who had awoken feelings in her she hadn’t understood, they’d been too young to do more than kiss, but she still remembered the time she’d accidentally brushed his hardness through his shorts, how much she’d wanted to slide her hand inside, but never did.

Phoebe knew she loved Phyllis, but as their wedding day drew closer she’d found herself fantasising about Philip, still her closest friend and only boyfriend.

Confessing to Phyllis of her fantasy, then explaining to Philip his role in their wedding plans had been a very good decision, and so it as was that Phoebe and Phyllis spent their final night as fiancées on their knees before Philip fulfilling their fantasy of fellatio for the first time.

Round 1 entry: 67. First Felatio – Jade Greene


84) Slow Seduction

Your back pressed to the bedroom wall, I slid my knee between your legs spreading your thighs. Your delicate wrists wrapped roughly in my grasp, as I contemplate exactly where my slow seduction of your senses will begin.

I nibbled your earlobe, before my tongue traveled down your neck. Listening to moans of pleasure; my cock became insistent on breaking free from my jeans. I pressed my thigh hard against your pussy. You gyrated your hips into my leg as I squeezed your perfect breasts. Your nipples harden, reacting to my mischievous pinch.

I relinquished my grip on your wrists, allowing you to glide your fingertips down my abdomen to open my zipper. You dropped to your knees and provided me with my precious release.

Round 1 entry: 7. Anticipation – Dirty Romantic


85) Pheromone Fete

The eve brought a damp darkness that restrained her thoughts.

She was determined to fulfill her fantasy however and ignoring these mind twists she hurriedly proceeded. Droplets of fragrant sweat swelled from beneath her breasts onto the edge of her panties. At the arranged meetingpoint, her moisture mixed with the airy mist, releasing an odoriferous slipstream.

She stood on the station platform when a stranger stepped into her space, shivering slightly at the scent of their sensual aroma.

When he reached out his hand it seemed as if he cleaved the evenings gloom.

Slowly looking up, she lingered at his crotch, which was bulging out and tightly stretched by the pheromones that filled the atmosphere.

She took a deep breath and touched his inviting fingertips.

Round 1 entry: 24. Seeking Sex – GaynorBlue


86) A Good Girl

Take me, her eyes beg him silently, Use me.

His eyebrow quirks in amusement before he smooths out his expression. He makes a slight gesture with his hand and she immediately lays herself across his lap.

“Count every stroke, baby girl,” He commands. He runs his hand over her ass before bringing it back.

SMACK! “One,” she gasps, pleasure coursing through her. He smirks and continues.

The sound of slapping mingles with her voice, soft, shaking, sighing – she counts each strike in a pleasure infused whisper.

Her pleasure builds with every stroke until, finally, he aims for the crux of her thighs. She comes apart, letting out a wordless shout before falling boneless into his waiting arms. He brushes her hair back gently.

“Good girl.”

Round 1 entry: 43. The Spanking – Chloe Sheila


87) Blind Anticipation

I’ve bound you, suspended from the beam above, knots supporting you. Not enough for comfort. Just enough to keep you from harm. You’re drawn out, stretched, taught, senses straining. I’ve been deliberate, taking my time, first blindfolding, then securing you, whispering, hinting, teasing, touching, making you needful and wet. I turned the lights off some time ago, opened the door, shut it, allowed you to think I’d left. Unbeknownst, I’ve been here, listening to your whimpers around the gag. I saunter slowly before you, grabbing hold. Delicate wrists wrapped roughly in my grasp, as I contemplate exactly where my slow seduction of your senses will begin. You gasp and I growl. I press against you, hard, eager against your swollen, saturated sex.

Round 1 entry: 7. Anticipation – Dirty Romantic


30 Replies to “Smut Marathon 2020: Second voting round

  1. 4 The Reverent ~ This story caught my attention. I’m not easily impressed. Subtle use of smut. You’ve got my vote.
    51 Memories of You ~ A joy to read. Voted!
    56 Leap of Faith ~ Nice story and perfect use of the alliteration sentence.
    59 A Simple Solution ~ Thank you for using my round 1 entry sentence. It wasn’t simple to construct at the time. So many stories so little points. Sorry for not giving you one this round. Maybe next time.
    62 A Carnal Conundrum ~ Thank you for using my round 1 entry sentence. I’m delighted with the result. You’ve transformed it into a fabulous story. Sending a point.
    67 In Harmony ~ Beautiful. Wish I was there. Except for the squeaky bed. Point given.
    79 A New Life ~ Enticing story. If only there were 6 points to give…

  2. 17) Really nice use of imagery, especially the metaphor on the last line.
    25) The way texture played a role in the story was perfect. Masturbation is about touch, and sensations should be the centre of any story about it
    26) Loved this one – from the densely description to the way the setting gradually unfolded, a perfect use of the very limited words
    32) Intriguing premise – it was just a shame that the very short word count meant there wasn’t space for it to fully unfold, but it could have been the start of a great story
    48) I was surprised how much this story was able to develop the relationship between the two dancers. Great character work for a story without dialogue
    69) A unique premise, but I loved the transhuman approach even if it meant I didn’t quite follow what was happening

  3. Things I felt were important going into this round:
    – We’re using someone else’s words, so the rest of the story ought to be written in a similar style/tone to those words so the borrowed sentence doesn’t stand out.
    – It can be difficult to establish erotic sexual tension in so few words because the writer doesn’t have much scope to put a scene in context and the reader has little opportunity to connect with the characters. The entries I like will probably use stereotypes or anonymous characters defined by their actions and place those characters in familiar situations. In other words, they’ll be mundane. The ones I vote for are likely to be mundane with style.

    Entries that didn’t make my longlist:

    The first round sentence didn’t fit the rest of the story: 8, 22 (different tenses), 33, 50, 66, 87 (surely his planned slow seduction of her senses actually began some time ago?)

    I didn’t connect to the characters or I wasn’t ‘in’ the scene: 5, 6, 10, 27, 31 (too many run-on sentences), 37 (seems too swift a transformation), 41 (it gave me context I didn’t need but which also didn’t explain her transformation), 44 (the story adds context to the sentence but doesn’t add eroticism), 54 (this story needed context), 64 (this needed serious editing: too many typos, and consecutive sentences end with “deep in her throat”), 68

    Purely subjectively, I didn’t find it erotic: 4, 7, 16 (I laughed though), 17 (wonderful writing but I feel like it needed another 125 words to develop), 19 (too coy), 20 (too much character and context), 24 (lost me with the tear at the end), 25, 30 (but I want to read tomorrow’s story), 38, 39 (yikes), 40, 42, 43 (well-written, but anyone who used Fisted was going to struggle for a vote from me), 45 (yikes, more death), 46 (yikes, more horror), 48, 53, 55 (but the story made me smile), 60, 61, 63, 65 (all beach scenes make me think of sand in unfortunate places), 69 (probably good sci-fi though), 71 (like Fisted, anyone using Lunch Break was unlikely to capture my vote), 73, 74 (but I smiled), 76 (it might have worked for me if the set-up had been shortened and the challenge expanded), 79, 80, 81, 85

    Entries I longlisted but didn’t vote for, often for irritatingly trivial reasons:

    1. I liked this one but I got thrown out of my immersion by his stubble apparently being against her inner thighs while his tongue was in her navel. That’s possible, but probably not in a hammock.

    3. I liked the way the last sentence echoes the alliteration of the first, but the rest of the story didn’t fit so well.

    9. The three words of helpless, ecstatic dialogue—and the entire second paragraph—could have been better used to expand on context and character.

    12. I love the writing in this—it’s poetic and enticing—but the story doesn’t have room to develop into anything erotic.

    13, 15. These ticked all my boxes except style, sadly. I like the urgent action in both, but 13 could have used fewer adverbs and commas and 15 had a strange mix of crude (cock, ass) and coy (center, heat) that had me aching for a ‘cunt’.

    18. There’s too much scene setting and not enough action, but the phrase “tanned, weathered hand” is particularly mellifluous.

    21. I liked it up until the last line, which gave me context I didn’t need or expect, pulling me out of the scenario (and now I want the second paragraph to have been about an Oscar statuette).

    23. There’s too much repetition of words (always, pain, pleasure, sharp) in such a short piece.

    26. It’s a good opening but I wanted more smut.

    28. I want to read more. This would have been a vote but for “She flushed scarlet cheeks…” which is an awkward phrase.

    29. I so wanted to vote for this, but there’s a tense clash between “I can lie” and “feather” which bugs me.

    32. I love the scenario, I love the writing, I love the tension and promise, but I do not love the word ‘reeking’. It isn’t a sexy word in this context.

    34. It’s a great scene, but I couldn’t reconcile the hectic cafe with Celine’s cubicle, that sees no foot traffic and has a perfect view of the door.

    36. Hot. My only complaint was that I wanted her to have done something after the first ‘not yet’ to justify the second.

    47. I love the idea of using older characters, but this story might have benefitted from spending less of its words on how time had touched them and more on how they touched each other.

    49 Nicely done, and explicit consent is good. But the inherent conflict between prima nocta and consent is confusing without more context: I don’t know enough about Drax to know why she consented.

    51. There’s nothing wrong with this one, there were just four I liked more.

    52. This is hot, but I felt like the first sentence belonged in the middle of the story, and I didn’t understand the parents reference.

    56. I love her, and her strength—her “Yes,” is perfect—and the sexual tension developed in the story, but I couldn’t picture the scene: I didn’t know what she was silhouetted against or why she was stepping into, not out of, the darkness.

    58. I loved the scenario, especially the ending, and it’s a complete story which was rare in this round. I can’t easily say what was lacking or why it didn’t get my vote. It might be the unnecessary repition of the rain, or the idea of the narrator turning in their seat to stare at the couple in the back.

    59. Well done for using that sentence, and you made it work as part of a story, but the story doesn’t work for me.

    62. This gained points for so effectively integrating the style of the borrowed sentence, then lost them again because of the style of the borrowed sentence. There was too much alliteration in an otherwise amusing story.

    67. This is lovely writing, but it isn’t erotica. Any one or two of these lines might have set the scene for some action.

    70. This had the potential to be hot. I connected with the characters and the scenario, but it suffered from unsatisfying word choices: ‘laving’ and ‘gusset’ don’t work for me, and ‘sexually-charged’ seemed wrong for a situation where cunnilingus is already taking place.

    72. If this was the Romance Marathon, this story might have got a vote. I needed more smut.

    75. The borrowed sentence fits in terms of style, but the way it’s included feels forced, especially as the characters immediately abandon the game.

    77. Hot—I loved “taste the salt of my arousal” in particular—but it felt like a glimpse into a scene rather than a story.

    78. I wanted to like this one but it was let down by pacing: the nipple/chest sentence seemed unnecessary, particularly when so closely followed by the much hotter description of what Malcolm was experiencing, which I felt was where Samuel’s attention would be.

    82. This didn’t quite do it for me, but I’m glad someone gets to fuck the man at the centre of their own forbidden fantasy.

    83. Clever incorporation of the borrowed sentence, but not smutty enough for me (and I wasn’t sure how it became Phyllis’ fantasy too).

    84. I like the writing, though it was a little coy, but I didn’t know what the italics were for.

    86. A good description of a spanking but not quite a story.

    Votes:

    2. Clearly a writer of exquisite taste and discernment, who chose my sentence and expanded on the sort of scenario it implied. It lets the action show the reader who the narrator is, and as a result it’s almost nothing but sexual tension with just enough context to make that tension work.

    11. I wanted to use Kimono in a story, but I couldn’t get it right. This does. There’s all sorts of interesting context both stated and implied, and I want to read more about these characters.

    14. Almost perfect. I have no idea who the characters are or why they’re there, but that doesn’t matter because this is a recognisable scenario where both author and reader are free to focus on the action, which is described in ways that create sensuous connections.

    35. I wrote this. Then I had to take 25 words out of it because I misremembered the requirements while I was writing. It’s not as good as some I longlisted and didn’t vote for, and I shall savour my guilt about that.

    57. Rang all my bells. I don’t know who the characters are but I recognise them, their relationship, the situation… The author spent all their limited words on creating eroticism, and it worked.

  4. This was a massive step up from Round 1, some impressive work here. As ever my main criterion for judging is sexiness (although without linguistic prowess and originality, there is no sexiness IMHO), so with that in mind…

    GETTING MY VOTES:

    7) INCHES OF INK

    This utilised one of my favourite stories from Round 1, so had a head start (although a few entries in this round managed to squander excellent source material). I just love the building on the tone set by the original author, and the new and unexpected places this story goes. Fantastic imagery as well, exemplified in the unsheathing foreskin and the crown of the clenched fist, which also doubles as *delicious* wordplay. Top marks.

    56) LEAP OF FAITH

    Again, seems my one true kink is puns. That aside, this story beautifully integrates the source sentence from Round 1, something that caused several entries in this round to founder, and conjures up an amazingly evocative scenario in an incredibly short space of time. Faith’s trepidation is palpable, as is our bookish angel’s turmoil, and ultimate submission to his own wanton desires. And again, of course, deliriously sexy.

    73) FROM ACROSS THE ROOM

    A stealth winner for me. That final button drew everything together so perfectly I could not but give this story my vote. This dynamic is pure #RelationshipGoals. So unforced, so tender, so clearly at ease in one another’s company and so delightfully playful. I want to spend hours – if not days – in their company, and giggle and stroke along to all their lazy, kinky adventures. If they’ll have me, of course…

    80) SLOPPY SECONDS

    Oh how filthy. This probably made me wetter than all the other stories in this round combined. Maximum kinkiness delivered with maximum economy. It feels as though the story is in just as much of a hurry as Martin to receive his coveted prize, and Sabrina’s unalloyed delight is a treat throughout. Looking forward to seeing what depraved places this writer takes us in future rounds. And so, on to…

    THE REST OF THE SHORTLIST:

    20) THE FIRST NIGHT

    A tantalising glimpse into a wonderful dynamic. I love this sub’s devotion to her Master, it makes my heart swell.

    36) BOUND FLOWER

    Oh to be this lucky submissive, so thoroughly trussed up and tormented, plight realised so lovingly in such pretty words…

    76) LONGING

    Such a gorgeous scenario, spicy and tinged with danger, and yet so fun! Would love to try this one in real life.

    86) A GOOD GIRL

    Chuck those words at me and you don’t need to do very much more, but oh my goodness you did, and I thank you.

    AND THE ONES THAT NEEDED WORK:

    I felt 41) BLOWING THE ORGAN and 74) MOTHER SUPERIOR’S BIG DAY shot themselves in the foot by choosing one of the least sexy entries from Round 1. They could have recovered from this, but somehow they managed to make the source sentence the MOST sexy part of both the resultant stories (the words ‘teeth’, ‘scraped’ and ‘cock’ should never appear in a sentence together, even in the most hardcore CBT smut). It really does bear repeating that these stories should have a base level of erotic appeal, and on that subject, 62) A CARNAL CONUNDRUM eschewed arousal in favour of a doubling down on what undid so many stories in Round 1: excessive alliteration. Given this was something so many writers were roundly (and rightly) chastised for then, it’s a tad perplexing to see it make a comeback in this round. And finally, 69) EX MACHINA: a pleasant enough stroll through the mellifluous verbiage of the author’s mind, but loquaciousness does not equal sexiness, and it’s nigh-on impossible to become aroused when the reader can’t work out what’s going on. The fact that this piece was randomly assigned the number 69 only makes me feel more cheated, somehow.

    As ever, I hope this feedback’s useful. Can’t wait to see the results, and bring on Round 3!

  5. Selected story feedback:

    2 Used the original sentence seamlessly. Like how you incorporated multiple senses.
    3. “Within moments she whelps in pain.” I had to look up “whelps” to make sure there wasn’t another meaning. Downgraded a bit for bad usage.
    7. I had a horrible fascination with this story. Well told.
    8. Love the “occupied themselves” line.
    10. Highly sexy, well done.
    16. I love a comeuppance!
    21. Laughed at this one!
    22. Two great tastes in one story!
    35 This was an exquisite glimpse of a glimpse.
    41. I couldn’t wait for some backstory on this Rd1 sentence! Well done.
    59. I was looking forward to seeing if someone used this sentence!
    62. Loved this.
    70. Extra points for the title. Loved that movie!
    74. I couldn’t wait for some backstory on this Rd1 sentence! Well done.

  6. Again, I apologize for the VERY lengthy comment, but I feel every writer deserves some feedback.

    It’s hard, but not impossible, to write a complete story in 100 words. That’s the challenge with this round. So many of the entries were more what I’d call a “scene”–a moment in time with little or no connection to any plot. It also means little tension or character development. Without those things, there is no story, and I have a hard time connecting in that case. Scenes, unless extremely unique or emotionally riveting, are less impactful than stories, and as the assignment was to write a story (which requires exposition, rising action, conflict, a climax, and a resolution – or hinting at such), I easily disqualified entries that did not measure up to these plot demands. When the word limit is tight, certain elements of plot can be hinted at rather than described in detail. But, I feel that one cannot skimp on character development or tension. If there is no sense of conflict, there is no realy story. Sometimes humor can fill in for tension, if done well. I would suggest checking out examples of “flash fiction” to see how extremely short stories can be successfully written.
    1)The Guilt Trip
    –Dialogue makes for a strong beginning, throwing the reader directly into the story.
    –I would have liked some promise of a story outside of the scene.
    2)The Rival *
    –No wasted words here…each one really seems to count and each one is well-chosen. Craft and style are high in this entry. In such a small space, this piece manages to create tension.
    –I’m just a bit confused about the rivalry, but with such a small word count there wasn’t much room to expand.
    3)Wicked Wishes
    –Good use of dialogue.
    –There is little real story here…nothing much to set it apart from the others.
    4)The Reverent *
    –Lovely style and word choice – sentences are crafted carefully. The internal tension is there, and the character is clear.
    5)The Long Wait
    –This piece tries to cram to much action and passing of time into one small space. It would be stronger to focus on just one part of the story and allow a hint at the rest, rather than to cover so much ground in just a few short paragraphs. I’m left feeling unsatisfied. I don’t get to really feel anything about the characters, and there is no tension.
    6)Keeping Warm
    –It’s well-written, and I do get a sense of some story…a bit or the dynamic between the two characters.
    7)Inches of Ink
    –I want to love this one. The idea is creative, but the whole thing felt rushed.
    8)What They Don’t Know
    –I’m confused. They? The men? And then suddenly there is a Her? With a van? I’m not sure what is going on here. I need more back story.
    9)Surrounded by Friends
    –This is certainly erotic, but I don’t get much sense of the characters or any real story.
    10)Double Trouble
    –Some hot description, but another scene that gives me very little insight into the characters or any real story.
    11)His Master’s Wife *
    –Well-written and gets at the heart of the tension and character motivation quickly. While this is only a scene, it hints at the story outside of this paragraph — the desire for his master’s wife.
    12)Midsummer Mantle
    –Very poetic. The clipped sentences at the beginning, blend into longer more descriptive ones. Description is this author’s strength. I still really dislike that phrase… “a blessing of suck and fuck,” and I don’t think it fits with the rest of this writer’s voice.
    13)Behind Closed Doors
    –Sexy description…but just a scene – nothing more than a hot hotel encounter – nothing to make this memorable. No surprise or unexpected twist. I get no sense of character here. Who are these people and why should I care about them?
    14)To Ask Consent
    –Another that is very poetic. The language is beautiful and the sentence structure is complex. I like that, but there is still little in the way of character development or plot.
    15)Obedient Screams
    –Hot…but no story. I get no sense of the characters, nothing to remember.
    16)Sleight of Hand **
    –Ha Ha! This one made me laugh! I like how this writer kept with the overabundance of alliteration. It added to the humor. There is character motivation, and the plot twist at the end definitely makes this one memorable.
    17)A Nocturne *
    –This is beautifully written. There is a sense of character, and though I’d like more story, I do get a feeling of something happening outside of this scene.
    18)Scent into Heat
    –Well-written. I get a sense of the narrator’s character, though not much of a story beyond this scene.
    19)Moonlit Lovers
    –The sentence structure could use some work, as the majority of the sentences begin with pronouns or articles. It lends the piece a monotonous rhythm.
    20)The First Night *
    –It’s well-written, but there isn’t anything particularly memorable here.
    21)Academy Award Winning Performance
    I’m assuming there is a remote-controlled vibrator at play here, but it isn’t clear. And what is the point of the Oscar Nomination? I’m confused. I can see this is an attempt at a twist or surprise ending, but it left me with more questions than answers.
    22)Mating Rituals *
    –I like the premise here…the character motivation and the character development. There is also a well-employed line of humor and a lovely ending. I am bothered by the shift in verb tense – “She she shivered slightly…” when the rest of the piece is in present tense. But, this is still a good story. Great title, too.
    23)Her Guilty Pleasure
    –Just a scene. I do like the momentum that intentional fragments can create, and if this were simply a paragraph within a larger piece, I’d call this good writing. As it stands, there is nothing that stands out about this piece, no conflict or tension, nothing about the characters for me to grab hold of.
    24)Carnal Catharsis *
    –The initial sentence that this is built around already had the necessary tension and character development needed to catapult it into a story. I like how this writer expanded on the scene. I’m not sure if that tear is caused by intensity or guilt. But this does motivate me to wonder, and that is a good thing.
    25)25 Momme Count
    –There is an overabundance of the pronoun “I” in this piece. And there is no story. It does not instill in me any sense of emotional connection to the “narrator.”
    26)Midnight at the Bluenote
    –This piece paints a good picture, building the scene/setting, but there is no plot or indication of any story outside of the moment described.
    27)More than Friends
    –This one moved too quickly, spanning too much time in too little space. It tries to cover too much ground.
    28)First Lesson
    The title is good. It hints at a next lesson, which means there is more to be told. It’s well-written, but I don’t find it particularly moving or unique.
    29)What Do You Want?
    –This one attempts, somewhat successfully, to create character, but I’m left wondering, who is she talking to? Is there another person here, and hence some tension to be built? Or is this simply a monologue?
    30)Following Instructions
    –This entry does impose some tension into the story. But, I feel like there could be more character development. There is promise of a story outside the piece…another night, so the writer has taken care to couch the scene inside the possibility of a larger narrative.
    31)Beneath His Gaze
    –A hot description, but there is no story here.
    32)Viva Voce ***
    –I do like this one! It is immediately a story – the setting detailed efficiently, and the characters’ roles created quickly, mainly through dialogue. I like the promise of the story to follow, even though the Professor seems a rather unwelcome pursuer.
    33)Kei Conquered
    –I can see the seed of a story beginning to grow, but the dialogue is off a bit and doesn’t blend stylistically with the narrative. Maybe it is intentional, to make the Madame seem crass? There is tension here, as well.
    34)A Dark Little Corner
    –This one paints the setting and develops the conflict well, though I am left wondering, is this man aware of her lust for him? Is she just “another conquest.” I have a lot of questions.
    35)The Lesson *
    –I like how this one sets the scene and builds the tension, but I’m wondering about the ending. How is this prophecy? I get a sense that he is understanding his wife might want this, but there isn’t enough for me to be sure.
    36)Bound Flower *
    –This is well-written and builds at a steady pace. The dialogue is also good. I’d love more character development and more of a plot (or hinting at one).
    37)So Greedy
    –The description of the scene is good. Anticipation is built slowly. It felt a little anticlimactic that she just settled in a gave up to her desires. There wasn’t anything else to be done, no promise of more to the story. Nothing memorable.
    38)Bound to Secrecy
    –Nothing memorable here, either. Just another forgettable description without character development or plot outside of the sex scene. This writer did do a good job of blending the borrowed sentence, though. It fit perfect, like a puzzle piece.
    39)Predator and Prey *
    –Hmmm…I get the distinct sense of something supernatural at play here. And I like the idea of the prey being the predator. I’m iffy on the 2nd person narrator…it does create a more active and feeling of audience involvement.
    40)Lead the Way *
    –This pretty simply and effectively sets up the premise of a story, rich with anticipation. I like the connection between the two characters, and the reassurance of the repeated inquiry. That also gives it a sense of completion, the dialogue a set of bookends to the exposition of a story that could be continued in a second part. Nice job. I found this one very satisfying, stylistically.
    41)Blowing the Organ *
    –While I’m not in love with this (the female character is a bit cliche and the intro a bit clumsy), I do love how beautifully this writer blended their story with the original sentence, providing it the backstory it so desperately needed. Plus, the humor is enticing.
    42)Parting, Such Sweet Sorrow
    –There isn’t much to remember here. It’s written well enough, but there is nothing to set it apart, no unique element in character or plot or conflict that draws me to it and won’t let me free from it.
    43)Forever Fisted
    –I like the subtlety in description for a very unsubtle moment.
    44)Winner Takes All *
    –Good blending of the original sentence. It provides a backstory, though I wish there were a bit more to grab me in style or narrative.
    45)The Sacrifice ***
    –Well, shit. There’s a good momentum here that leads us to that powerful finish. I’m just not sure it would be a bedframe he’d be tied to, would it? This definitely has the primal feel I bet this author was going for.
    46)Wet Cunt, Whetted Cunt
    –While there’s no question that this writer has style and craft down, I’m confused by the interaction between the characters. How did Kirnan get in front of the bus, is he a supernatural creature, and why is it a question of whether Blair will let him back in? Too many question….
    47)Time and Familiarity
    –It’s a sweet scene, and I do get a sense of time and character, but it is still just a scene.
    48)Peep Show
    –How do you slip a dress up and down your arms? It’s an interesting premise, but I crave more character development.
    49)Prima Nocta **
    –There is promise of a story to come, dialogue, and tension. I had to look up “prima nocta,” but once I did, it made the story much more rich (obviously) and gave it complexity and depth.
    50)Nerves and Anonymity
    –This one does have a bit of tension, but a few awkward sentences killed it for me (He sounded very almost too much/…the hardness he’d described her fantasies as having caused him). And the final sentence, while alliterative, is simply not powerful enough to be memorable.
    51)Memories of You
    –Who wouldn’t remember that? However, the story itself is not enough to stack up against the competition. No twist or humor or striking characters. Just a quick retelling of a wanton moment.
    52)Shameless Chaperones **
    –I love when a writer uses the title as an integral part of the story. It actually explains the conflict of the story…the thing that creates the tension. I did like this one, as I could imagine the action in my mind’s eye, and also because it made me giggle rather gleefully at their naughty escapade.
    53)Easy Come *
    –This writer does a nice job with character development. I get a pretty good sense of Connie. I also appreciated the continued alliteration throughout the piece; it made it blend well with the original sentence.
    54)The Widow
    –This one does a decent job of creating a premise – the connection between the characters and a motivation for Garret’s actions. But it was a little melodramatic.
    55)Virtuous Reward
    It’s a decent set up to a story. I get a sense of the characters and the premise for their interaction.
    56)Leap of Faith
    –I have a lot of questions, and I am quite distracted by the verb tense shifting.
    57)Waiting for Permission *
    –Good word choice, description, and dialogue. But there isn’t much that is unique or memorable.
    58)Night Bus to Pleasure **
    Well…that would be disappointing. I like the ending.
    59)A Simple Solution
    This successfully gives context to the original sentence.
    60)Tender Longing *
    –There is a sense of conflict, as the character is unsure if Lana realizes her lust for her.
    61)Waiting For…
    –The last line leaves the reading with a wondering anticipation.
    62)A Carnal Conundrum *
    –I’m not sure if this writer takes it too far, or if I love it. I’m strangely perplexed.
    63)Dante’s Club
    –This piece tries to create a sense of story with the reminiscence, but I’m not positive I understand the lighting issue.
    64)Her Pain, Their Pleasure
    –I get no sense of character development or story. This appears to simply be sex for sex’s sake.
    65)Tahitian Shores
    –A well-written scene, the original sentence blended perfectly, but there is no plot here and no character development.
    66)No Longer Hidden
    –Same as 65…well-written, well-blended, but no plot. I think there is a bit of character development, at least of the narrator, but otherwise…nothing to build on.
    67)In Harmony
    –This felt more like a poem…beautiful phrases that abstractly describe a setting and scene.
    68)Succumb to Seduction
    –The staccato sentence structure (short, starting with pronouns, subject/verb construction) felt repetitive. There is no emotion here.
    69)Ex Machina
    –The language here is rich, but I’m not positive I really understand what is going on.
    70)Office Space
    –This one has potential, as I see an obvious dynamic and character motivation. But, I don’t get a real sense of plot/story, outside of this closet.
    71)Amy’s Board Room Reward
    –I get a sense of the connection between these characters, and a bit of plot set-up…but what did she do to be rewarded?
    72)Starlit Surrender *
    –it’s a beautiful piece of writing and blends well with the original sentence’s style. I crave more of a story from this scene, though. This is merely a moment, and there is no hint at a greater plot outside of it.
    73)From Across the Room *
    –A romantic, sexy moment. The characters’ connection is apparent, and I like the repeated dialogue used as bookends on either side of scene.
    74)Mother Superior’s Big Day ***
    –Funny! I am a fan of puns, and this one uses the device perfectly!
    75)People Watching
    –There is potential here. This writer uses dialogue well, but I’m left wanting for a more satisfying ending.
    76)Longing
    –Verb tense is a problem here. I get no real sense of the characters and little emotion in the words. This piece doesn’t make me feel anything.
    77)Exquisite Torture
    –This particular original sentence seems to have encouraged a very similar response from many writers. This one, like the others, is a beautiful scene, but there is no plot…no character development. And the last line is a little sentimental. Watch out for too many sentences beginning with “She” or a like pronoun. Vary the sentence structure a bit.
    78)An Unexpected Dinner Guest ***
    –I love how this ends on the precipice of tension! This entry has a perfect sense of timing and builds to a crescendo.
    79)A New Life
    –This one tries hard at creating a story, but there isn’t enough emotion infused in the words. It comes across as a little empty, considering the intensity of the situation.
    80)Sloppy Seconds ***
    –Oh my! I did not see that ending coming! (Ha Ha…see what I did there?) This is a brilliant (and unique) use of the original sentence). I don’t love the title, but I can look past that.
    81)Life Itself
    –I’m not sure I even really know what is going on here…or why. I get no real sense of context for the events or the characters.
    82)Jacob’s Fantasy
    –Not bad. It doesn’t use the sentence quite to the level that other writer’s have, but it sets the scene and explains the connection between the characters. The ending just isn’t as gratifying as say…78.
    83)Best Friends Forever
    –This feels more like a retelling of a story, rather than the story itself…quick, direct, too the point, and devoid of detail and emotion.
    84)Slow Seduction
    –The pronoun You is overused. There is no real plot here, just a sexy scene.
    85)Pheromone Fete *
    –I have many questions about this one. Who is she meeting…why? The phrase “as if he cleaved the evening’s gloom” give the scene an essence of foreboding, which seem s out of place against the rest of the description. I do like the possibility and expectation in the final line.
    86)A Good Girl
    –A lovely description, but I don’t find it particularly unique, nor is it really much of a story.
    87)Blind Anticipation
    –The title is good…as this does create a feeling of anticipation.

    Overall, there were many very good entries here. The writing itself was good, pretty much all around. The thing that sets apart the excellent from the good, however, is craft. Those entries with true elements of plot, good use of dialogue, humor, and/or real stories that made me feel something were the ones that rose to the top. My very final decisions were for those stories that packed a punch in some way and were hard to forget. They were well-written AND had a certain, simple, artistic flair. They were more than just scenes, the were nuggets of larger stories, and they expertly hinted at those larger narratives.

    I put a * next to the entries that stood out for me, and a ** next to those that I ended up choosing as my top 9. I put an extra * next my top 5.

    My top 5 are the stories that I knew right away, from first reading, would be in my top choices. They had that certain something that can’t completely be defined. They were tight pieces that hit all the marks for a good piece of erotic flash fiction. They show that it CAN be done, and WELL, in 100-125 words. Look to them as good models for the next round.

  7. First cut (26): 1,7,8,11,18,21,28,29,31,32,33,35,36,38,39,44,48,49,56,57,58,60,67,69,71,80,

    2nd cut (15): 7,8,11,28,31,32,33,35,49,57,58,60,69,80

    Voted for (5): 8,11,28,35,60

    It was very important to me how the writer has used the sentence from Round One. Of course I’m more likely to be favourable to the sentences that I already liked but I have noted a few that use sentences that, alone, were not to my taste.

    Many have not made the first cut because the sentence chosen was already such a complete story that the Round 2 writer struggled to add substantially; the inserted sentence shouldn’t be most striking part of the new story.

    On the other hand, it mattered to me that the original sentence was deftly used and sympathetically developed. One or two attempted to surprise by using the sentence in an unusual or unexpected way but this was rarely successful.

    I developed an aversion to those who began their story with the original sentence; it felt unambitious, avoiding the challenge in dropping it in more discreetly. Some sentences were more suitable to be adapted and discreetly incorporated into new stories and I think the most popular choices – ‘Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine’ (which I was of eight writers choosing…) and ‘Longing – Floss Lidell’ – reflected that.

    One of two have suffered elimination from my first cut by basic errors of punctuation or grammar (a couple of misplaced adjectives creating unintentionally comic images!). And, of course, personal taste has to be part of the equation – I find it hard to be turned on by fantasies that involve blood and death! – and certain words have an amazing power to deflate my arousal!

    Here’s my feedback on the 15 that made my second cut (* indicates those voted for):

    7) INCHES OF INK (Round 1 entry: 30. Fisted – Friedrich Kreuz)
    This story contravened most of my criteria yet still made the cut; it’s a great idea and well-crafted. But, ultimately, I’m admiring it rather than enjoying it and that’s why I didn’t vote for it.

    *8) WHAT THEY DON’T KNOW (Round 1 entry: 11. Reunion – Peter Apps)
    … In contrast to my comments on 7), this I find undeniably erotic! The chosen sentence nestles naturally in the heart of the story and the story elaborates it with style and sexiness.

    *11) HIS MASTER’S WIFE (Round 1 entry: 108. Kimono – Jacques )
    One of the two that selected my own sentence to build their story around so naturally, I’m favourably disposed; not just because I’m flattered by their choosing my stimulus, but because it suggests that our sense of the erotic is aligned, and their treatment of the sentence confirms this. This is very much the sort of scene that I had in mind and it is elegantly described.

    *28) FIRST LESSON (Round 1 entry: 77. Undress – Helen Scott)
    This made the cut, basically, because it did make me want to take her and fuck, hard against the wall! It’s a simple story, plainly told and all the better for that. The chosen sentence doesn’t dictate the story but it flows perfectly from it, so my prejudice against stories starting with the chosen sentence is suspended in this case.

    31) BENEATH HIS GAZE (Round 1 entry: 10. Silk Scarf – S G Bound)
    This story has a lot in common with story 28 – the same simplicity and undeniable erotic tension. A different stimulus sentence but similar in tone (I’m learning a lot about what I find erotic!), and again used as the opening line, again successfully. It doesn’t quite stir me as much as the stories that got my vote; if I had more votes to give, this would get one of them!

    32) VIVA VOCE (Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine )
    My own story. And, though I voted for myself in Round 1, I’m realising here that voting for myself would deprive me of a vote I want to give to another’s story; I’ll have to hope for the approval of others to be enough to see me through to Round 3. But I’m still really pleased with my story and I think it stands up to scrutiny alongside other entries. I worried that Professor Lloyd might be a malodorous turn-off for some; I worried about the words ‘ensconced’ and ‘barked’; I worried that some pedant would observe that a traditional ‘chemise’ doesn’t have buttons! I think my writing will have to go beyond floaty, veiled eroticism – get down to some hard fucking! – if I’m to progress much further in the competition, but I really enjoyed writing this. I hoped that Ivy’s ‘Girl Exposed’ wouldn’t be such an obvious choice to others as it was to me; at the same time, the fact that seven others selected it makes me feel vindicated in my choice!

    33) KEI CONQUERED (Round 1 entry: 108. Kimono – Jacques )
    As with story 11, I loved reading more about my creation, Kei! And, again, I felt the writer totally got the erotic spirit of my sentence and developed it appropriately. I hope I’m not only excluding it from my vote because I don’t want to be seen to be so narcissistic that I vote for both stories that used my sentence; it doesn’t quite push my buttons as hard as some other stories and there are a few quibbles with words and punctuation that slightly detract from it.

    *35) THE LESSON (Round 1 entry: 43. The Spanking – Chloe Sheila)
    This is a well-written and cleverly conceived scenario… and it’s hot! It intrigues me – what exactly is going on in the scene they stumble across (why is the door open?) and how will that tantalising ‘promise of things to come’ be realised? It makes me want more.

    49) PRIMA NOCTA (Round 1 entry: 68. Girl Exposed – Ivy Augustine)
    This was the most memorable story from my first read through of all entries, credit, in part, to an arresting title. I was also impressed by the fact that though we had chosen the same stimulus sentence, our erotic imaginations had taken us to very different destinations. But, on closer reading, I had quibbles: with such a restricted wordcount, should ‘silk chemise’ appear twice?; and the end seems to fall a bit flat, not matching up to the dark eroticism of the lead-up.

    57) WAITING FOR PERMISSION (Round 1 entry: 64. Bound Anticipation – Aoife Pheaca)
    I do love a bit of bound anticipation and this story aroused me. I think some of the word count could have been put to better use – the third paragraph in particular, for me, doesn’t add enough for it’s 17 words. But I’m being picky… I really felt the truth of her ‘Yes, sir’ at the end!

    58) NIGHT BUS TO PLEASURE (Round 1 entry: 21. Teenage Kicks – Hislordship)
    If a measure of the success of a piece of erotic writing is the extent to which it makes you want to enact the scene, this hits the target for me! But I would want to be the voyeur and I’d have liked to be given a stronger sense of my place in this scene.

    *60) TENDER LONGING (Round 1 entry: 92. Summer Sin – OwenLars66 )
    Hot! (Tempted to leave my feedback at that but I’d better elaborate on why I didn’t vote for it despite it turning me on…). The stimulus sentence (92, Summer Sin) was one that struck me as difficult to enlarge on, and others who chose it struggled to add to what was already quite a complete story, for me, but you succeeded. I’d have loved it more if you’d cut ‘I’m still unsure if I’m dreaming as…’ from the beginning of the second sentence and left us it doubt as to whether you were still dreaming. But, mmm, ‘she straddles me, her skirt riding up against my jeans’… I don’t know about her but I could feel the heat of your cunt rising! …And after writing that, I’ve changed my mind – I’m voting for it!

    69) EX MACHINA (Round 1 entry: 75. Surface scratches – Drew Stone )
    Clever, and just on the right side of avoiding being ‘too clever by half’! But the stimulus sentence didn’t, for me, sit comfortably in your story; it felt gratuitous, out of place. But so many rich phrases in your own words – I particularly love ‘Mineral dreams for a primal scream’.

    80) SLOPPY SECONDS (Round 1 entry: 105. Lunch Break – Kristine Lynn )
    Everything about this story ought to make it an obvious ‘no!’ for me… but it made my second cut! What’s going on here?! I hate the phrase and the idea of ‘sloppy seconds’; the stimulus sentence wasn’t one of my favourites (I’m sorry, I just struggle to be turned on by a Martin!) and you used it as the opening of your story… But, dammit, it’s great concept, with believable (if repulsive?) characters and well-written. Like 7 (‘Inches of Ink’), one that ticks the ‘admiration’ box for me more than the ‘arousal’ box.

  8. First I want to say how honoured I am to be among all of you. Everyone should be very proud of themselves, EACH AND EVERY ONE of these was wonderful to read. Some stood out more than others.

    4, 8, 13, 21, 27, 29, 35, 39, and 86. Very hot
    #15 Great description
    #16 Comical ending
    #10 I love reading about a good threesome
    #54 Loved the thought of this in my head
    #65 sounds hot and blissful too

  9. Based on the brief, I decided that the pieces needed to tell a story rather than just a scene. While there are lots of good scenes I felt the brief was asking to tell a story, so my votes went to those I felt told more of a story. I made that decision as I felt it was harder to create a story, a piece of flash fiction rather than a specific scene, and so would be more deserving of a vote.

    The other thing I was looking for was the sentence chosen was effectively worked into the piece rather than just bolted on. Some of the entries felt a little like the sentence was not a core part of the writing.

    Finally, as this was a much harder entry to write and to review, I decided to provide more detail feedback on each entry. To be honest, as there was so much to read this helped me come to my decision. Of course, these are only my opinion, and we know there are all types of tastes, so it is intended positively, but please take it or leave it as you see fit.

    Entries that received my vote;

    2. The Rival – This one works as a little story. And the sentence flows as part of the overall piece. I like the idea of the rival and while it doesn’t tell much of a story, there is that rivalry there. And I liked the way it built the image of the elegant dining room quickly.

    11. His Masters Wife – this is a story and has a wrap around it, with more depth to the characters. This isn’t just a scene, there is more to it. And the sentence just flows in the story.

    39. Predator and Prey – I like the way the sentence (or a word, hunted)has been used to craft the rest of the story. And to come from a very different angle.

    69. Ex Machina – I liked this a lot, it was ethereal and different. And the sentence worked well in the overall piece. It also told a story as part of the overall piece.

    Entries I liked but not quite enough to make the vote;

    1. The Guilt Trip – It was a story, as there was a backstory of sorts. The sentence chosen did fit well in to the story

    4. Reverent – the sentence seemed to be just added to the front and didn’t really link to the rest of the story. But I liked the way the rest was written.

    8. What they don’t know – nice little story and the sentence fitted well.

    10. Double trouble – the sentence was worked in to the story. But it was more of a scene rather than a story.

    12. midsummer Mantle. – Kept with the theme and style of the original sentence. Quite dreamlike. More than just a scene. But not quite a story either. It was one of my final choices as I really liked the pretty prose. But didn’t quite make the cut of being a story.

    16. Sleight of Hand – clever little story wrapped around a difficult sentence. Didn’t really like the last sentence of blue balls but funny.

    17. Nicely written but sentence wasn’t really built in to the moment. Also didn’t explain some of the points, why not love each other?

    19. Moonlit lovers – I liked the way the sentence was fitted to the scene and the style was similar, but it was just a scene.

    23. Guilty pleasures – sentence worked in well, and well written but it was a scene not a story. Not sure the last sentence quite worked, toppling over a brink to an explosion.

    26. Midnight at the blue note – I like the whole image created, not sure the sentence quite worked in to the overall scene.

    30. Following Instructions – the sentence did work, and like the twist in what it meant. Again more of a scene than a story but more there than most.

    31. Beneath his gaze. Liked this one and the sentence was made to be more than just a moment in the scene. But it is a scene rather than a story, but a good scene! One of my final choices. A hard decision as to whether it received a vote but it was still more a scene, than providing a story so I had to let it go.

    32. Viva Voce – liked this, sentence worked in to the overall piece. Not enough story though and more of a scene.

    35. The Lesson – I liked this as it does tell a little story although took me a moment to understand it and had to read it a couple of times. It was one of my final choices, and only just didn’t make the cut for a vote. In the end I think it was more of a scene, but I really enjoyed the whole image it created.

    36. Bound flower – liked the way the rest of the piece reflected the sentence used. But not sure the sentence completely fitted the rest. And more of a scene than a story.

    40. Lead the way – this worked the sentence in properly but didn’t build the story around the sentence, more of a scene.

    47. Time and Familiarity. This one worked as a little story of the relationship between the two and the sentence was worked in to the overall story well. Just not quite enough for me to vote on it, but it was really close and one of my last choices that didn’t make the final cut.

    48. Peep Show – the sentence was well worked in to the overall piece which was well written, but it was a scene rather than a story.

    51. Memories of you – liked the overall flow, the sentence did work, although felt a little out of place. Also more of a scene than a story.

    52. Shameless chaperones – I really liked the cheeky nature of this one and how it tilted the idea on its head from the original sentence and title. However it did feel a little like the sentence didn’t connect with the rest of the piece.

    54. The Widow – this had a story to it, and I liked that. But it was hard to bring that out in the few words available and it didn’t quite flow with the sentence.

    55. Virtuous Reward – the sentence was worked in to the piece well and there was a bit of a story but it lost me on some of the choice of words “gorgeous tits” seemed at odds with the fantasy nature of the piece.

    72. Starlight Surrender – really liked the way this was written and the choice of words, the sentence chosen flowed well. But it was more of a scene than a story. But beautifully written.

    74. Mother Superiors big day – I liked that this had more of a story to it. But the sentence seemed a little crammed in to the piece.

    79. A new life – a good approach to a story and create more than just a scene. And the sentence worked but didn’t quite give enough as to why.

    82. Jacobs Fantasy – it all slots together and ties his desire in with his fantasy but just needed more as to why. But tough to do in so few words.

    Most of the others were more scenes than stories so didn’t quite make my criteria.

  10. I find it really difficult to leave feedback. I am not an authority on good or even correct writing and I can only choose using the subjectivity of my own preference, that is the ones I liked the most. I thought the brief was difficult too, to create a sexy story with only 125 words. I have quite specific tastes when it comes to the erotic or should I say what I find erotic, and as such there were not many that I did find sexy.

    I do think everyone has worked very hard and deserves recognition for that.

  11. WOW, this round was really hard to choose. My long list of stories were:
    6, 8, 10, 15, 18, 26, 29, 31, 35, 36, 42, 51, 52, 65, 71, 78, 80, 82 with a few others I really loved.

    Ultimately, I shortened it to my top 5 which were: 10, 15, 42, 51, 80

    I tried to give some feedback for every story since I was bad and didn’t last time. I hope it’s helpful!

    1. The Guilt Trip
    A few words felt misplaced – wriggled, callous” for example, jolted me out of the action. I love the line “Shut up and kiss it better, asshole.”

    2. The Rival
    I love the language in this one, the scene setting is done perfectly well, weaved between the action. Very impressed with how much story you fit into this short piece.

    3. Wicked Wishes
    The formatting threw me off a little and almost made some of the sentences feel very abrupt. The story is there, but I really wanted to FEEL the desperation of want between the dialogue.

    4. The Reverent
    I really loved the descriptions in this piece and I think the author did a nice job of digging deep into this character in a very short amount of space. I didn’t love “tongues of flame” but I can overlook it because so many other descriptions were superb.

    5. The Long Wait
    I liked how simple this was, while still being erotic. It was different than the other pieces and I quite enjoyed the imagery. Sometimes minimal descriptions are most effective and I think that was the case here.

    6. Keeping Warm
    I love how this is written, a perfect balance of short and descriptive sentences. It oozes desire. I love it.

    7. Inches of Ink
    I like where this was going, but feel like it needs a little tightening up in terms of what’s a past memory, and what’s currently happening in the moment. I had some trouble distinguishing the two.

    8. What they Don’t Know
    Love the surprise twist of this one. I remember reading the line used in this story in our first round and I LOVE how effortlessly the story shapes itself around this one. Nicely done.

    9. Surrounded By Friends
    There’s a lot going on here, as I suppose is typical for orgies, eh? 😉 However, the abundance of actions moving into the second paragraph almost pulled me out of the great action already built in the first.

    10. Double Trouble
    I like how this builds. It happens very quickly as we read, but the way it’s written, makes it feel slow and meaningful. There is just enough action to keep us hungry, but not confused, which can be difficult with three bodies to keep track of.

    11. His Master’s Wife
    This was a little too “flowery” for my taste, but I do really love many of the descriptions – “stirs his lust” just reads so well!

    12. Midsummer Mantle
    I appreciate the sharpness of the erotic descriptors next to very light description of gardens and summertime. It shocked me enough to keep my interest through to the end. Lovely!

    13. Behind Closed Doors
    Good details, but there’s too much telling here for me. I want to really feel what the character is feeling – how does that anticipation feel? Desperation? Give me more!

    14. To Ask Consent
    I really love how the author dove into specific details, but left it to the reader to fill in some of the things in between. I liked how this flow felt as I read it.

    16. Sleight of Hand
    I like that this told a full story, beyond simply a an erotic moment. However, there were a few word choices that struck me as odd – diamond-hard makes sense as a descriptor, but it doesn’t feel erotic or smutty to me.

    17. A Nocturne
    This is a very beautiful scene, and I like how gently it’s written. I wish there was a tad more action – the last paragraph left me wanting more.

    18. Scent into Heat
    Very sexy, I like how you played with all of the senses in this one, especially smell. This simple story really made this act very erotic. Lovely!

    19. Moonlit Lovers
    This is so romantic while being erotic. I especially love how the moon ties through the entirety of the story. There was a few parts that pulled me away from the action – for example, “The circling turned into rubbing” is not a line we need to understand the action in the story and it felt really abrupt as compared to how well the rest of the story flowed.

    20. The First Night
    Very nice – but I wish the story focused a little more on it being “a first” as the title alludes to. I would have loved some of the confidence we see mixed with some level of apprehension and uncertainty as well!

    21. Academy Award Winning Performance
    Wow, I love this one! A true full story here, with the right amount of build up and a very satisfying and enjoyable ending. Great lines, great descriptors, just great all around.

    22. Mating Rituals
    This is cute and I like where it was going, but I’m not totally sure it works for me. I love that this is a realistic situation between a husband/wife and I enjoyed the ending. There is a tense issue at the end (shivered).

    23. Her Guilty Pleasure
    I really love these descriptions and how you dove deeper into the feeling of pleasure and pain, really dissecting and intertwining the two in an expert way.

    24. Carnal Catharsis
    Ooh, this one felt very naughty to read, like a peeping tom perspective, even though it was clear the act was a mutual desire. I wish we could have dived deeper into “the centre of his own forbidden fantasies” as that really intrigued me when I first started reading. What were the fantasies? Why forbidden? Is he interested in his friend and his wife? Just his wife?

    25. 25 Momme Count
    I love where this was heading and always love to read about self play, but there was too much “telling” in this one for me. I want to know how it feels, down and dirty, rather than a play by play of what she’s doing.

    26. Midnight at the Bluenote
    This one is so sexy in such a subtle way. I love how the story flows, reading this was effortless and made me feel very tingly. Well done!

    27. More Than Friends
    I like how you tried to build the relationship between the two, but the details up front felt a little clunky and almost unnecessary, aside from the dream. Starting it with, “Lisa described her bondage dream to her friend Ted in accurate detail, until he couldn’t help but push her back on his sofa…” or something like that, would help us dive into the story a little quicker, which is what we’re craving!

    28. First Lesson
    I think this one has a lot of good details and a good flow, but the POV shift really pulled me out of the narrative. Are we in his head (He leaned in, close enough to feel his hot breath on her skin…makes me think we’re in his head?) but the rest of the story is in hers. I love the last line.

    29. What Do You Want?
    I love this one. This stood out, the way it’s written, the way it’s formatted, the short sentences, mixed with longer descriptions. I really enjoyed it.

    30. Following Instructions
    This story left me wanting more! I like how it develops the character and their personality, but it just didn’t have enough smut for me!

    31. Beneath His Gaze
    I love the thread of the scarf carrying us through to the end. You can feel the anticipation, which is difficult in a story this short. Your word choices were awesome.

    32. Viva Voce
    I love where this is heading, but it left me really wanting more. I like the slow action between the dialogue a LOT and I appreciated how you tied the translations to the action between the two.

    33. Kei Conquered
    I struggled with this one. The flow feels off, a little awkward, a little abrupt in places, maybe because of some of the word placements. I think this has a lot of potential, it just needs to be fiddled with a little bit to make sure the flow carries through the full piece.

    34. A Dark Little Corner
    I like this one and I’m certainly a sucker for naughty things in public places, so it definitely suited my taste. I wish there was a bit more here though, either a bit more of the story (Who is “he”? Is this a place they meet up often? Why is she so turned on by him?)

    35. The Lesson
    I like the perspective of this piece, a couple accidentally wandering into this, what I assume is meant to be private, encounter. I like the description of what “this” is – not punishment or performance, the wife shivering, lots of nice details that draw you further into the story.

    36. Bound Flower
    Another great one! I loved the tie in with the flower and her body, it’s beautifully done and very sexy.

    37. So Greedy
    Lots to work with here, but some of the word choices didn’t feel natural to me, and almost made it a little awkward. I think this might work better if she was alone, to focus on her apprehension as she walks through the front room, with the sharp contrast at the end (which I love!) of her being greedy.

    38. Bound to Secrecy
    There is lots of telling the reader what exactly is going on in this one, which doesn’t make it terribly exciting to read, when it should be based on how naughty they’re getting! I want to feel what the character is feeling.

    39. Predator and Prey
    I like the details in this one, and how the story is really weaved through until the end. For me, there’s a bit too roughness and it almost feels like horror, especially with the ending, which is great, but didn’t suit my taste for this round.

    40. Lead the Way
    I like how this starts with teasing, anticipation, and follows them for those first few moments of uncertainty. Descriptions are great.

    41. Blowing the Organ
    Definitely exciting and I appreciate the character development, but certainly wish there was a bit more smuttiness. Maybe taking a line out from the front and giving us a little more on the end would help.

    42. Parting, Such Sweet Sorrow
    This one did the trick! Simple and sweet, direct dialogue, clear thoughts from the MC. I loved it.

    43. Forever Fisted
    From beginning to end, the theme and purpose was clear, and held true throughout the story. I like how the flow works, how once you start reading, you can’t quite stop!

    44. Winner Takes All
    I like the story build up, but wished for more smuttiness and sexiness here as well. Keep us wanting more! I want to know what he hears, how he feels, after that last sentence.

    45. The Sacrifice
    Lots of elements to this story and I like the mixture of some suspense, thriller, and smut. I do wish there was a little more detail on their encounter together before he’s sacrificed.

    46. Wet Cunt, Whetted Cunt
    This one started out really promising, but had me confused by the time I got to the end. Some word choices were a little too flowery for my liking, but that’s, as always, a matter of preference!

    47. Time and Familiarity
    I love where you went with this one, and I always enjoy some realism in these kinds of stories. It was sweet, yet sexy all rolled into one. Very nice!

    48. Peep Show
    Oh I really liked this one, but there were a few words up front that make me feel a little creeped out, which perhaps was the intention? “Crawled over her own exposed flesh” made me think of something icky, vs. feeling sexy.

    49. Prima Nocta
    Very nice scene setting, but the dialogue for me was a little stiff and pulled me out of the narrative early on.

    50. Nerves and Anonymity
    I like the thought behind this one, but the line “He sounded very almost too much” threw me off and pulled me away from the story to try and make sense of it. I think I know where you were going, but it threw off the flow for me. I do love the idea of the character being in the dark about who she’s about to meet…could be a full story!

    51. Memories of You
    I love the flow of this, I love that it’s a full on memory, with the last line pulling us back to the present. I think it’s expertly done, you get two full scenes in a short amount of space. Really well done.

    52. Shameless Chaperones
    Another one that really focuses on the act, but unique in its use of dialogue. I really loved the balance between action and dialogue here, it made the narrative flow very well.

    53. Easy Come
    I like the first paragraph a lot – expert scene setting, in a short amount of words for maximum impact. I struggled with the second paragraph with the action, however — some word choices were just not for me.

    54. The Widow
    A wonderful story packed into a short amount of words. You get invested in the character early on and I was waiting to see what would happen to her with Garrett. I loved the anticipation you feel as he pleads, as she admits to her fantasies. Always wishing there was more smut. 😉

    55. Virtuous Reward
    Maybe not my cup of tea, but I enjoyed how the story flowed, how you can clearly follow the character through each movement. I feel like there are a lot of details I would want to see from this, and again, feels like it could almost be its own full length story.

    56. Leap of Faith
    Very good job at building anticipation and excitement, though I do wish there was a little more showing between his wish for her to go back to bed, and when he says “do you know what you’ve done” – the dialogue makes it clear, but I would love to see what he looks like, hear that change in tone as his decision changes.

    57. Waiting for Permission
    I liked where this was going, but there’s a lot of usage of “her, he, she, etc.” in the beginning of sentences (the third paragraph, every sentence starts with “she/her”). Try switching up the order of some of your sentences to avoid reader fatigue.

    58. Night Bus to Pleasure
    I liked pieces of this, but I was thrown off by having a third party narrator. How would they know if everything was hidden by a huddle of coats that she was clawing for a grip, or that he pushed into her, etc.

    59. A Simple Solution
    Ha! I love this one. The first paragraph is laid out well, with good and simple descriptors. The story is unique and very relatable.

    60. Tender Longing
    Beautiful scene setting, though I think the line you chose felt like it was placed into this narrative and not inherently part of the story.

    61. Waiting For…
    I love that they’re waiting for someone and can’t seem to keep their hands/tongues off each other during this time! I do want more senses from the MC – how does it smell, does it feel, do they feel? Really immerse us in the story!

    62. A Carnal Conundrum
    I think I am alliteration-ed out! 😉

    63. Dante’s Club
    For me, this one had too many characters for such a short piece – Gary, Andrea, Susan, Gordon, (Dante?) and I’m just not sure where to focus.

    64. Her Pain, Their Pleasure
    I like how each act is described here, but the last line is so jam packed full of action, I had trouble following it. Maybe break that one up into two lines.

    65. Tahitian Shores
    I love how the line in the center of the story really fills it out. It’s a simple story, with plenty of details to keep us hungry.

    66. No Longer Hidden
    This one has a lot of telling – I want to know how this character is feeling, what excitement are they feeling as they’re having this interaction. How does this affect them?

    67. In Harmony
    This may just be a stylistic preference, but I felt like I was reading the same sentence over and over again here, and I wanted something to change it up. Try shifting the order of some sentences, so it doesn’t feel monotonous.

    68. Succumb to Seduction
    Very hot, but I am craving more details!

    69. Ex Machina
    For me, there was too much flowery, over complicated language in this one that really pulled me away from any action or storytelling.

    70. Office Space
    Some of this I absolutely adored (bottom two paragraphs), but some felt awkward, some sentence/word placement felt forced (first two paragraphs).

    71. Amy’s Board Room Reward
    I love this one a LOT. It has great character development, scene setting, storytelling all in a short amount of words. I love the last line. Well done.

    72. Starlit Surrender
    This is beautifully written, with great details that can help you feel some of the anticipation from the MC. For me, it’s a little flowery, as I have a preference of just stating things as they are, but I can certainly appreciate some very well written descriptions in that style. 🙂

    73. From Across the Room
    Very forward and a great short, sexy story. I definitely wanted more feeling from one or both of the characters. Like, what is Ruth feeling in that moment of surprise?

    74. Mother Superior’s Big Day
    This one certainly made me smile, and I love the act of defiance against Mother Superior! The secrecy and intentional naughtiness make this one so much fun!

    75. People Watching
    Love the premise of this one, and I love the idea of people watching. I do wish she left something to the imagination rather than outright saying what she had on underneath, perhaps “Am I wearing the suspenders and stockings, or am I wearing nothing at all?” but that again, is totally personal preference. Very nice!

    76. Longing
    Nice and simple, very sexy, and I love the distance between the two characters. I wish we were more in her head, more in tune to the feelings she’s feeling, rather than just what’s happening. Pull us into her experience!

    77. Exquisite Torture
    This one is nice but I definitely need more variety in terms of sentence structure. I think this has strong legs and with a few tweaks could be really powerful and sexy!

    78. An Unexpected Dinner Guest
    Exquisitely done! I love that this sentence was not forced into this story, it sits in the middle like it belongs there. In some, I couldn’t get into the third party viewer, but this one was done very well and really made me feel like I was reading a story as opposed to an excerpt (though I want to find out what happens after!)

    79. A New Life
    I loved where this was going and I appreciate the realistic take on a married couple, now empty-nesters and what their sex life might look like. However, I was pulled from the smuttiness with the additional details that may not have been necessary in this short format. Would love to read more.

    80. Sloppy Seconds
    Very, very, very nice. 🙂 Great flow, great suspense, satisfying ending. This piece has it all.

    81. Life Itself
    For me, this one dragged too much alliteration along with it, and although I didn’t mind it for a few sentences, I got lost somewhere along the way in the details.

    82. Jacob’s Fantasy
    Another one that does a great job with three people, with the third viewer coming into the action as it’s happening. I loved it.

    83. Best Friends Forever
    There was a lot going on in this one, and too many characters with “P” names to get me totally on board. I think it has legs to grow, but needs some refinement to really get into the juicy details.

    84. Slow Seduction
    Lots of telling in this one as opposed to how anyone is feeling. I think it has a lot of great details, but it’s really just guiding us through the process rather than immersing us into how the character is feeling.

    85. Pheromone Fete
    A little too flowery for my liking, and it kind of lost me in between the details, as beautifully as they were laid out.

    86. A Good Girl
    Another one very well done, I love the balance between sound, dialogue, descriptions. There’s playfulness with dominance, which are both hard to get right in such a short story.

    87. Blind Anticipation
    I love the descriptions here, how you really set the scene for readers with delicate precision. I want to feel how the MC feels, aside from just bounding their partner.

  12. Nice job, everybody! Sorry to see so many people go. 🙁

    My shortlist, again, ain’t: 4, 10, 11, 12, 14, 15, 21, 22, 26, 27, 35, 36, 41, 45, 47, 49, 58, 77, 78.

    14 – Good job making consent sexy.
    22 – I love when an author can write both smutty and funny. I felt this whack with the spoon and was conflicted. Sex! but…spaghetti…
    36 – I don’t see this technique too much; props for something different!
    49 – Another good job on making consent sexy!
    4 – I didn’t see that ending coming, and it was a fantastic twist.

  13. The Reverent. A tale of lust and the fear of damnation so brilliantly told. Saying her prayers by her widow’s bed is such a powerful image. It is the bedrock of the story. The last line wowed me. It was not just any hairbrush but a tortoiseshell hairbrush. Such attention to small details in such a short piece is incredibly pleasing. 10 points

    Viva Voce The interaction between the student and the professor is beguiling. Such an erotic story so deftly written. I loved the use of ‘comely’, ‘brassiere’, ‘old tweed’ and ‘pipe tobacco’. 9 points

    Mating Rituals I greatly enjoyed the humour in this story. The counterpoint between the nature programme and Harry’s growing excitement was cleverly done. ‘Pinching his swelling penis’ was so descriptive. 8 points

    Academy Award Winning Performance. The ending of this story is so good because it suddenly made me realise the bigger picture. The full import of the words that had gone before. I loved the line, ‘I tried to stifle my impending orgasm’. 7 points

    Succumb to Seduction A deceptively simple and highly erotic story. The use of the word ‘nightcap’ implied an older, more knowing couple, which contrasted so well with the innocence of the young woman, implied by the use of ‘manhood’. Nevertheless, she is willing to succumb. The fact she never knew their names just adds to the sense of a hungrily enjoyed seduction. 6 points

    Following Instructions By being tidy the man has failed. I love that. In one paragraph the writer has built up a picture of an impatient and lusty woman. She has a very particular set of rules which clearly are so easy to break. At lest the man will have another chance to impress. ‘Warm, hard body’, and ‘click closed’ were words I enjoyed. 5 points

    Night Bus to Please. By writing the line ‘I watched him’ this upper deck sex gains an added frisson. Voyeurism makes this story so much more interesting. So I’m not just enjoying the sex but I’m seeing it through the observer’s eyes. And I wonder about the observer, is it man or a woman? Do they catch this bus on purpose to watch night time shenanigans? ‘This is my stop’ is a splendid ending. 4 points

    Midnight at the Blue Note Sometimes we have to wait for our pleasure. And the waiting here is palpable. I love the very descriptive lines, ‘thick throaty cayenne-tinged honey’ and ‘fingers slide up the mic stand and you moan the first note’. This pleasure will be worth waiting for. 3 points

    Inches of Ink. Delightfully gritty and amusing. Written with enjoyable gusto. 2 points

  14. Feedback for the stories I voted for:
    22- Mating ritual- very clever use of the alliteration sentence. The story did not go as you would expect in an erotic writing competition but it did make me want to read more so therefore it got a vote.
    66- No Longer Hidden- A simple spanking scene. It does create a mental picture nicely.
    73- From across the Room- Nice use of the alliteration.
    79- New Life- I enjoyed this one as I can relate to it. It was nice to see someone use an implied older couple in their story.
    82- Jacob’s Fantasy- I enjoyed the led in to a possible threesome.

  15. I have written short feedback for all the entries once again. It will appear on my blog along with how I awarded my points when the comments here go live…
    Well done everyone who returned their entry. I have really enjoyed reading them all.

  16. The ‘continue the story’ challenge is one I find particularly difficult, well done to everyone who had a crack at it!

    Some feedback, especially for first-time entrants…

    A great rule of writing fiction is “show, don’t tell”. A staccato series of declarative statements separates the reader from the action and makes it harder to relate to the characters.
    Try and avoid cliches
    Not every noun needs an adjective.
    Don’t try and pack so much action into a short piece that there’s not enough room left for character (motivation, sensation, intent, reaction) – IMHO you’re always better off writing about what’s inside the people than relating a series of events

    Some personal preferences

    Certain words just kill the sexy vibe for me. They feel clumsy or awkward. Euphemisms like “member”, “tool”, “his/her ‘sex'”, and most of all “pussy” are an instant turn-off, as are clinical terms for anatomy, particularly genitalia.

    1. I also thought “soggy” and “wetlands” were off the mark. And personally, for me, “bud” for nipples and “flower” for vagina are eye rolls… as well as the ones you mention…

  17. This round had a few themes… SO MUCH SPANKING and SO MANY MASTERS!
    But there were also plenty of truly good stories. It was so hard to pick the best! Here are the ones that stood out to me!

    2- I really like the tone in this one. It really worked smoothly and it was hard to tell which was the original sentence.
    16- This was so much fun! Love how you fit a whole smutty crime caper into 125 words! Very well done!
    27 & 31-I really like the playfulness in these two! It makes them stand out among so many stories about being restrained.
    39- Very interesting! I love how you twisted this sentence into a horror micro story!
    45- I really enjoyed this! I had to go back to look at what the original sentence was!
    51- This really captured the intent of the original sentence (I think) and expanded on it! Nice job!
    61- You incorporated that original sentence in there very smoothly!
    62- Hahaha! That was an impressive take on the original sentence!
    63- Nice twist on the erotic!
    67- Beautiful piece! I love how you structured this. Very unique!
    69- This was a brilliant piece of micro fiction! I don’t know where you came up with this, but I thought it was brilliant!
    70- Love the title of this and you did a great job blending the original sentence in!
    71- This is a very clean, very complete, and very hot story! Well done!
    80- This was super hot! I love the direction you took the original sentence! My only complaint is the word “contribution”… i would’ve liked a steamier word here.
    82- I really enjoyed this expansion of the original sentence! It was hot and captured a lot of emotion.
    83- Yay! You used my sentence and I feel you really did it justice! I loved how you built your story up to my sentence and made it flow right into it. Great job!
    84- I really loved this scene but got distracted by the tenses. The original sentence has a past tense verb and a future tense, so I think putting your parts of the story in the present tense would work better and really amp up the heat!

  18. The stories that grabbed my interest the most were the ones that took the sentence from the first assignment and did something more with it, adding layers of a story (plot, humor, etc) to it, and not just insert it into a scene.
    Another thing that drew my attention was how well that sentence fit in within the story from a perspective of tense, tone, and turn of phrase.
    What is hilarious is that I’m getting this clarity as I sit here trying to judge other entries; would have probably helped me more had I had these insights when I was writing my own!

    7 – Fisting is I think a pretty niche kink, but you took it and added a different spin to it. That aside, the evocative writing describing the situation was very good too.

    8 – The Rd 1 entry you used was one of my favourites then, and I really liked what you did with it here. There was the joy of fresh and forbidden love throughout the piece that made it shine.

    16 – A dab of history and comedy took a kinda-clumsy line and made a memorable snippet out of it, good work here.

    22 – Brilliant! You took what was a sensual and somewhat delicate line and used it in a surprising and quite amusing context, loved this, my favourite entry of the round.

    51 – This one is sweet. I like the good ol’ romance in this piece. Another one that took a cumbersome alliterative piece from the first round and made it almost poetic.

    53 – The line you chose was a tricky one, I had found it over-alliterative in the first round but you made it work in this story by using that as a motif throughout the piece (‘cute’, ‘cuddled and kissed’, ‘coquettish’). It was a bold strategy but executed well and you have my vote.

    61 – You have a way with words, and I felt like a silent (and excited!) observer in the scene you created, with a twist at the end too.

    24, 44, 78, 82 – I feel for you four. You all took a strong entry from the first round, gave it your own unique spin, and made them strong entries of your own too.
    From the emotionally-piercing teardrop of #22, to the all-or-nothing gamble of #44, the spoken intent of #78 and the unspoken desire in #82, these were all very good.

  19. First of all let me compliment you all. This has been an amazing read! I admit that the decision to whom I should give my fifth and last vote was so difficult and now I feel it could have been any of you.
    I also admit that I had decided that I wouldn’t write any feedback this round at all but ended up with writing a few anyway.

    4
    This little story is quite charming and the sentence is well used. But her speculations about him are lacking, in my opinion. I would have liked to get a glimpse of her thoughts, be allowed some deeper details about what exactly stirs her imagination and ignites her fire. It is most unfortunate that I don’t and am not.
    However, the fact; that little helps once having those thoughts, I find to be cleverly written. It doesn’t really matter if one believes if it is a sin or not.

    12
    What is it with the word beckon? Suddenly I see it everywhere.
    Anyway, I adore that sentence (87), and to be honest I think it is very courageous to choose it. I find this even more poetic. It is not only the words that play but the picture painted is also most inspiring. It is an enchanting scenery, but unfortunately that is all I see. The story is there but yet to begin. And I need to express my doubts about the use of the word beckon two times … but who am I to judge such lovely writing just because a word being used twice. I want to compliment the courage and good taste.

    20
    Her feelings are most delightfully described. The trust she has likewise … This is such a well written scene, well balanced and on the edge of becoming a perfect story. We never get to know much else about her though, than the feelings she so convincingly has, about him we know he is to be trusted but the fact that he looks at her and smiles, is comforting and cleverly added I must admit and I am convinced she is in good hands.
    I am without doubt. This is so right!!
    Choosing 101 was not the easiest choice in my opinion. A strong sentence that easily could have overshadowed the rest. But it didn’t. I find it fits beautifully into this piece. Excellently well done!!!

    28
    This!!! There’s something about how it’s written that speaks to me. I recognise something else and something more than just words. I can feel it deep within. It is not much of a story though nor is there much scenery described … and I have never been fond of the word “pet” … that however matters little to me now. Only this moment exists … only this !!! The sentence chosen is made for this. It is absorbed and belongs here. Outstanding!

    47
    How breathtakingly lovely this is! A love story filled with devotion, both his and hers. Because even though it is only his thoughts being told, in between every line written I see hers reflecting his and I allow myself to read them.
    I need to point out, that the sentence suddenly speaks to me in a way I thought it never would and to manage to transform a sentence into something new, that is special. Well done! I give a golden star for that. This is so beautifully written, I can see them both most clearly, the life they have lived and still live and I am convinced. Actually I never wavered.

    56
    Congratulations to a well written piece! This story makes me curious, it is definitely candy for my imagination. I want more and I have made up possible “before and afters” already. I also want to compliment on the use of the sentence, it’s done very, very well and it successfully fits into the story. It is as if it is not written beforehand but meant for this. I want to say that the scenery that is described with so little words is convincing. I see both characters and room, the flickering lights and the dark shadows and all the things left out are there for my imagination to grab hold. So Yes, I believe a congratulations is in order and not an exaggeration because this is truly extraordinary. Oh’ yes. I almost forgot. The title is clever too I noticed. Well done indeed.

    Good luck to you all!!
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  20. In every marathon there is at least one assignment where the writers have to take the words of another writer, and expand on this. Back when I participated in the original marathon, I found this a very useful exercise, as you have to ‘feel’ the words of the other writer, and make sure the story you build around it, has the same ‘feel. The reader should not be able to distinguish between the writing styles of the two authors. The brief said to write a story, and that is what I was looking for when I did my feedback: whether the piece you have written can be classified as a story ~ Marie Rebelle

    1) THE GUILT TRIP
    I like the bit of ‘tongue-in-cheek’ writing here, and the conversation flows nicely. The sentence you used is incorporated nicely in this piece. I think it’s debatable whether this is a story, or the beginning of a story.

    2) THE RIVAL
    I do love the scene you have described here, and would honestly like to read the rest of the story. This is hot.

    3) WICKED WISHES
    This can be classified as a story, as there is a beginning, a middle and an end. The sentence you chose works nicely as an opening. Personally, I like to put thoughts in italics, to make it clear to the reader that it was a thought.

    4) THE REVERENT
    I really like this, but you left me with questions at the end. I have the feeling that there is more to follow, and this is only the beginning.

    5) THE LONG WAIT
    I have now read this a couple of times, but still this doesn’t feel like a story. I have the feeling you have tried to put too much in such a short piece.

    6) KEEPING WARM
    Where this is sexy and inviting, it’s the beginning to a story and not a full story. However, I do like how you have used the sentence from round 1.

    7) INCHES OF INK
    The story you are telling here is so hot, and I have clear images in my head of exactly what happened here.

    8) WHAT THEY DON’T KNOW
    Where I love the hotness of this, it’s more the beginning of a story than a full story. However, if you leave it to the reader to fill in the blanks, this can also pass for a full story. I think it depends on the kind of reader.

    9) SURROUNDED BY FRIENDS
    I really love this. It’s hot, steamy, very well written, but not a full story. The last sentence doesn’t have an active verb, and you could’ve solved this by adding it to the previous sentence.

    10) DOUBLE TROUBLE
    The scene here is quite hot, but also not a full story. If you changed the last sentence, it could have gone through for a story, but now she’s on the egde and the reader is waiting for something to happen.

    11) HIS MASTER’S WIFE
    This is a beautiful piece of writing and I am of the opinion that this is a full story. It feels completed, and doesn’t leave me with the question: what’s next?

    12) MIDSUMMER MANTLE
    Where this is beautiful writing, almost like poetry, and your writing perfectly fits the sentence from round 1, this is but the beginning of a story and not the full story. What happened after she beckoned?

    13) BEHIND CLOSED DOORS
    This can be seen as a full story, as there is closure at the end, but there are too many sentences starting with ‘-ly’ words for such a short piece, which takes the attention away from the story.

    14) TO ASK CONSENT
    This is really beautiful writing, and a complete story in so little words. Well done!

    15) OBEDIENT SCREAMS
    I like the image you have painted here, but am undecided whether I find this a full story or not.

    16) SLEIGHT OF HAND
    Definitely a full story, and one that made me smile. I like the ‘diamond-hard’ you have used, keeping the jewel theme in there.

    17) A NOCTURNE
    Stunning writing, and it’s clear that you have thought about every word. This is highly erotic, even though I know there are many who will disagree with me.

    18) SCENT INTO HEAT
    This is clearly a scene and the start to a story. You have nicely incorporated the sentence from round 1.

    19) MOONLIT LOVERS
    A nice story, with nice imagery, but the word ‘mount’ took me out of the story. Also, the last sentence, starting with ‘and’ would have been stronger of you just started with ‘We fell asleep…’
    Try to always avoid the word ‘then’ or words ‘and then’ to continue a story.

    20) THE FIRST NIGHT
    Starting every paragraph with a pronoun makes it feel like you are starting over again. Try to vary the first words of your sentences. Also, this is not a story, but a scene, as the last sentence implies there’s more to follow.

    21) ACADEMY AWARD WINNING PERFORMANCE
    I like the imagery, and even though the last line calls for this to continue, I can live with this being a story, and not merely a scene.

    22) MATING RITUALS
    I have not heard before that someone gets excited watching nature films *wink
    The last line is great, and completes this story, but the rest of this is not really erotic. I like how you have used the round 1 sentence though.

    23) HER GUILTY PLEASURE
    This works as a full story, and I like the pacing. One thing I would avoid is starting a sentence with ‘then’.

    24) CARNAL CATHARSIS
    I like this, but want to know what happened then, why was she crying? That makes this more the beginning of a story than a full story.

    25) 25 MOMME COUNT
    Where this can be a very sensual piece, and can be a full story in so little words, there are too many words that take me out of the story, and it mostly has to do with the crutch words such as ‘when’, and ‘after’ and ‘as’. In such a short piece, starting two sentences with the same words doesn’t work for me.

    26) MIDNIGHT AT THE BLUENOTE
    Lovely writing, but not a full story, as that first note at the end gives the impression there’s more to follow. I do like how you have used the sentence from the first round.

    27) MORE THAN FRIENDS
    A nice way to use the sentence, but also a scene and not a story. The sentence starting with ‘until the night…’ took me out of the story, as it feels like a statement, not a sentence. In a longer piece sentences without an active verb work fine, but not in a short piece like this.

    28) FIRST LESSON
    A beautiful piece of writing, perfect as the first paragraph of a story.

    29) WHAT DO YOU WANT?
    The way you have used the sentence from the first round comes across as a bit forced, but I do like this piece as a standalone story.

    30) FOLLOWING INSTRUCTIONS
    This can definitely work a standalone story, even though I like the promise at the end of this short piece. I like how you used the first round sentence.

    31) BENEATH HIS GAZE
    Oh yes, this is a hot short story. I love the image you have created here, and also love that you have used more alliteration than only that from the round 1 sentence.

    32) VIVA VOCE
    A very nice piece of writing, that can pass for a story, despite the ‘opening’ you leave at the end. Remember, all punctuation marks are always inside the inverted commas of dialogue.

    33) KEI CONQUERED
    Where this isn’t a bad piece, there’s too much that took me out of the story. A story reads better when dialogue starts on a new line. Towards the end madames’ should be madame’s and you forgot the inverted commas at the end.

    34) A DARK LITTLE CORNER
    A great story, from beginning to end, and especially the middle paragraph has some beautiful imagery. Lovely use of the sentence from round 1.

    35) THE LESSON
    Another piece that works for me as a full story. I love the way not only your characters, but we too are spectators to what is happening in that hotel room. Also love that you have used more alliteration.

    36) BOUND FLOWER
    A lovely scene, but not a full story. I do love the writing here though!

    37) SO GREEDY
    This is hot, and works as a full story. I like that the ‘wanted to be’ leaves it to the reader to fill in the blanks, having read the lines before. Great use of the sentence from round 1.

    38) BOUND TO SECRECY
    This reads more like the start to a story, than a full story on its own. It feels like you have wanted to put too much into a short piece.

    39) PREDATOR AND PREY
    This is a full story, well written from beginning to end.

    40) LEAD THE WAY
    This can work as a standalone story, even though I think some readers will want it to continue, to learn the details of just exactly what happens at this orgy. Nice use of the sentence from round 1.

    41) BLOWING THE ORGAN
    I like how you have used the sentence from the first round, even though the ‘sister’ seems out of place since earlier in the piece you have only used ‘Susan’. But it doesn’t take away that I like this piece.

    42) PARTING, SUCH SWEET SORROW
    Another piece that work as a full story, and a great way to elaborate on the sentence you chose.

    43) FOREVER FISTED: This must be one of the best things I have read about being fisted, and it works for me as a standalone story. Great use of the sentence!

    44) WINNER TAKES ALL
    I like the way you have added before the sentence, and used the sentence in the end to close your story.

    45) THE SACRIFICE
    A chilling encounter, good use of the sentence and there’s definitely an ending to this.

    46) WET CUNT, WHETTED CUNT
    Just like many other pieces, this is not a full story, as the last sentence leaves it open for more. Your writing is beautiful, almost poetry, but at the same time it can be difficult for some to read.
    47) TIME AND FAMILIARITY: I really like this. It’s soft and gentle and loving, and a beautiful use of the round 1 sentence.

    48) PEEP SHOW
    This is a story, with a clear beginning and end, and sexy imagery. Well done.

    49) PRIMA NOCTA
    I really like how you have used the sentence here, and the suspense you have built, but I definitely want to read more, making this the beginning of a story. It doesn’t take away that I love the suspense!

    50) NERVES AND ANONYMITY
    Is the sentence you have used from round 1 part of the message that has been sent? It would have improved the readability if you have put the text, that is part of the message, in italics. Also, I want to know what happens when Elle and Mark meet. This is more a first paragraph of a story than a story.

    51) MEMORIES OF YOU
    This works as a full story. Great start with the sentence, then some memories, and then the conclusion. Well done!

    52) SHAMELESS CHAPERONES
    They certainly are naughty! This can work for me as a full story.

    53) EASY COME
    Where I am definitely not fan of using words as ‘tool’ for a penis, or even the word ‘spunk’, I do feel that it fits well with the sentence you have chosen.

    54) THE WIDOW
    This, like so many others, is a scene, not a story. Also, make sure you add your spaces between the ‘-‘ and after ‘pleading’. Other than that, I think this scene can lead up to a hot story.

    55) VIRTUOUS REWARD
    A nice reward for sure, and this can work as standalone as it leaves the imagination to the reader.

    56) LEAP OF FAITH
    I had problems getting passed the first sentence, simply because it misses an active verb. The further I read, the sexier the story got, though.

    57) WAITING FOR PERMISSION
    This works well as a story, and I do like your writing. You had my attention from beginning to end.

    58) NIGHT BUS TO PLEASURE
    Brilliant. I do love a twist in a story!

    59) A SIMPLE SOLUTION
    Absolutely brilliant use of the first round sentence!

    60) TENDER LONGING
    I would have loved to read on… For me this only works as the beginning of a story, not a full story.

    61) WAITING FOR…
    Your last sentence implies that there is more to come, which makes this the beginning of a story and not a full story. I do, however, like the scene you have set.

    62) A CARNAL CONUNDRUM
    I like how you have made this about the assignments, and continued the theme of alliteration. I can understand that others might find this difficult to read but I love it.

    63) DANTE’S CLUB
    I like the little twist in the end, and the first round sentence has been put to good use here!

    64) HER PAIN, THEIR PLEASURE
    This works as a standalone story. Should ‘stripped’ have been ‘striped’?

    65) TAHITIAN SHORES
    This works for me as a standalone story. Nice use of the first round sentence.

    66) NO LONGER HIDDEN
    This is sexy, but one thing took me out of the story. First you talk about the slight pink of her skin after a spanking, and then of a pale skin. It seems to contradict each other?

    67) IN HARMONY
    This is some beautiful writing! Great use of the sentence, and great continuance of the tone of voice in the chosen sentence!

    68) SUCCUMB TO SEDUCTION
    I am sorry to say, but I miss a lot of punctuation in this sentence, for example:
    “They stripped naked she led him by his penis to the bed.” (this should be two sentences?)
    “My head was thrown back he placed the head of his manhood between my lips.” (also two sentences?)

    69) EX MACHINA
    I like the futuristic story, the sci fi, and actually want to know more, even though this works for me as a standalone story. Great writing, and great use of the first round sentence.

    70) OFFICE SPACE
    This is another piece that works for me as a standalone story. Great imaging here.

    71) AMY’S BOARD ROOM REWARD
    When using thoughts in writing, it’s better to put the actual thoughts in italics. What happened now is that I had to read the second sentence more than once to understand it. A comma after ‘worthwhile’ would’ve worked too. For the rest his can work as a standalone story.

    72) STARLIT SURRENDER
    A nice story, with promise for more, but also good enough to be a story on its own.

    73) FROM ACROSS THE ROOM
    I have difficult to understand their positions when the vibrator was slipped inside. Pulling her up against her, how could the vibrator ‘suddenly’ slip inside? Other than that this works as a story.

    74) MOTHER SUPERIOR’S BIG DAY
    I like the double meaning in your words. Remember to put thoughts in italics, as that improves the reading experience of your reader/

    75) PEOPLE WATCHING
    I like the game they are playing just as much as I like spinning stories around people when I observe them in real life. I would have added a ‘…’ after the ‘or’ at the end.

    76) LONGING:
    The sentence ‘Charged with hiding the reactions my body was having to the sensations you sent through the wireless connection’ took me out of the story as I had to read it three times to understand it fully. I think you can solve this by ‘adding’ it to the previous sentence using a comma. I like the sexy scene here.

    77) EXQUISITE TORTURE
    This works for me as a standalone story. I would have liked if you found synonyms for ‘sashes’ and ‘cicada’ and not used it twice in such a short piece.

    78) AN UNEXPECTED DINNER GUEST
    This seems to be the first paragraph of a story and not a story that can stand alone.

    79) A NEW LIFE
    It feels like you have tried to put too much in a short piece, but even so, this works as a standalone story.

    80) SLOPPY SECONDS
    I absolutely love this. Great use of the sentence, and great writing. Love the dialogue.

    81) LIFE ITSELF
    I have read this a couple of times and still can’t decide whether this is a scene or a story.

    82) JACOB’S FANTASY
    Oh yes, this can both work as a scene or a standalone story, leaving all the rest to your reader. Great use of the sentence from the first round.

    83) BEST FRIENDS FOREVER
    I love this. So much love and sexiness!

    84) SLOW SEDUCTION
    This definitely works as a standalone story because there’s closure in the last sentence. I would have opted not to put the sentence in italics.

    85) PHEROMONE FETE
    A lovely piece of writing, but at times a bit difficult to read, because of the flowery text. But it doesn’t tale away that your piece works as a standalone story. Beautiful.

    86) A GOOD GIRL
    A sexy spanking story, with a nice ending.

    87) BLIND ANTICIPATION
    This works for me as the beginning of a story, but not as a standalone story. However, I do like the writing!

    1. I appreciate you taking the time to not only run the Marathon but also give feedback to all!

    2. What Bella says. You’re amazing as a host and taking the time to give feedback to everyone. Thanks Marie,

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